Talk:Hurricane! (American Dad!)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 01:20, 1 November 2011 (UTC)

Will review soon.  Ruby  2010/  2013  01:20, 1 November 2011 (UTC)

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 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Comments

 * There's one dab link


 * "...in response to a oncoming hurricane." -> an


 * Indicate Seth MacFarlane was the co-creator of all three shows in lead


 * "The episode was well-received by television critics, who praised the humor and cultural references. " -> its


 * "This episode was written by..." -> "Hurricane!"


 * featured... featured (use of same word in lead; switch it up)


 * For the production section, you jump into the "crossover event" pretty abruptly. I know the lead already talks about it, but you need to write the body as if the lead isn't there (hope that makes sense)


 * Tense issue: ''...event if this one receives successful ratings." -> received


 * Who is Mike Barker? A writer? Producer? For which series?


 * Make sure sentences with direct quotes end with a citation directly after sentence (Barker quote, look for others)


 * "In April 2011, the executives of the Fox Broadcasting Company..." Removed bolded


 * "MacFarlane later agreed with the decisions after being consulted with the executives of Fox, and a spokeswoman for the company later announced that the episode would air the succeeding season.[7]" Don't you mean MacFarlane consulted with the executives (rather than them consulting him)?
 * I'm not sure who came up to who first.


 * I think you should change casting to Writing and casting (b/c you mention the writers)
 * I just organized the section into one.


 * "...first time Henry made a guest appearance on the show since" the show -> American Dad


 * Why do you have two different quote box colors?
 * Removed other quote box.


 * Use consistent date formatting for refs


 * "...according to the Nielson ratings.[17]" Removed bolded


 * It could use another review or two for the reception section
 * "...Dyana Maria deemed the episode as "classic", expressing..." as -> a


 * Were there any cultural references you could add? (reliably cited of course)

I'll place the review on hold for a week while the above comments get addressed. Thanks,  Ruby  2010/  2013  02:59, 1 November 2011 (UTC)
 * The cultural references will not be reliable sourced, unfortunately. As for the reviews, those three were the only ones available. I can reformat it to make it look larger. - DAP388 (talk) 00:59, 3 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Should be good now. :) - DAP388 (talk) 22:06, 4 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Happy to pass this one for GA.  Ruby  2010/  2013  23:00, 4 November 2011 (UTC)