Talk:Hurricane Hilary (1993)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Bushranger (talk · contribs) 01:29, 29 December 2011 (UTC)

The following issues in the text need to be addressed before this can be passed for GA:


 * Lede
 * "Hurricane Hillary was a Category 3 hurricane..." Might want to clarify "East Pacific"/"Pacific Ocean" or something, as the reader could presume it was an Atlantic hurricane otherwise.
 * Meh, added. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "Nearly stalled as it underwent a Fujiwhara interaction..." Would suggest just "as it interacted with" and move the Fujiwhara comment and link to "Meteorological History", to tighten and simplify the lede a bit. The fact it intereacted is sufficent for the lede, I think; how it interacted can be explained in more detail later.
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 * The line about watches and warnings is slightly confusing. The threat ended? Then started again? Suggest similifying this a bit.
 * Yea, it ended, but started again, but explained that further via a wikilink to. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Meteorological History


 * Should wikilink convection and tropical wave.
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "the depression intensified into..." suggest "the depression intensified, becoming..."
 * Incorporated. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "atmospheric circulation..." does this mean Low-level Circulation Center? I'd assume the circulation would be fairly easy to find, but pinning down the center might be difficult.
 * Yea, change the wording. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "meteorolgists remarked the possibility of making landfall..." Bit of a grammar issue here. Perhaps "meterologists suggested there was a possibility the storm might make landfall..."
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "downgraded into a tropical storm..." suggeest "downgraded to a tropical storm..."
 * Ok. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "while most of the mid to upper level moisture..." suggest adding "associated with the storm" immediately after this.
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Preparations and Impact


 * "further advisories were issued..." What sort of advisories?
 * Watches and warnings.
 * "Heavy rains, peaking at..." suggest "Heavy rains, with a maximum recorded amount of..."
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "Baja California Peninsula", shouldn't that be a lowercase P?
 * No, it is a proper known (a type of peninsula). YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Pictures are all appropriately licensed;
 * References are from reliable sources and are inline appropriately, meets WP:V, WP:RS, WP:NOR;
 * Appears to be free of copyvio/paraphasing/plagarism concerns
 * Covers the topic well without going off on tangents;
 * Is neutral and stable;
 * MOS adhered to.

I'm putting this until the grammar/text issues above are resolved. - The Bushranger One ping only 01:29, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Nice work. I'm calling this a ✅. - The Bushranger One ping only 00:46, 30 December 2011 (UTC)