Talk:Hunter Island (Bronx)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 10:46, 21 September 2018 (UTC)


 * I propose to review this nomination and will be reading the article in detail shortly. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:46, 21 September 2018 (UTC)

First reading

 * Starting with the "History" section:
 * The Hunters built a mansion in 1813. Were there still Hunters on the island by the end of the century? Were there other houses on the island?
 * "Hunter Island was closed and camping was banned," what year was that?
 * Reference 13 needs to be formatted in lower case.
 * By 1934, the island seems to have been under the control of the New York City parks commission, how did that come about?
 * You mention places like "Orchard Beach" and "Pelham Bay Park" but it would be useful to know where they are situated.
 * In fact it would be useful to have a section before "History" describing the island, its size location and relationship to other locations.
 * Now that I have got on to the "Mansion" section, I see a number of the points I raised above are covered. It might be best to insert most of the "Mansion" section into their appropriate chronological place in the "History" section.
 * That's all for the moment, I will continue later. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:25, 21 September 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the comments. To address each of your points: epicgenius (talk) 03:26, 22 September 2018 (UTC)
 * No, it was occupied by the Society of Little Mothers. Yes, there were other buildings. I just added some details.
 * I think it was closed circa 1920s. This is one of those islands that don't really exist anymore, like Barren Island (also in NYC).
 * Fixed ref 13.
 * The island was under NYC Parks control by 1888, when Pelham Bay Park was established. The park includes this island.
 * Clarified locations. PBP is the park where this island is located. Orchard Beach is the beach that this island is now attached to.
 * I'll add a geography section later.
 * I just moved that info up. epicgenius (talk) 03:26, 22 September 2018 (UTC)


 * I think that the article is much better with the History section arranged chronologically.
 * I added a couple of sentences to clarify the bit about camping being banned.
 * "as well as granite with migmatite dikes as well as veins" - repetition of "as well as"
 * "some mugwort and Ailanthus weeds" - A weed is a plant growing in the wrong place. Ailanthus is an invasive species of tree but mugwort is probably just part of the native vegetation.
 * I look forward to there being a short geography section.
 * "lichen in the boulders, a rare occurrence in New York City parks." - Perhaps "lichen-covered".
 * The lead is a bit short. It is meant to summarise the main text of the article for the folk who don't want to read the whole thing! Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:27, 22 September 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the further comments. I expanded the lead and added a geography section. I also appreciate the clarification on Ailanthus and mugwort, as well as on the camping. The repetition and "lichen-covered" phrasing have also been fixed. epicgenius (talk) 15:03, 22 September 2018 (UTC)


 * You have put a lot of effort into those improvements and I reckon the article now meets the GA criteria. Congratulations! Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:01, 23 September 2018 (UTC)