Talk:Hurricane Helene (1958)/GA1

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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 16:27, 15 March 2013 (UTC)

Even though I'm not supposed to...but because you wanted me to so bad. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 16:27, 15 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "Accelerating northwards" - northwards? Northward. We've been through this, TAM! >:(
 * - We have?  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Damage across the island totaled to at least C$100,000." - You already said that.
 * No, one was for NS the other for NFLD.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "A second reconnaissance flight reported a strengthened tropical cyclone, indicating that the storm system had strengthened to tropical storm strength." - Strengthened, strengthened, strength. Repetitive much?
 * - Reworded the stuff.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "The US Weather Bureau issued their first advisory on the newly developed tropical storm at 1600 UTC later that day, giving the storm the name Helene." - I thought they started after recon went in? Or are bulletins different than advisories?
 * - Advisories are different. Bulletins are just sort of notifications.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Steadily intensifying, the tropical storm attained hurricane intensity by 2200 UTC on 2200 UTC on September 24, while located 425 mi (685 km) east of Fort Pierce, Florida." - No need for the lead-in. You already say it was intensifying in the previous sentences.
 * - Removed lead-in.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "However, in post-season analysis, it was found that Helene reached hurricane intensity earlier that day by 1200 UTC." - Comma after day.
 * - Comma'd  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "At the time, gale force winds extended up to 220 mi (355 km) out from the storm's center of circulation.[2]" - Dash between gale and force. Just a regular one.
 * - Dash'd.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "The lack of strong steering currents in the storm's vicinity caused the hurricane to move very slowly throughout the day, giving the hurricane time to significantly intensify." - You sure do mention how the storm strengthened a lot in this MH..
 * Is that a problem?  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)
 * It's just repetitive to me. See if you can get rid of an instance or two. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 18:12, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Helene strengthened to the equivalent of a modern-day Category 2 hurricane intensity" - Remove intensity.
 * - Removed.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "The major hurricane continued to strengthen, before reaching its peak intensity on September 27 with winds of 135 mph (215 km/h)." - No comma.
 * - Removed comma.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works)


 * "...though it still maintained hurricane force winds." - Dash. Same for the next sentence.
 * - Dash'd.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * " This coincided with the US Weather Bureau's final advisory on the system." - Merge to the previous sentence.
 * - Merge'd?  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Gale warning issuance reflected the changes and were too shifted northwards to the Virginia Capes area, while hurricane watches covered both warning areas." - Northward.
 * - Didn't we go through this before?  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Shortly after, all warnings with the exception of the offshore gale warnings were discontinued." - Comma after both "warnings".
 * - Even more comma'd.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works)


 * "Despite not issuing any warnings, the Weather Bureau cautioned interests in Newfoundland and forecasted hurricane-force winds to effect the island" - Comma after Newfoundland.
 * - COMMA'D!  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "...Governor of South Carolina George Bell Timmerman, Jr.." - Grammar time! Only one period is needed to cover the end of this sentence.
 * - In this episode of grammar time. 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * " Despite repeated orders for mandatory evacuation, some people remained in Myrtle Beach." - Some sounds...un-smart, lol. Perhaps "many" or "a few".
 * - Smartified.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Though surveys made no damage estimates, damage in Holden Beach was reported to have been worse than Long Beach." - In before Long.
 * - In'd.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Effects from Helene in South Carolina were less severe than in North Carolina, with the hurricane making its closest approach to the state on September 27, 85 mi (135 km)." - Am confus.
 * - Split.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Some references don't have authors. If it was from a newspaper or anything like that, state "Staff writer".
 * - I thought this was a discouraged practice in GAN/FAC.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:02, 15 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Not that I'm aware of. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 18:12, 15 March 2013 (UTC)

Definitely will pass when the above issues are addressed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 16:54, 15 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Passing. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 18:12, 15 March 2013 (UTC)