Talk:Hurricane Debby (1982)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hurricanefan25 (talk · contribs) 01:31, 1 January 2012 (UTC)


 * I should have the review up by Tuesday evening.  HurricaneFan 25  —  01:31, 1 January 2012 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * See below for comments.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

One

 * Lede
 * 1) peaking with winds of could be reworded to with winds peaking at or something like that.
 * 2) You should explain what the SSHS is in the lede so the reader can catch up with what you're saying.
 * 3) By September 20, Debby weakened to a tropical storm, shortly before transitioning into an extratropical cyclone while rapidly approaching the British Isles. (Not really related to prose) There's a better link, Extratropical cyclone. Also, this could be clarified to something like Debby was rapidly approaching the British Isles on September 20 shortly before it transitioned into an extratropical cyclone.
 * 4) limited to light to moderate rainfall Remove or replace one of the "to"'s with something else.
 * 5) The last two sentences of the final paragraph in the lede read like "Point. Point." if you get the idea of what I'm saying.
 * Meteorological history
 * 1) completely lost identification I don't understand what this means...?
 * 2) gained some circulation Er, something seems wrong here; shouldn't this be gained a circulation?
 * 3) prompting an upgraded Grammar; either say prompting an upgrade or prompted an upgrade
 * 4) would in time Keep "would" and move "in time" after United States or another spot that might work.
 * 5) reaching max winds Spell out "maximum"
 * 6) 17 September should be September 17 for consistency.
 * 7) Explain what the westerlies are, or at least provide a link. Don't expect everyone to be like us ;-)
 * Preparations and impact
 * 1) A better wording spread from would be ranged between
 * 2) Rains in Puerto Rico peaked at You already mentioned Puerto Rico in the previous sentence. You could say Rains on the island peaked at
 * 3) Tourists by the thousands took the last-minute flights out of Bermuda on September 16 as Debby drew near. → Thousands of tourists took last-minute flights out of Bermuda on September 16 as Debby drew near.
 * 4) amount is a strange word to describe numerous; how about just plain ol' number?

Three

 * 1) Any specifics on "weather system"?


 * I have done everything you ask, except for that comment directly above. I do not understand what you mean when you said "Any specifics on "weather system"?". Also, I am a bit confused about the "Point. Point." thing; did I fix that issue when I re-worded it? --12george1 (talk) 18:57, 1 January 2012 (UTC)
 * Looks fine, now.