Talk:Hurricane Ella (1958)/GA1

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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 23:50, 7 March 2013 (UTC)

Hi, GeorgeC. I'll be reviewing this article shortly. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:50, 7 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "Ella headed westward and by August 31, it intensified into a Category 1 hurricane. Hours later, it strengthened into a Category 2 hurricane on the Saffir–Simpson hurricane wind scale." - No need for "it", you already give the subject. And why mention the SSHWS on the second instance, not the first (in the first sentence quoted here)?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "The storm curved northwestward while south of Hispaniola and as a result, it struck the Tiburon Peninsula of Haiti on September 1." - Same as above. No "it" and be sure to add a comma after "and"
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Heavy rainfall led to flooding, which in turn caused hundreds to flee their homes, and caused 5 fatalities." - Change the second "caused" to "lead".
 * Are you sure? There is already a "lead" toward the beginning.--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Okay, change it to "resulted in". TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 12:42, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:43, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "The storm became disorganized while moving across the southern coast of Cuba and weakened to a tropical storm by later that day." - What day?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Ella reached the Gulf of Mexico on September 4 and briefly re-strengthened. However, it began to weaken again while approaching the Gulf Coast of the United States" - Combine and just end it with "on approach".
 * Combined, but not sure how to end it with "on approach"--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "Ella neared the Gulf of Mexico on September 4 and briefly re-strengthened; however, the system began to weaken again on approach." TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 12:42, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Eh, that looks kinda like a cliffhanger because it makes you wonder, "on approach" to what? However, I will add it anyway.--12george1 (talk) 18:43, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I actually read it wrong the first time, so I reverted back to your original wording. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 21:56, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Un-link 50W.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "A reconnaissance aircraft into Ella on August 30 reported sustained winds between between 55 and 60 mph (95 km/h)." - You already mention the date in the previous sentence.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Advisories and bulletins?!
 * "Ella strengthened into a Category 1 hurricane at 1200 UTC on August 31. Six hours later, the storm intensified further to a Category 2 hurricane." FUSION HAA!
 * What exactly is wrong here?--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Combine the sentences. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 12:42, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:43, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "On September 1, Ella curved west-northwestward, and by later that day, it made landfall on the Tiburon Peninsula of Haiti with winds of 110 mph (175 km/h)." - No it!
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Rough terrain over Cuba caused Ella to weaken to a Category 1 hurricane on September 2." - Cuba to "the island".
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * No "for about"'s.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * " It weakened back to a tropical depression and dissipated by late on September 6" - You think you're too cool to add a period?!
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Damage was minor in both Puerto Rico and the Virgin Islands, confined mostly to crops." - Change the names to "locations" so it reads "both locations".
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Ella brought heavy rains, peaking at 9.63 inches (245 mm) in Polo, Barahona" - Abbreviate both or 0.
 * What are you asking me to do here?--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Your units. You write out inches but abbreviate millimeters. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 12:42, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:43, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Heavy precipitation in Haiti caused flash floods that killed 30 people near Aux Cayes and three other people were listed as missing." - Comma after the city.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:57, 8 March 2013 (UTC)

Will pass when these issues are addressed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 03:55, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Passing. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 21:56, 8 March 2013 (UTC)

"Ella had a role in the Cuban Revolution as the government troops of Fulgencio Batista y Zaldívar stayed in their barracks during the storm while the rebels made progress under cover of Ella. Later, when the guerrillas heard about Hurricane Fifi on the radio, Che Guevara taught his illiterate comrades that entities like tropical cyclones are named in alphabetical order." - this was in the season article. How come it's not mentioned? --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 04:27, 8 March 2013 (UTC)