Talk:Hudson Yards (development)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 09:01, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Opening statement
In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use ✅,, , ❌, , or , followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. — ♠Vami _IV†♠  09:01, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Review of this absolute unit will begin once I have slept :). — ♠Vami _IV†♠  09:01, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * While you're active, we're not quite done here yet. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  16:25, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * Major office tenants include or will include fashion company Tapestry, consulting firm BCG, and Alphabet subsidiary Sidewalk Labs. Can you elaborate, for consistency, what these last two companies are/do?
 * ✅. I replaced Alphabet Inc. with a description of what Sidewalk Labs does. epicgenius (talk) 22:39, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

Site and structures
The interactive map is a nice touch that I think I'll be emulating in the future. Must have been a pain to put together, though. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  13:54, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Actually, the interactive map was pretty easy. I just took all the coordinates from the buildings' respective articles. epicgenius (talk) 22:39, 3 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Could you expand on the two sentences under the section header with a general description of the development and its contents, present and future?
 * and was the first structure in Hudson Yards structure to be occupied by tenants The second "structure" is redundant.
 * , another word was intended. epicgenius (talk) 22:39, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
 * It is designed by Kohn Pedersen Fox Past-tense, please.
 * above ground level and be level with the High Line. to be level?
 * Bank of China, Deutsche Bank, Wells Fargo Wikilink these.
 * Another law firm, Milbank, Tweed, Hadley & McCloy, would occupy 250,000 square feet Would or will occupy that space?
 * They will move there. epicgenius (talk) 22:39, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
 * blowing 45 miles per hour (72 km/h) air Re-order this.
 * 60,000-US-gallon (230,000 l; 50,000 imp gal) rainwater storage tank. Ah, for the runoff water, right?
 * Yes. epicgenius (talk) 22:39, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
 * They will move there. epicgenius (talk) 22:39, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
 * blowing 45 miles per hour (72 km/h) air Re-order this.
 * 60,000-US-gallon (230,000 l; 50,000 imp gal) rainwater storage tank. Ah, for the runoff water, right?
 * Yes. epicgenius (talk) 22:39, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Yes. epicgenius (talk) 22:39, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

Neighboring projects

 * I question the need for this section. After all, it's not about the Hudson Yards. I suggest condensing and moving this section to "site and structures" with a description of the general location.
 * Moved up. epicgenius (talk) 22:39, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

History

 * which would have risen 1,750 feet, Put in a Template:Convert here for our Metric-using friends.
 * In June 2005, Sheldon Silver voted against the stadium, definitively eliminating the possibility of support at the state level and the possibility of the stadium's construction. Sorry, who, and why are they important?
 * Sheldon Silver, convicted felon who served as Speaker of the New York State Assembly from 1994 until 2015. epicgenius (talk) 23:13, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
 * master plan known as "Hudson Place" and "Hudson Green" When did this property become known as Hudson Yards?
 * These are completely different. "Hudson Place and Hudson Green" was just one of the proposals that was considered and rejected prior to the current Hudson Yards master plan. As stated later on, Tishman Speyer, and later Related Companies, were ultimately selected. epicgenius (talk) 23:13, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Ah, my bad. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  04:42, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * After pilings for the Shed adjacent to 15 Hudson Yards were completed, construction on the Shed began in mid-2015. This can be shortened; see: "After its pilings were completed, construction on The Shed began in mid-2015 adjacent to 15 Hudson Yards."
 * ✅, but went with another wording. epicgenius (talk) 23:13, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅, but went with another wording. epicgenius (talk) 23:13, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

Financing and ownership

 * While a New York Times article Replace with "The New York Times".
 * described the $6 billion as "tax breaks", Wouldn't this be a tax break? And if it's not a tax break, it kind of undermines that narrative to describe the package as $6 billion in investments and tax breaks.
 * These were multiple tax breaks, not a single tax break. These are described in the next few sentences. epicgenius (talk) 16:36, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Right, but I don't know if the little more than $1.36 billion is referring to that package. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  17:10, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Nevermind, missed that you changed the text. We're good to go now. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  17:11, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Nevermind, missed that you changed the text. We're good to go now. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  17:11, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Tenants

 * and Alphabet subsidiary Axe.
 * Repeated citations here: and Facebook once it opens.[35][36] 50 Hudson Yards would also be occupied by Facebook.[35][36]
 * Repeated citations here: and Facebook once it opens.[35][36] 50 Hudson Yards would also be occupied by Facebook.[35][36]

Design

 * Citation [187] is repeated without interruption in the first paragraph.