Talk:Hurricane Connie/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 05:36, 3 February 2013 (UTC)


 * "Hurricane Connie in August 1955 contributed to significant flooding across the eastern United States just days before Hurricane Diane affected the same general area." - Might be more readable is you put a comma between the words "States" and "just".
 * Agreed. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:34, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Is there anyway you can make the Preparations sections less choppy? Perhaps you could merge the second paragraph with the first?
 * Sure. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:34, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "the United States miliary flew planes away from the coast" - Typo; "miliary" ---> "military" or maybe with a capital "m".
 * Ack, fixed typo, but left it lowercase. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:34, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
 * It may be just me, but I don't see anything in this source about 800 Boy Scouts being evacuated from Camp Delmont. Can you verify if it is in there or find a replacement link? According to reference #12, the title is "Connie Speeds Closing of Boy Scout Camp", but when you check the link, the new title is "Evacuees From Hurricane Connie Spilled Into Sea".
 * Fixed link. The title was correct, just not the link. It was from that paper, however. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:34, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Sorry to be kind of picky, but I think you should rename the "North America" section to "United States and Canada", since the Caribbean Sea region is also in North America.
 * Not a problem. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:34, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "As Connie moved ashore in North Carolina, it produced sustained winds of 72 mph (116 km/h) in Morehead City, with gusts to 83 mph (134 km/h). Wind gusts near where the hurricane moved ashore reached 100 mph (160 km/h)" - You should alternate the term "moved ashore" with "made landfall".
 * Sure. Anything else? --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:34, 4 February 2013 (UTC)
 * No Hurricanehink, nothing else. So without further a due, I am going to pass this article.--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 4 February 2013 (UTC)