Talk:Hurricane Dora (2011)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Juliancolton (talk · contribs) 18:10, 16 July 2014 (UTC)

I'll take the liberty of reviewing this article. Looks decent at first glance... comments as I go along. Well, it's in fairly good shape. I've done some copyediting, but nothing so significant as to compromise my impartiality in this review. On-hold until you've addressed the above issues. Nice job! –  Juliancolton  &#124; Talk 18:10, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
 * The first sentence is a bit overwhelming IMO. It tries to go in two different directions at once, but doesn't quite pull it off.
 * the onset of cold sea surface temperatures - nitpicking here, but Dora likely moved into the cold SSTs rather than the other way around (so "onset" sounds a bit weird).
 * I think you should mention in the lead when/why the storm curved more NW, to avoid giving the impression that Baja California is west of Honduras.
 * Remaining off the coast from its formation to dissipation, effects from Dora were minimal
 * Situated in an area with favorable atmospheric conditions and warm sea surface temperatures, the tropical cyclone quickly strengthened, developing an intermittent eye before being classified as a hurricane at 1800 UTC on July 19 while roughly 245 mi (400 km) south-southwest of Puerto Escondido, Oaxaca. - bit of a run-on and I'm too lazy to work it out myself.
 * Upon its reclassification - hmm?
 * At the same time, eyewall mesovortices were noted on satellite imagery - seeing as "eyewall mesovortex" is a technical term, I don't think it's quite accurate. The NHC discussion says there were "MESOVORTICES WITHIN THE EYE" (little swirly things visible on satellite imagery), which are different from mesovortices within the eyewall (short-lived tornado-like things that are only apparent when your house gets obliterated).
 * I know what you mean, but it's a little confusing to say the remnants dissipated southwest of Baja California, but also tracked into the SW US.
 * Did Guerrero really set up nine hundred shelters for an offshore TC? That seems outrageously high...
 * Not required, but I think you should add brief descriptions to the other storms in the "see also" section, relating them to Dora.
 * Passing, since all my concerns have been dealt with. Nice work. –  Juliancolton  &#124; Talk 02:13, 17 July 2014 (UTC)