Talk:Hurricane Ignacio (1985)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 15:58, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

Lead

 * Infobox says 130 mph. Did you mean 135?
 * No. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * You could link 'rapidly intensified' to rapid deepening.
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * If you say "As fast as it strengthened," you don't have to say it weakened just as rapidly, because you already state that.
 * Re-wroded. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "Ignacio was downgraded into a tropical storm while passing south of Hawaii." When?
 * Added. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "...however, the watch was dropped when Ignacio weakened. However, Ignacio still brought high waves and light rainfall to the islands." You use however twice. You should find an alternative if possible.
 * Better? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

Meteorological history

 * "on July 21 1,623 mi (2,612 km)" I think you should add a comma after 21.
 * No, but there should be a while located in here, which I added. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "Intensifying further west than normal[2]" comma before reference.
 * {✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "Based on this, the CPHC upgraded Ignacio into hurricane status..." I think into → to
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "Continuing to rapidly intensify, Hurricane Ignacio moved west-northwest at 10 mph (16 km/h). Ignacio was upgraded into Category 2 status on the Saffir-Simpson Hurricane Scale (SSHS)." I think you could combine the two sentences, and state when Ignacio was upgraded.
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Link Hurricane Hunter
 * I did already :P YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane held peak intensity for several hours, however, an upper trough northwest of the Hawaiian Islands was gradually approaching Ignacio." If you're starting a new paragraph, a good rule of thumb is to include the time the stated fact happened, regardless of whether or not it was stated at the end of the last.
 * CPHC did not say. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "a mjaor hurricane" spellcheck
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "Air Force aircraft" Whose Air Force?
 * Idk. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane resumed its westerly course..." I don't see anywhere else in the MH where a different course was taken or disrupted.
 * If you look at the track map, it did turn WNW for a while. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I know but that's just the image. You should state it in the actual prose.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 16:27, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I did, " Hurricane Ignacio moved west-northwest ". YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:30, 3 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "While passing south of the island chain..." Since this is in a new paragraph, what island chain?
 * Substituted. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Can you provide any times for the events stated in the MH?
 * Added a couple. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

Preparations and impact

 * "was lcoated northwest..." Spellcheck.
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "... track then what..." then → than
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "Bu July 24..." Bu → By
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I suggest linking high surf advisory to severe weather terminology (United States) but that's just my opinion.
 * "Big Island of Hawaii[2]" Needs period.
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "the watch was cancelled as Ignacio resumed weakening..." Did it weaken beforehand? Because you use Igancio, and to me it appears Ignacio strengthened and weakened, with not much in between.
 * Read the MH part where it mention slight re-intensification may have occurred. YE   Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I know, but that was just a 'theory' and its not supported by the database.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 16:27, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * HURDAT does say it leveled off in intensity. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:30, 3 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "and the Big Island" I don't think you need 'the'
 * It IMO does not make sense without it. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "that lead to the beaches" lead → led
 * ✅. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)

References and external links
That's all I have for now.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 15:58, 3 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Would Reference #9 have any link?
 * It's in cite news, so they don't need links! But, I made the title lowercase. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)