Talk:Hurricane Irene–Olivia/GA1

GA Review
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Why is there no track map in the Met whereas there is one in the infobox. You can instead put the photo in the impact section in the infobox?. Also, the impact should be divided up into sections. Leave Message ,Yellow Evan home, Sandbox I am putting Irene on hold to allow this issue to be addressed. Leave Message ,Yellow Evan home, Sandbox
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 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
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 * 1) It is stable.
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 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
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 * There's actually nothing wrong with the way hink has it. The track map is in the infobox because there is no image of the storm that would really work in the infobox. When that happens, track maps aren't put in the met history. As for the impact section, it's also fine the way it is. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:10, 14 June 2009 (UTC)

Looks good otherwise. – Juliancolton  &#124; Talk 20:24, 14 June 2009 (UTC)
 * A few comments:
 * The third paragraph of the Meteorological history section has way too many semi-colons.
 * Later, Tropical Storm Irene brushed San Andrés island in the western Caribbean with gale force winds - Makes it sound like a different storm.
 * I don't really understand this comment. Could you elaborate? ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk )
 * Nm, I got it. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 00:54, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Prior to its landfall in Nicaragua, the country's army evacuated about 500 people from a settlement near Bluefields - The country's army didn't make landfall.
 * I thought the antecedent was obvious, but I changed it. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk )
 * Observations were not available in the sparsely-populated region near where Irene moved ashore - Remove the hyphen per MoS.
 * OK. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk )
 * In southeastern Nicaragua, reconnaissance planes reported heavy structural and tree damage. - Ambiguous wording; the planes were structurally damaged?
 * I doubt that people would think that the planes had tree damage to them ;) ...but I moved the first clause. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 00:15, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
 * In Costa Rica, Irene's passage resulted in more than $1 million (USD) in damage to the banana crop. - Irene caused the damage, not its passage.
 * Same difference. If it's alright, I'd rather keep the current wording, as there's only so many interesting ways to say "The hurricane caused damage". ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 00:15, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
 * As a result of the moisture, the National Weather Service issued flash flood warnings throughout the region. - The first part is redundant.
 * Got it. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 00:15, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Near Yuma, Arizona, thunderstorms caused three major power outages - Three power outages? Does that mean they were in different areas?
 * That was per the source. It was a major power outage in three different areas. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 00:15, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
 * produced flooding that closed a portion of U.S. Route 95. - Surely the flooding didn't close the highway. Either officials closed the highway, or the flooding left it impassable.
 * Fixed. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 00:15, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Snowfall accumulation totals would be very helpful, if possible.
 * I just did a pretty thorough search, and I can't find anything on that. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 00:15, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Irene-Olivia is unusual in that it survived passage from the Atlantic to Pacific Ocean. Only seven other storms are known to survive the passage between the Atlantic and Pacific Oceans. - Unnecessarily wordy/redundant. Change to "Only seven other storms are known to have done so".
 * Ah, didn't write that section. Got it. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 00:15, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
 * In a unique coincidence, all three took eastern Pacific names starting with the letter O. - The source doesn't say it was a unique coincidence, so that's original research.
 * Again, didn't write the section, so I altered the wording. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 00:15, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Passing. – Juliancolton  &#124; Talk 00:55, 15 June 2009 (UTC)