Talk:Human trafficking in Nepal

Restructuring and Editing the page
The current “Human Trafficking in Nepal” article is flagged for multiple issues including lack of neutrality and depending too much on a single source. In addition to being scant on citations, the current page draws almost entirely on US government sources, which could create a highly biased picture. Furthermore, the article is also tagged for requiring cleanup and need too be “Wikified” to meet quality standards.

I plan on fixing the above issues by rewriting and restructuring this page, using and citing multiple varied sources, and exploring this issue thoroughly and systematically. First, I plan on restructuring it into a more logical and reader-friendly organization. I also plan on a more systematic and logical exploration of the issue from multiple angles such as human rights, policy, legislation, and women's studies. In terms of content, the article currently contains valid information but findings are rarely cited. I plan on not only cleaning up the information, but also exploring many of the most important aspects of trafficking in Nepal that are currently inadequately addressed in the article, including causes and drivers of trafficking, types of trafficking, the process, and critiques of prevention efforts by governments and NGOs.

Currently, the page is divided into large, unwieldy chunks of a tremendous introduction, and the sections "Prosecution", "Protection", "Prevention" and "Organizations". I plan on retaining and citing much of information that has scholarly support but I plan on revamping this into the following sections: "Overview" will define human trafficking and briefly introduce the issue in Nepal. "Types of Trafficking" will explore the realities of sex trafficking and labor trafficking in Nepal and how they can intersect. "Supply Factors" will examine characteristics of victims in terms of geographical origin, age, SES, caste, and life circumstances and those of their recruiters and traffickers, and the socioeconomic and cultural factors that make victims vulnerable. "Demand Factors"will explore main destinations and the kinds of forced work victims end up performing at each, and the socioeconomic and cultural factors that drive this demand. "Challenges after trafficking" will address barriers in rehabilitation survivors face such as HIV/AIDS and the ostracism. "Anti-trafficking legislation" will examine the legal measures taken by Nepal and the international community, and the section will also explore the problems of enforcement. "Anti-trafficking Intervention by NGOs" will explore specific kinds of programs and initiatives undertaken by NGOs in prevention and rehabilitation, and will include a subsection on criticisms of their programs.

Any comments or suggestions are greatly appreciated! Thanks! Jennyxwen (talk) 22:38, 6 March 2012 (UTC)

=Peer-Review=

Contributions to both the organization and content of the article are excellent. There is just one suggestion that I have for you and that is to clean up your references. You do not need to cite the same source again and again. 'Same reference used more than once' section of Referencing for beginners should be the perfect resource for you to learn how to cite a source once and then refer to it multiple times. This will not only help referencing easier for any future edits but will also make the references section reader-friendly. Overall, this article is an awesome contribution to the Wikipedia encyclopedia. Keep up the great work!

Kjhooda (talk) 03:19, 8 April 2012 (UTC)

Thanks Khaval! I will edit the references. Thanks! Jennyxwen (talk) 19:26, 9 April 2012 (UTC)

Suggested Revisions
Great article, Jenny! Based on your Talk page, it is clear you have greatly improved upon it in terms of neutrality and references; your contributions have also made the entry much more comprehensive overall. I have only a few suggestions:


 * First, it seems that the second paragraph (the small one immediately following your introductory paragraph) could be moved to/combined with 1 Overview, as their purposes seem rather similar.


 * Secondly, I believe it would be appropriate for your entry to provide external links to the various NGOs listed in 7.1 Efforts. External links should be helpful as a guideline.


 * Finally, the subheading 7.1 Efforts may not even be necessary, given that this subsection's content is already described by the heading, 7 Anti-trafficking Efforts by NGOs. I don't mean that you should remove this subsection altogether--just the subheading. 7.2 Criticisms and 7.3 Challenges are fine as they stand; these headings clearly distinguish their following content as more specific pieces of information within the overall Anti-trafficking efforts by NGOs section.

Again, great job! This article is so helpful in shedding light on human trafficking in a more specific domain; I look forward to seeing the finished product.

JoyceChou (talk) 15:00, 9 April 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for the suggestions Joyce! I'll make the suggested edits (I was only able to link to Maiti Nepal for the NGOs; the other ones don't have Wikipedia pages) Jennyxwen (talk) 19:26, 9 April 2012 (UTC)

suggestions
Jenny, I really enjoyed reading your article! You definitely explored the issue in detail and I especially enjoyed your ‘Legislation’ section because you approach solutions to the issue. I just had a few grammatical fixes, and I would comb your article to look out for noun-verb agreement. Great content! The sentence “Labor trafficking victims often end up in carpet and garment factories, embroidering sweatshops, brick-kilns, and others” seems out of place, as you were talking about sex work for the previous sentences. I would find a way to connect these two thoughts. •	In the sentence “Victims, especially girls and women are trafficked”, insert a comma after ‘women’, •	Change “Most common forms are sex trafficking, especially to non-brothels, and labor exploitation in unorganized informal sectors in Gulf states, such as domestic servitude.[4]” to ‘THE’ most common form [of work for victims] is sex trafficking •	Change “deserted by husband or the family” to “husbandS and familieS”, i.e. make them plural
 * I would eliminate the word ‘mainly’ in “Nepal is mainly a source country for men, women and children subjected to forced labor and sex trafficking.[1]” found in your intro.
 * I would change the word cabin to ‘cabins’ in “Mainly young girls and women are trafficked for sexual exploitation in places such as cabin”

Njeri Muturi (talk) 04:41, 11 April 2012 (UTC)

Thanks Njeri! I have made the edits you suggested, thanks for the attention to detail! Jennyxwen (talk) 21:27, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

Proposed Edits
Hello! I would potentially like to add a section to this page. While this page is about human trafficking in Nepal in general, it does not go very in depth about specific kinds of trafficking. I would propose to add a section specifically discussing sex trafficking in Nepal, because there is a lot of information about the topic that is not on Wikipedia. Feel free to check out my page for sources! Courtwang (talk) 04:13, 29 January 2016 (UTC)

Hey Courtney! Great job so far! I would add more of a Nepal-specified history, perhaps as a subcategory of the overview. Otherwise, good job! Also maybe make an overview chart for the risk factors for easy reading. DCirillo14 (talk) 03:26, 29 March 2016 (UTC)DCirillo14

Wikipedia Ambassador Program course assignment
This article is the subject of an educational assignment at Rice University supported by the Wikipedia Ambassador Program&#32;during the 2011 Q3 term. Further details are available on the course page.

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