Talk:Hurricane Erin (1995)/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 06:32, 2 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "Early on August 3, Erin re-intensified into a Category 1 hurricane. Strengthening further, the cyclone very briefly strengthened into a Category 2 hurricane, peaking with maximum sustained winds of 100 mph (155 km/h) as the eyewall moved ashore at Fort Walton Beach, Florida." can SSHS be invoked? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:32, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Found an earlier place to mention it--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "totaling about $400,000 (1995 USD).[nb 1]" isn't the note and "(1995 USD)" redundant? 06:32, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Maybe the "(1995 USD)" thing is redundant but I think the note should be kept. Maybe someone might think the Bahamas damage total is in Bahamian dollars, but it's in USD--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "accelerated somewhat from a forward speed of 6 mph (9.7 km/h) to 17 mph (27 km/h)" why 9.7 km/h not rounded to 10? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:32, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "On August 1, the hurricane passed over or very close to several islands in the Bahamas, including Cat Island, Eleuthera, the Abaco Islands, and Grand Bahama.[1]" any official landfall? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:32, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * The TCR doesn't list any official landfalls in the Bahamas but states on the same page as the best track, "Many islands in the Bahamas chain either had a landfall or received a 'direct hit',"--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "first hurricane to strike the United States since Hurricane Andrew in 1992.[4] " link to 1992 AHS here. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:32, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "Eleven and a half hours later, the National Hurricane Center upgraded the east coast," shouldn't NHC be abbreviated? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:32, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "Evacuations were initially posted for 800,000 people in Florida in preparation." mandatory evacuations or voluntary evacuations? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:32, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Sounds like it was mandatory--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "Many people on the east coast were wary of Erin due to recollections of the devastation wrought by Hurricane Andrew just three years earlier.[9]" why is Andrew linked again? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:32, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Just a shameless self-promotion on my part :P --12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)

Will finish later. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:32, 2 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "NASA had to halt some activities," this just seems too vaugue to include in an article of this size. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:53, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * The source doesn't have anything else other than what they did with Space Shuttle Endeavour. So I'm just remove that part of the sentence--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * Can you use words other than "about" and "approximately". "Roughly" or "Close to" could be used more frequently. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:53, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 05:34, 10 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "In Jamaica, heavy rains generated by the far outerbands of Erin caused a plane crash that killed five people. " wasn't Jamaica linked earlier? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:53, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "The plane, a Cessna 310 twin-engine aircraft owned by RegionAir, carried four employees of Brinks Jamaica, who were due to testify in a court hearing, and a pilot." "Cessna 310" has an article. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:53, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "though the Bahamas Department of Meteorology described the impact as mostly minor. " why the red link? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:53, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "uch of the Atlantic and Gulf coasts of Florida experienced abnormally high tides and storm surge," link to storm surge. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:53, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * " Although no wind gust was reported from that location, Vero Beach recorded a wind gust of 70 mph (110 km/h).[1] " what? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:53, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * The first part is referring to the inlet. Added some clarity--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * ". NASA noted a maximum wind gust of 82 mph (132 km/h) atop a wind tower at the Kennedy Space Center. " why is NASA linked again? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:53, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * In the Florida section, I feel like you mention way too much about random rainfall totals and wind speeds. Maybe it's because I haven't read a WPTC article in months but I don't generally include that level of detail in my WPAC articles even when that info is available. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:53, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Removed a few--12george1 (talk) 05:34, 10 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "After making landfall in the Florida Panhandle, the storm soon entered Alabama, brin" why is Alabama linked again? See other state in the same section. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:53, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "Florida governor Lawton Chiles, " see above. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:53, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * I assumed you wanted me to delink Lawton Chiles--12george1 (talk) 06:50, 5 February 2020 (UTC)

Kinda a dull read but I don't think it's bad. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:53, 2 February 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for the review!--12george1 (talk) 05:34, 10 February 2020 (UTC)