Talk:Hurricane Barry (2019)/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hurricane Noah (talk · contribs) 02:26, 6 October 2020 (UTC)

Will do this one tomorrow and/or Wednesday. Noah Talk 02:26, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I really do apologize, but I won't be able to do this until the weekend (ie Friday night and Saturday) due to a serious google security breach as well as additional RL issues. I am concerned about the mental well-being of one of my friends and need to be there for him. Noah Talk 16:37, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * Hurricane Barry was an asymmetrical Category 1 hurricane that made landfall in Louisiana in July 2019. I would give some general details about impact in the first sentence rather than details about Barry's structure.
 * over the Midwest on July 2 It's okay... you can say Kansas here as the midwest is a large region.
 * The system eventually emerged into the Gulf of Mexico on July 10, whereupon the National Hurricane Center (NHC) designated it as a potential tropical cyclone later. Again, this is a bit too vague. Could you add something about the state it emerged from? The GoM is rather large.
 * Early on July 11, the system developed into a tropical depression and later into the second named storm of the 2019 Atlantic hurricane season. On July 13, Barry attained maximum 1-minute sustained winds of 75 mph (120 km/h), with a minimum central pressure of 993 millibars (29.3 inHg), becoming the first hurricane of the season. Okay... this is where the lead gets a bit choppy. If you want to relate Barry to the season, you should do this directly after you mention the "wettest records". Say Barry was the second named storm and first hurricane of the 2019 Atlantic hurricane season. and make sure to source it with Atlantic HURDAT (there is a template on Wikipedia for this). As for the actual met... The system developed into a tropical depression early on July 11 and strengthened into a tropical storm later that day. Barry continued to strengthen over the next couple of days, peaking around 12:00 UTC on July 13 as a Category 1 hurricane with maximum sustained winds of 75 mph (120 km/h) and a pressure of 993 mbar. or something similar.
 * Later that day, Barry made landfall on Marsh Island and second landfall in Intracoastal City, Louisiana, both times as a Category 1 hurricane. --> Later that day, Barry made its first landfall on Marsh Island and another in Intracoastal City, Louisiana, both times as a Category 1 hurricane.
 * Landfall is overlinked in the lead.
 * Barry subsequently weakened to tropical storm status soon after due to land interaction. --> After moving inland, Barry quickly weakened, falling to tropical depression status by July 15. (Note: I removed the TS mention as it wouldn't take much for a 5 mph fall)
 * 'The storm continued weakening, and finally degenerated into a remnant low over northern Arkansas on July 15, before dissipating on July 19. The bolded part really isn't needed. I would start this with something like "Barry tracked (direction) and degenerated into a remnant low..."
 * Barry was one of four hurricanes to hit Louisiana at that intensity in the month of July At what intensity?
 * Numerous Tropical Storm watches and warnings were issued ahead of the storm. As Barry was predicted to make landfall as a hurricane, the Tropical Storm warnings were later upgraded into Hurricane warnings. Tropical storm and hurricane should not be capitalized.
 * Officials warned of significant impacts from Barry, including high winds, storm surge, and several feet of rain. I dont see why this should be mentioned in the lead. If these effects did occur, then you simply state it as such.
 * Barry subsequently weakened to tropical storm status soon after due to land interaction. --> After moving inland, Barry quickly weakened, falling to tropical depression status by July 15. (Note: I removed the TS mention as it wouldn't take much for a 5 mph fall)
 * 'The storm continued weakening, and finally degenerated into a remnant low over northern Arkansas on July 15, before dissipating on July 19. The bolded part really isn't needed. I would start this with something like "Barry tracked (direction) and degenerated into a remnant low..."
 * Barry was one of four hurricanes to hit Louisiana at that intensity in the month of July At what intensity?
 * Numerous Tropical Storm watches and warnings were issued ahead of the storm. As Barry was predicted to make landfall as a hurricane, the Tropical Storm warnings were later upgraded into Hurricane warnings. Tropical storm and hurricane should not be capitalized.
 * Officials warned of significant impacts from Barry, including high winds, storm surge, and several feet of rain. I dont see why this should be mentioned in the lead. If these effects did occur, then you simply state it as such.
 * Numerous Tropical Storm watches and warnings were issued ahead of the storm. As Barry was predicted to make landfall as a hurricane, the Tropical Storm warnings were later upgraded into Hurricane warnings. Tropical storm and hurricane should not be capitalized.
 * Officials warned of significant impacts from Barry, including high winds, storm surge, and several feet of rain. I dont see why this should be mentioned in the lead. If these effects did occur, then you simply state it as such.
 * Officials warned of significant impacts from Barry, including high winds, storm surge, and several feet of rain. I dont see why this should be mentioned in the lead. If these effects did occur, then you simply state it as such.
 * Officials warned of significant impacts from Barry, including high winds, storm surge, and several feet of rain. I dont see why this should be mentioned in the lead. If these effects did occur, then you simply state it as such.

Done with the lead. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 21:22, 11 October 2020 (UTC)


 * I will return to do the rest in a bit. Noah Talk 20:11, 11 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Lead is reviewed. Noah Talk 20:31, 11 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I’m glad you didn’t immediately fail it. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 20:55, 11 October 2020 (UTC)

Meteorological history

 * You should avoid starting sentences with dates as it chops off the flow of the prose.
 * a broad low pressure area exited from the Florida Panhandle into the northeastern Gulf of Mexico, Hyphenate "low pressure" area (check for the other two occurrences in the met) and delete the bolded text. After panhandle, add "and tracked".
 * scattered thunderstorms link Atmospheric Convection.
 * ❌ Why? ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 22:55, 11 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Because thunderstorm activity and convection are the same concept. Noah Talk 22:59, 11 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I still think people know what scattered thunderstorms are. I think I should link convection to atmospheric convection, thoug.h ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 23:43, 11 October 2020 (UTC)
 * It moved southwestward and curved to the west. why?
 * . The TCR only saws that it moved east of a mid-level ridge.~ Destroyeraa 🌀 22:56, 11 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Weather system You don't need to say this in the article. You can simply say system.
 * due to its threat of producing tropical storm force winds over the United States within a few days. You could simplify this to "due to the threat it posed to the United States".
 * At that time, the low pressure area was experiencing some northerly wind shear, which was expected to decrease. link Wind shear#Vertical component on wind shear.
 * The NHC described the atmospheric conditions, including water temperatures of over 86 °F (30 °C), as "ideal for intensification" You should tell the story of the storm, not the agency. The atmospheric conditions were NOT ideal given the shear. The NHC states in the source that atmospheric conditions would become ideal by 48h and beyond. You should say sea surface temperatures of 30–31 C to have the official term and since a range is given by the source.
 * Early on July 11, the system developed into a tropical depression in the northern Gulf of Mexico, about 200 mi (320 km) south of Mobile, Alabama. The depression quickly intensified into Tropical Storm Barry You should mention the UTC time for the first event and then say six hours later for the TS strength.
 * By that time, the thunderstorms had increased to the south of the circulation. You should clarify this is the system's circulation.
 * This was due to northerly wind shear and dry air near the center Which was the result of this? The banding or the lack of thunderstorms? You could clarify by saying "the latter". Also, I believe the TCR mentions this was mid-level dry air.
 * Despite the asymmetric structure of the storm, Barry gradually intensified. Why would that hinder intensification? This is quite vague.
 * ✅. Removed. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 01:39, 17 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The NHC estimated that Barry attained Category 1 hurricane status by 12:00 UTC that day, concluding that Barry was producing a small area of hurricane-force winds. This was based on observations from the Hurricane Hunters, Doppler weather radar wind estimates of 75 mph (121 km/h), and recorded sustained winds of 72 mph (116 km/h) at Eugene Island oil field.[11] Simultaneously, the storm reached its peak intensity, with a minimum central pressure of 993 millibars (29.3 inHg).[2] The first and last sentences could be simplified a good bit. You need not mention the NHC here. You should simply mention the peak at 75 mph/993 mbar and then the observations that back it up. You will need to link hurricane hunters though. Also, what kind of sustained winds?
 * Hurricane hunters already linked. Rest was chopped down. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 01:39, 17 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Now inland, the hurricane quickly weakened to tropical storm status just six hours after its upgrade. --> "Moving inland, ... status three hours after landfall." I recommend changing the sentence to that because the decline wasn't particularly notable. Not sure why AccuWeather is needed here though.
 * Progressing farther inland, We get it already.. jk
 * Barry further weakened to a tropical depression at 21:00 UTC on July 14 over Northwestern Louisiana Not supported by TCR; check time and location.
 * At 21:00 UTC on July 15, Barry degenerated into a remnant low over northern Arkansas,[15] Also changed in post-season reanalysis.
 * which degenerated into a trough a day later over southern Missouri. there is an exact time for this.
 * During the next several days, Barry's remnant moved eastward while gradually weakening, with the WPC issuing their final advisory on the storm at 21:00 UTC on July 17.[16] Early on July 19, Barry's remnant was absorbed into another frontal system off the coast of New Jersey.[17] The NHC cut the track off at 12:00 UTC on July 16. I would recommend you change the article to match this. Noah Talk 02:15, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Barry was one of four hurricanes to hit Louisiana at Category 1 intensity in the month of July, the others being Bob in 1979, Danny in 1997, and Cindy in 2005.[1] Is there a reason that this poor guy is by himself? I think it should be mentioned right after the landfalls.
 * Hurricane hunters already linked. Rest was chopped down. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 01:39, 17 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Now inland, the hurricane quickly weakened to tropical storm status just six hours after its upgrade. --> "Moving inland, ... status three hours after landfall." I recommend changing the sentence to that because the decline wasn't particularly notable. Not sure why AccuWeather is needed here though.
 * Progressing farther inland, We get it already.. jk
 * Barry further weakened to a tropical depression at 21:00 UTC on July 14 over Northwestern Louisiana Not supported by TCR; check time and location.
 * At 21:00 UTC on July 15, Barry degenerated into a remnant low over northern Arkansas,[15] Also changed in post-season reanalysis.
 * which degenerated into a trough a day later over southern Missouri. there is an exact time for this.
 * During the next several days, Barry's remnant moved eastward while gradually weakening, with the WPC issuing their final advisory on the storm at 21:00 UTC on July 17.[16] Early on July 19, Barry's remnant was absorbed into another frontal system off the coast of New Jersey.[17] The NHC cut the track off at 12:00 UTC on July 16. I would recommend you change the article to match this. Noah Talk 02:15, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Barry was one of four hurricanes to hit Louisiana at Category 1 intensity in the month of July, the others being Bob in 1979, Danny in 1997, and Cindy in 2005.[1] Is there a reason that this poor guy is by himself? I think it should be mentioned right after the landfalls.
 * which degenerated into a trough a day later over southern Missouri. there is an exact time for this.
 * During the next several days, Barry's remnant moved eastward while gradually weakening, with the WPC issuing their final advisory on the storm at 21:00 UTC on July 17.[16] Early on July 19, Barry's remnant was absorbed into another frontal system off the coast of New Jersey.[17] The NHC cut the track off at 12:00 UTC on July 16. I would recommend you change the article to match this. Noah Talk 02:15, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Barry was one of four hurricanes to hit Louisiana at Category 1 intensity in the month of July, the others being Bob in 1979, Danny in 1997, and Cindy in 2005.[1] Is there a reason that this poor guy is by himself? I think it should be mentioned right after the landfalls.
 * During the next several days, Barry's remnant moved eastward while gradually weakening, with the WPC issuing their final advisory on the storm at 21:00 UTC on July 17.[16] Early on July 19, Barry's remnant was absorbed into another frontal system off the coast of New Jersey.[17] The NHC cut the track off at 12:00 UTC on July 16. I would recommend you change the article to match this. Noah Talk 02:15, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Barry was one of four hurricanes to hit Louisiana at Category 1 intensity in the month of July, the others being Bob in 1979, Danny in 1997, and Cindy in 2005.[1] Is there a reason that this poor guy is by himself? I think it should be mentioned right after the landfalls.
 * Barry was one of four hurricanes to hit Louisiana at Category 1 intensity in the month of July, the others being Bob in 1979, Danny in 1997, and Cindy in 2005.[1] Is there a reason that this poor guy is by himself? I think it should be mentioned right after the landfalls.


 * I will come back and review the rest of the met tonight. I did paragraph one for now. Noah Talk 21:18, 11 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The rest is done. Noah Talk 02:15, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

Preparations
Disclaimer that the preps may still need to be expanded based upon what you discover when you search for new info. I am just reviewing what is already there for now. Noah Talk 02:29, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * You need to make sure the watches and warnings are all together in this section. You should cite the TCR once for the whole paragraph. You can mention the specific UTC times that they were issued.
 * Due to United States Army Corps of Engineers fears that levees would be overtopped in Plaquemines Parish, Louisiana by storm surge atop elevated streams, a mandatory evacuation was ordered for the parish effective on the morning of July 11. The evacuation order affected approximately 8,000–10,000 residents. Add a comma after LA. The source mentions historically high river levels, which likely is worth noting here. Personally, the first sentence should be rewritten to just state what the fears were. I would take the part about the order being issued and add it to the second sentence. Eg. "a mandatory evacuation was ordered for the parish effective the morning of July 11, affecting 8,000–10,000 residents."
 * Carnival Valor - Ship name needs to be italicized.
 * New Orleans mayor Job title needs to be capitalized.
 * citing a Category 3 hurricane as the threshold I would rather this be "citing Category 3 status as the threshold".
 * Mississippi governor Job title needs to be capitalized.
 * I reviewed what is currently there. Noah Talk 02:53, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * citing a Category 3 hurricane as the threshold I would rather this be "citing Category 3 status as the threshold".
 * Mississippi governor Job title needs to be capitalized.
 * I reviewed what is currently there. Noah Talk 02:53, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Mississippi governor Job title needs to be capitalized.
 * I reviewed what is currently there. Noah Talk 02:53, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I reviewed what is currently there. Noah Talk 02:53, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

Impact
Disclaimer that the impact may still need to be expanded based upon what you discover when you search for new info. I am just reviewing what is already there for now. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 02:29, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Florida panhandle and Texas coast Both are referring to regions and should be capitalized.
 * Wind gusts reached 56 mph (91 km/h) at Sabine Pass, Texas.[2] This should belong in elsewhere section?
 * 6 to 9 in (150 to 230 mm) "6-to-9" and the same for the mm measurement.
 * ❌ Why? ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 12:59, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Because it is a compound adjective modifying the noun. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 13:11, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The strongest recorded winds on land was 66 mph (106 km/h) Subject verb agreement.
 * One tornado struck the Gentilly neighborhood in New Orleans, damaging two homes EF status?
 * Pinging . ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 12:59, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * It was in the article, but the NCDC never said anything about it. Therefore, I listed it as only a report.ChessEric (talk · contribs) 17:30, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Flooding should be linked earlier than it is.
 * Removed the link altogether. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 22:49, 17 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Louisiana coast Capitalize this as it is a region.
 * The most widespread power outages occurred where wind speeds were highest in Lafourche Parish and Terrebonne Parish, as well as eastern Baton Rouge This is a bit jumbled. "The most widespread power outages occurred in Lafourche and Terrebonne parishes, where wind speeds were highest, as well as in eastern Baton Rouge" would be better.
 * It also caused The Rolling Stones to postpone their July 14 show at the Superdome to July 15 due to Barry What is "it"?
 * Florida panhandle Capitalize this in the section for Florida.
 * In Panama City Beach The link should be here rather than where it is.
 * Five people were rescued 23 mi (37 km) southwest of Gulfport, Mississippi Comma after the state name.
 * 80,000 gallons Abbreviate to US Gal. Capital L for a liter.
 * The storm resulted in the closure of popular beaches, including those in Orange Beach and Gulf Shores. The storm caused the closures.
 * 8 inches (20 cm) make the measurement mm instead of cm.
 * Link Central Time Zone on CDT.
 * Clark County Humane Society --> The Clark County Humane Society
 * putting several animals at risk of drowning and hypothermia What happened to the animals?
 * ✅. Sadly, it killed a puppy, though the rest were rescued. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 12:45, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Make sure it is floodwaters throughout as flood waters is incorrect.
 * 16.59 inches (42.1 cm) Also needs to be converted to mm.
 * More than 60 mm (2.4 in) of rain fell in Toronto Specify Canada
 * the highest daily rainfall total in the month of July since 2013 Should be "its highest"
 * That's everything I found pending your additions. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 03:24, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * 8 inches (20 cm) make the measurement mm instead of cm.
 * Link Central Time Zone on CDT.
 * Clark County Humane Society --> The Clark County Humane Society
 * putting several animals at risk of drowning and hypothermia What happened to the animals?
 * ✅. Sadly, it killed a puppy, though the rest were rescued. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 12:45, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Make sure it is floodwaters throughout as flood waters is incorrect.
 * 16.59 inches (42.1 cm) Also needs to be converted to mm.
 * More than 60 mm (2.4 in) of rain fell in Toronto Specify Canada
 * the highest daily rainfall total in the month of July since 2013 Should be "its highest"
 * That's everything I found pending your additions. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 03:24, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * 16.59 inches (42.1 cm) Also needs to be converted to mm.
 * More than 60 mm (2.4 in) of rain fell in Toronto Specify Canada
 * the highest daily rainfall total in the month of July since 2013 Should be "its highest"
 * That's everything I found pending your additions. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 03:24, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * the highest daily rainfall total in the month of July since 2013 Should be "its highest"
 * That's everything I found pending your additions. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 03:24, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * That's everything I found pending your additions. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 03:24, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * That's everything I found pending your additions. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 03:24, 12 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Another tidbit is that you need to cite the text for each of the six storms you mention in the see also. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 03:32, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ❌ No, there are no sources and there doesn't need to be sources for adding storms to the see also section. The storms just need to be somewhat related.~ Destroyeraa 🌀 12:32, 12 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Would you have comments that you would like to leave for the article? <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 02:21, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Hurricanehink's review

 * "The second tropical or subtropical cyclone, second named storm" - do we need to get into subtropical cyclone? Can't you just do "The second named storm"?
 * ❌ because of a certain Jason Rees. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 14:51, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
 * What does that user have to do with the awkward grammar construction? ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 15:16, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
 * . ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 15:24, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
 * " falling to tropical depression stays on July 15" ?
 * Where is the source for - "and another landfall in Intracoastal City, Louisiana"? The MH only mentions the first landfall.
 * "The storm finally degenerated into a remnant low over northern Arkansas on July 15, before dissipating on July 19." - infobox says dissipation was on the 16th
 * "As Barry was predicted to make landfall as a hurricane, the tropical storm warnings were later upgraded into hurricane warnings" - this level of detail on preps seems excessive for the lead. I'd rather see more about the storm's actual impacts. The only example you give in the lead is power outages, plus the overall damage.
 * Wouldn't it be better to mention the convection, or thunderstorms, in the first MH paragraph, rather than second?
 * Not done! ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 20:26, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I still prefer mentioning it in the second paragraph, the only place to do it in the first paragraph is adding a sentence to the end . ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 17:51, 20 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Is there a reason? We generally link terms on their first usage. It doesn't make sense saying "convection, or thunderstorms" when you've already used "thunderstorms" in the first para. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:57, 20 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 18:23, 20 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "though mid-level dry air and northerly wind shear caused few thunderstorms near the center" - "caused " --> "restricted"?
 * "Due to a slight decrease in shear on the morning of July 13, climate change caused the storm's outflow to expand and banding to increase." - climate change? Wha? That's really random and seems odd
 * "28 parishes issued emergency declarations with another 14 finalizing such declarations" - I don't get the difference between issuing emergency declarations and "finalizing" them
 * "On July 12, Health and Human Services Secretary Alex Azar today declared" - today? In 2020?
 * "On the same day, Mississippi Governor Phil Bryant declared a state of emergency" - it had been a few sentences since a date reference, so I'd restate what day it was.
 * "Total economic losses from Barry totaled" - redundancy much?
 * Were there any Louisiana impacts other than power outages? Considering the storm made landfall there as a hurricane, the article is very light on impacts there. You have more for Alabama/Mississippi
 * Any progress on this ? Did you try NCDC? ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:33, 25 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "28 parishes issued emergency declarations with another 14 finalizing such declarations" - I don't get the difference between issuing emergency declarations and "finalizing" them
 * "On July 12, Health and Human Services Secretary Alex Azar today declared" - today? In 2020?
 * "On the same day, Mississippi Governor Phil Bryant declared a state of emergency" - it had been a few sentences since a date reference, so I'd restate what day it was.
 * "Total economic losses from Barry totaled" - redundancy much?
 * Were there any Louisiana impacts other than power outages? Considering the storm made landfall there as a hurricane, the article is very light on impacts there. You have more for Alabama/Mississippi
 * Any progress on this ? Did you try NCDC? ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:33, 25 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "Total economic losses from Barry totaled" - redundancy much?
 * Were there any Louisiana impacts other than power outages? Considering the storm made landfall there as a hurricane, the article is very light on impacts there. You have more for Alabama/Mississippi
 * Any progress on this ? Did you try NCDC? ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:33, 25 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Were there any Louisiana impacts other than power outages? Considering the storm made landfall there as a hurricane, the article is very light on impacts there. You have more for Alabama/Mississippi
 * Any progress on this ? Did you try NCDC? ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:33, 25 October 2020 (UTC)

The article is in OK shape, but it looks rather similar than the last time I looked at the article (when I first helped write the article). I'm not happy with the level of coverage, so I hope you can address these issues. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:39, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
 * There are lots of duplicate links. Two in back to back sentences in the FL section
 * Do you have a Mississippi rainfall total?
 * The first sentence of "Elsewhere" should say earlier what state you're talking about
 * Split. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 14:58, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Any Arkansas flooding impacts other than the killed dog? RIP :'( 
 * Don't mention "no fatalities". We generally don't mention when things don't happen, instead we write what does happen. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 15:33, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The infobox mentions impacts in "Oklahoma, Great Lakes region, Northeastern United States" - but the article doesn't discuss any of these areas. How come?
 * ✅. Found this near Accuweather source that covers the northeast. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 18:30, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I don't see any sources for impact in Oklahoma or the Great Lakes (unless you mean Canada, as Great Lakes usually implies like Ohio, Michigan, Wisconsin area). ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 20:26, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
 * How much FEMA aid did affected areas get?
 * Found this, which dates to August 27, 2019. It saysthat FEMA spent $16 million in public assistance. Should I add the total to the total costs, since this wasn't included in the AON report (dated August 9, 2019). ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 14:09, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
 * No, that would double up on the damage. There's the storm damage, which AON reported, and there's the money spent to undo the storm's impacts. Just mention this in the aftermath. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 14:10, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Ok . Added some info from FEMA. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 14:35, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Starting to look at NCDC. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 13:34, 26 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Found this, which dates to August 27, 2019. It saysthat FEMA spent $16 million in public assistance. Should I add the total to the total costs, since this wasn't included in the AON report (dated August 9, 2019). ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 14:09, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
 * No, that would double up on the damage. There's the storm damage, which AON reported, and there's the money spent to undo the storm's impacts. Just mention this in the aftermath. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 14:10, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Ok . Added some info from FEMA. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 14:35, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Starting to look at NCDC. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 13:34, 26 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Just curious to see how you feel about the article. I wouldn't be opposed to giving a bit more time since more content is being added in. Btw, there is a date error on FN58. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 23:20, 22 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I agree, it's almost there, just a few outstanding comments. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 01:28, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I'm unhappy you're unhappy with the amount of coverage. I hope you're happy now. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 16:16, 30 October 2020 (UTC)

Hurricane Noah's Second Review

 * Doing a second review of the article this weekend. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 16:28, 30 October 2020 (UTC)

Lead/Prose

 * Lead
 * and later into the second tropical storm on the same day --> "and strengthened into a tropical storm later that day"
 * Barry attained its peak intensity I would add "as a Category 1 hurricane" after that just so people don't have to reference back that this is Cat 1 intensity. Add a comma after the word hurricane too.
 * ❌ I literally stands out in the first sentence and in the infobox. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 18:56, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Some readers don't pay any attention to the infobox. We shouldn't force people to reference back. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 19:01, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * with 1-minute sustained winds of 75 mph (120 km/h), with a minimum central pressure of 993 millibars (29.3 inHg) replace the bolded with "and"
 * Link sustained wind... On minimum central pressure, link atmospheric pressure...
 * Subsequently, Barry made its first landfall at Marsh Island, and another landfall in Intracoastal City, Louisiana, both times as a Category 1 hurricane When? This is too vague.
 * Link Trough (meteorology) on the usage in the lead.
 * Why is interstate capitalized?
 * It's a proper noun. See Interstate Highway System.
 * Oh, okay. Never had seen that before. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 19:01, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Link tornado
 * Mostly minor things remained in the lead... I will review the prose later today or tomorrow. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 18:14, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Why is interstate capitalized?
 * It's a proper noun. See Interstate Highway System.
 * Oh, okay. Never had seen that before. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 19:01, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Link tornado
 * Mostly minor things remained in the lead... I will review the prose later today or tomorrow. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 18:14, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Mostly minor things remained in the lead... I will review the prose later today or tomorrow. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 18:14, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Mostly minor things remained in the lead... I will review the prose later today or tomorrow. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 18:14, 30 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Check your usage of "also" throughout the article. It is almost always redundant. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 19:28, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅. Removed 5 "also"s.~ Destroyeraa 🌀 01:43, 7 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Met
 * eventually triggering a low pressure area over the Gulf of Mexico --> "Eventually triggering the formation of a..." Also, hyphenate the "low pressure" in this sentence.
 * steered by a ridge to its west. The NHC says it is a low- to mid-level ridge.
 * On July 9, a broad low pressure area Remove the link on LPA here since it is linked earlier.
 * east side of a mid-level ridge Remove the link on Ridge here. Also, is this the same ridge? If so, you can just say "the ridge".
 * due to its threat it posed to the United States within a few days. --> Due to the threat the system posed to the United States
 * Could you incorporate dates into the middle/end of the sentences to increase the flow (mainly para 1)?
 * Barry quickly intensified--> Barry had quickly intensified.
 * Barry quickly intensified, with its central pressure dropping, despite a marginally favorable environment Is there something unusual about this?
 * reworded. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 00:08, 2 November 2020 (UTC)
 * That should be it for the met. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 20:06, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Could you incorporate dates into the middle/end of the sentences to increase the flow (mainly para 1)?
 * Barry quickly intensified--> Barry had quickly intensified.
 * Barry quickly intensified, with its central pressure dropping, despite a marginally favorable environment Is there something unusual about this?
 * reworded. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 00:08, 2 November 2020 (UTC)
 * That should be it for the met. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 20:06, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * That should be it for the met. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 20:06, 30 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Preparations
 * including a hurricane watch Remove the link on hurricane watch as it redirects to the TC watches/warnings.
 * Thus, a mandatory evacuation was ordered for the parish effective on the morning of July 11, affecting approximately 8,000–10,000 residents. Could you use a different word? It just doesn't sound right with effective and affecting.
 * On the afternoon of July 11, the National Hurricane Center issued a hurricane warning for coastal Louisiana between Intracoastal City to Grand Isle, Louisiana. this is outside the paragraph with all the watches/warnings.
 * Should be it for the preps. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 20:16, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * On the afternoon of July 11, the National Hurricane Center issued a hurricane warning for coastal Louisiana between Intracoastal City to Grand Isle, Louisiana. this is outside the paragraph with all the watches/warnings.
 * Should be it for the preps. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 20:16, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Should be it for the preps. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 20:16, 30 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Impact
 * GENERAL: Locations are still overlinked. Please check this out.
 * High water levels occurred from the Florida Panandle to the upper Texas Coast misspelling: Panhandle
 * Link flash flood emergency at the first mention instead
 * In addition, a EF1 tornado was reported Remove "In addition" as each statement is always in addition to the last.
 * a EF1 tornado was reported near New Orleans on July 10, snapping several trees and ripping the roof off a house. This tornado caused $300,000 in damage These two statements likely could be combined.
 * The strongest recorded winds on land was 66 mph (106 km/h) Was this sustained? A gust?
 * ✅ sustained winds.
 * Tornado needs to be linked earlier than what it is.
 * The storm also caused The Rolling Stones to postpone their July 14 show at the Superdome to July 15 due to heavy rain --> Heavy rain from the storm caused The Rolling Stones to postpone their July 14 show at the Superdome to the next day.
 * In addition, a tornado warning was issued for Jackson County, Remove "in addition"
 * 13.30 inches (338 mm) Abbreviate inches.
 * In addition, severe thunderstorms from Barry's rainbands Remove "In addition"
 * flash flooding flooded a car Could we use a word other than flooded since it comes directly after flooding?
 * 2 feet (610 mm) Abbreviate feet and it should be meters instead of millimeters.
 * 80,000 gallons (300,000 L) Can be abbreviated to US Gal
 * ❌ We also have readers from many many other countries. They don't know what a "Gal" is.
 * Could you at least make it "US Gallons" so it isn't confused with the imperial gallon? <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 02:24, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Around 2.8 feet (850 mm) Abbreviate feet and should be meters instead of millimeters.
 * up to 8 inches (200 mm) Abbreviate inches.
 * In addition, several roads were underwater and closed in the city Remove "In addition"
 * A rainfall total of 16.59 inches (421 mm) Abbreviate inches
 * In addition, a peak rainfall amount Remove "In addition"
 * of 4.61 inches (117 mm) Abbreviate inches
 * 5.35 inches (136 mm) Abbreviate inches
 * 6.09 inches (155 mm) Abbreviate inches
 * 60 mm (2.4 in) This needs to be consistent with the other rainfall amounts... ie 2.4 in (60 mm)
 * This and the three above are ✅ ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 02:21, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
 * rain fell in Toronto, Canada Comma after Canada
 * July 16-17 --> July 16–17 Use the en dash for date ranges
 * Rome, New York Comma after New York
 * than 3 inches (76 mm) Abbreviate inches
 * Lancaster, Pennsylvania Comma after Pennsylvania
 * That should be it the for impact. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:48, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
 * In addition, several roads were underwater and closed in the city Remove "In addition"
 * A rainfall total of 16.59 inches (421 mm) Abbreviate inches
 * In addition, a peak rainfall amount Remove "In addition"
 * of 4.61 inches (117 mm) Abbreviate inches
 * 5.35 inches (136 mm) Abbreviate inches
 * 6.09 inches (155 mm) Abbreviate inches
 * 60 mm (2.4 in) This needs to be consistent with the other rainfall amounts... ie 2.4 in (60 mm)
 * This and the three above are ✅ ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 02:21, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
 * rain fell in Toronto, Canada Comma after Canada
 * July 16-17 --> July 16–17 Use the en dash for date ranges
 * Rome, New York Comma after New York
 * than 3 inches (76 mm) Abbreviate inches
 * Lancaster, Pennsylvania Comma after Pennsylvania
 * That should be it the for impact. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:48, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Rome, New York Comma after New York
 * than 3 inches (76 mm) Abbreviate inches
 * Lancaster, Pennsylvania Comma after Pennsylvania
 * That should be it the for impact. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:48, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Lancaster, Pennsylvania Comma after Pennsylvania
 * That should be it the for impact. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:48, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
 * That should be it the for impact. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:48, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Aftermath
 * caused wild animals to be washed It didn't cause them to be washed into the homes, it simply washed them into the homes.
 * an outbreak of snakes I think the more appropriate word is pit, nest, or den for a group of snakes.
 * ✅ -large den of snakes. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 00:08, 2 November 2020 (UTC)
 * was also ceased. --> had also ceased.
 * Should be it. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
 * If you see anything else that I missed, please feel free to add it here. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Any updates on progress? <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 15:13, 4 November 2020 (UTC)
 * If you see anything else that I missed, please feel free to add it here. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Any updates on progress? <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 15:13, 4 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Could you also add alternate text to images for those who have images disabled per the MOS accessibility? <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:01, 7 November 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅. Everything is done now I think/. ~ Destroyeraa 🌀 01:52, 7 November 2020 (UTC)

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