Talk:Human–lion conflict

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HelloJuliaD123 (talk) 16:45, 2 April 2015 (UTC)

Julia, Overall, this article you wrote is dense in facts and really interesting to read! The article is cohesive and you obviously know what you are writing about and have the references to back it up. References also look good since you cited one sentence with several citations for example. I would consider making some formatting improvements (sub categories etc). It is again dense, but I was a bit lost in the middle. This might just be a matter or adding headings and sub headings to make the article more visually appealing. Also adding headings is a good way to "summarize" in a way so the reader can focus on absorbing the information. (things like: Impacts, Suggestions, Financial losses, that sort of thing)

I would primarily suggest linking a good number of the terms you used to their actual articles. (this is tricky since you are writing a part of an article- but if you are going to choose to make this a separate article, that would be helpful because I, average person who doesnt know much about lion). Your language is also at times advanced maybe for the average reader who just wants to look up this article (for example, mitigate- i know what that word means but others may not). Based from the class review, I feel like simpler sentences and ideas are best for this unit.

I personally dont know if there is anything necessary to add to this article because there is a lot of information. My only suggestion is adding headings! I would also make sure you are not repeating information from the full LION article.

Great article!

Kim ENGW3307 (talk) 22:59, 4 April 2015 (UTC)

Tuberculosis in lions
One issue this article does not presently address is the threat to lion populations from tuberculosis which they acquired through interaction with humans and their livestock and indirectly via buffalo infected with bovine TB strains.
 * Sources
 * {{cite journal|title = {Pulmonary Tuberculosis in an African Lion (Panthera leo)| author = {last1=Morris |first1=P. J. |last2=Thoen |first2=C. O. |last3=Legendre |first3=A. M. |journal = Journal of Zoo and Wildlife Medicine |volume =27| number =3 |date=September 1996 |pages=392-396 |jstor=20095595 |ISSN=10427260}}
 * {{cite journal|last1=Groom|first1=Rosemary J.|last2=Funston|first2=Paul J.|last3=Mandisodza|first3=Roseline|title=Surveys of lions Panthera leo in protected areas in Zimbabwe yield disturbing results: what is driving the population collapse?|journal=Oryx|date=10 February 2014|volume=48|issue=03|pages=385–393|doi=10.1017/S0030605312001457}}
 * {{cite journal|title = {Pulmonary Tuberculosis in an African Lion (Panthera leo)| author = {last1=Morris |first1=P. J. |last2=Thoen |first2=C. O. |last3=Legendre |first3=A. M. |journal = Journal of Zoo and Wildlife Medicine |volume =27| number =3 |date=September 1996 |pages=392-396 |jstor=20095595 |ISSN=10427260}}
 * {{cite journal|last1=Groom|first1=Rosemary J.|last2=Funston|first2=Paul J.|last3=Mandisodza|first3=Roseline|title=Surveys of lions Panthera leo in protected areas in Zimbabwe yield disturbing results: what is driving the population collapse?|journal=Oryx|date=10 February 2014|volume=48|issue=03|pages=385–393|doi=10.1017/S0030605312001457}}
 * {{cite journal|title = {Pulmonary Tuberculosis in an African Lion (Panthera leo)| author = {last1=Morris |first1=P. J. |last2=Thoen |first2=C. O. |last3=Legendre |first3=A. M. |journal = Journal of Zoo and Wildlife Medicine |volume =27| number =3 |date=September 1996 |pages=392-396 |jstor=20095595 |ISSN=10427260}}
 * {{cite journal|last1=Groom|first1=Rosemary J.|last2=Funston|first2=Paul J.|last3=Mandisodza|first3=Roseline|title=Surveys of lions Panthera leo in protected areas in Zimbabwe yield disturbing results: what is driving the population collapse?|journal=Oryx|date=10 February 2014|volume=48|issue=03|pages=385–393|doi=10.1017/S0030605312001457}}
 * {{cite journal|title = {Pulmonary Tuberculosis in an African Lion (Panthera leo)| author = {last1=Morris |first1=P. J. |last2=Thoen |first2=C. O. |last3=Legendre |first3=A. M. |journal = Journal of Zoo and Wildlife Medicine |volume =27| number =3 |date=September 1996 |pages=392-396 |jstor=20095595 |ISSN=10427260}}
 * {{cite journal|last1=Groom|first1=Rosemary J.|last2=Funston|first2=Paul J.|last3=Mandisodza|first3=Roseline|title=Surveys of lions Panthera leo in protected areas in Zimbabwe yield disturbing results: what is driving the population collapse?|journal=Oryx|date=10 February 2014|volume=48|issue=03|pages=385–393|doi=10.1017/S0030605312001457}}

I hope someone can use this Roger (Dodger67) (talk) 16:15, 31 July 2015 (UTC)