Talk:Hurricane Cosme (2013)

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Reason for inclusion of page

Helps to improve the completeness of information available on the 2013 Pacific Hurricane Season

Cosme is one of the few casualty producing hurricanes of the 2013 season that did not yet have its own article.

Various users on the 2013 Pacific Hurricane Season expressed interest in giving Hurricane Cosme its own Wikipedia article.

review by Parker Schmidt
You did an excellent job of presenting the fact and details of this storm in a well thought-out article. You were able to write about a rather wide breadth of information, rather than merely discussing its path and effects on the damaged areas. Simultaneously, you did well to tie in all of your information to the main topic, Hurricane Cosme, so that your article did not go astray. I like how you broke down your article both geographically and even to a certain extent chronologically. This organization made your possibly confusing information, more easily understood. Another aspect that lead to clear, concise interpretations by readers was your use of vivid accounts that assisted the facts of this hurricane article. These accounts as well as your plentiful use of dates, numbers, and citations do a great job of backing up all your article has to offer. Another plus is the neutrality of your article, since it simply states the fact and you successfully avoid giving any sort of your opinion. One suggestion that I will add is that you clarify some of the abbreviations and names of the organizations that you include in this article. For the most part you do a good job of providing links for names unfamiliar to the average reader, but some proper nouns such as UTC, National Civil Protection System, and CLIPER are left unidentified in the way that either an explanation or external or internal link could clarify. Another minor, nit-picky suggestion that I would make is that you clean up some of your sentences in regards to some minor typos. Once you accomplish this small task, I think that your article will flow much more smoothly. A couple other, perhaps more trivial, suggestions of mine would to be careful about repetition. For instance, you say that "Hurricane Cosme was the third named tropical cyclone of the 2013 Pacific hurricane season," when you open the article. Then in your first sentence of the section entitled Initial Information, you say that "Hurricane Cosme was a the third named tropical cyclone of the 2013 Pacific hurricane season." Now I realize that may be extremely picky, since it could be permissible to repeat what is in your introduction/summary; so I will leave it up to you as to what to do with that. Lastly, if you were interested in adding to your article, maybe you could say how Mexico learned from this natural disaster, or if they did not respond in any way cause it was merely a category one hurricane at its peak, then you could say that as well. That is just a thought. However, as I said in the beginning, I think that you did a superb job on your article. Everything from your headings and pictures to the detailed accounts and numerical dates justify the good quality of your article. Schmidt1510 (talk) 01:18, 29 March 2014 (UTC)

Overall, I think you did a very good job creating this article from scratch and organizing it into different sections that make sense within the context of each other. You were very detailed and included any necessary information I would think should be included in an article on a hurricane. I really liked that you were able to create the picture on the page with all of the most important details on the storm, so anybody who was looking for just those major details would have quick access to them without having to read the entire article. It was also good that you noticed there was already a page on Wikipedia that had a section on Hurricane Cosme(2013 Hurricane season)and made sure to include much more information then was already included in that small section. There were a few small things you can fix that I believe would help the flow of your page and for it to appear more like an actual encyclopedia article. First, just make sure to watch your wording. Most of your writing is good, but be sure not to repeat specific words too often after each other(repeated use of the word "also", for example), as it just does not sound professional in my opinion. A few times I believe you might have just had some typing mistakes("is" instead of "it", "of" instead of "a"), so just be sure to triple check your article for grammar problems before it is posted. Also, be sure to watch your capitalization in both section headings and the rest of the writing. For headings, whether you decide to capitalize every word or not, just make sure to be consistent. Your organization for the most part is good, but I feel all of your sections are in chronological order except for the last one("Planning, Preparation, and Forecasting"), so maybe consider moving it? Just an idea. All in all, I think you did a great job, so with a little fixing up your article should be good to go!

Fmeyers30 (talk) 21:11, 16 March 2014 (UTC)

Review from Dr. Becky
Fmeyers30 gave you excellent feedback and I recommend applying it to the article. This is an impressive draft for a new article! Your writing clearly describes the hurricane and you have several references. Improvement can be made but adding more peer-reviewed scientific references and governmental materials to support findings and ideas. The Lead section is strong, but there are missing words, random capitalizations, repetitive phrasing, and formatting issues that detract from the information. Review the entire article for similar issues. Some organizational issues in the Mexico Impacts section- it may be better to add subsections here to improve flow. Add more emphasis on the ecological effects as they relate to disturbance ecology and support with appropriate references. The connect to society is clear. The draft is good and I look forward to have it evolves. B.J.Carmichael (talk) 01:59, 20 March 2014 (UTC)

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