Talk:Hurricane Chantal (1989)/GA1

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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 23:40, 9 January 2013 (UTC)

Hello GC, we meet again! I will be reviewing Chantal '89.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 23:40, 9 January 2013 (UTC)

Lead

 * "...three tropical cyclones to make..." you could link tropical cyclone
 * Would it be better if "Trinidad and Tobago" was linked together as Trinidad and Tobago, because, they're pretty close to eachother.
 * "...Chantal became to quickly strengthen and became a hurricane on August 1." The first became does not make sense.
 * "...later on that day." Do you need 'on?'
 * "The storm quickly weakened upon moving inland and weakened to a tropical storm a few hours after landfall. Early on August 2, Chantal weakened to a tropical depression and dissipated over Oklahoma by August 4." You use quite a lot of 'weakened's. Maybe you could use differing word choice, such as 'degenerated' for one of them?
 * "...produced relatively small tides, with most locations reporting waves less than 4 feet (1.2 m) in height. As a result, some locations experienced extensive beach erosion." I don't know about you, but it seems odd that there are pretty small tides, but then in the next sentence is mentions /extensive/ beach erosion.
 * Fixed all of the above.--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)

Meteorological history

 * Just clarifying, did you mean "tropical weather lookouts" or outlooks?
 * Well, you might wanna "lookout" for a tropical cyclone.--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "...until reconnaissance flight." You need an 'a.'
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Link Dvorak technique.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "...with the National Hurricane Center satellites using the Dvorak technique to indicate t-numbers range from 2.5–3.5 within just twelve hours." This sentence doesn't quite make sense. Within twelve hours of what? I think instead of that sentence, you could use "...with weather satellites indicating t–numbers increasing from 2.5 to 3.5 within twelve hours using the Dvorak technique."
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "Based on these discoveries..." I don't know about discoveries, is observations a better term?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "After landfall, Chantal rapidly weakened to a tropical storm just five hours after landfall..." If you list the time after landfall, you don't need the 'after landfall' part in the beginning.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "...quickly degenerating to tropical depression early on August 2." Degenerating should be degenerated, and you either need 'a' before tropical depression, or strength after tropical depression, whichever one you choose.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)

"...eventually reaching New England [3] and Newfoundland just before Hurricane Dean approached." Instead of having a floating ref in the middle of the sentence with no punctuation, you could move it to the end of the sentence.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)

Preparations

 * "...evacuate a rig south..." Oil rig is a disambiguation.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)

Impact

 * Make sure you have an accented a in all uses of Yucatán Peninsula.
 * Do I háve to?--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "...up to 370,000 acres..." could use a metric conversion.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "Significant amounts of precipitation, resulted in flooding..." No need for comma here.
 * Sometimes, I leave, extra commas in, wrong places.--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "...and portable building..." Needs an 'a.'
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "...red cross shelter..." You should link red cross to something suitable.
 * I am going to link it to American Red Cross-12george1 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2013 (UTC)

That's it for now.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 23:40, 9 January 2013 (UTC)