Talk:Hurricane Josephine (1984)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Juliancolton (talk) 01:13, 20 August 2011 (UTC)

The article looks solid at first glance. I'll read through it and post any comments or suggestions I have as I go along. The prose overall is a little rough, but generally just passes the threshhold for GA. The points above are things I think really need to be looked at, but if and when you get around to fixing them, I'll be glad to pass the article. Juliancolton (talk) 01:13, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Hurricane Josephine was the only named storm in the Atlantic basin during October 1984. - Ehh, this seems like non-info to be honest (ie. I'm not sure if it's meant to be a record, a statistic, or just a general comment; in any case, it doesn't really leave me with a sense of the storm).
 * Changed. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * The fifteenth tropical cyclone, tenth named storm, and the third hurricane - Why "the" before "third" but not "tenth"?
 * Dunno, I didn't write it :P (changed) --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * before becoming nearly stationary offshore of the East Coast of the United States. - Do you really have to go through the whole ECOTUS spiel again?
 * Sorry. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Similar rough seas were reported - ?
 * I usually don't check out the lede when I finish articles. Fool me once... --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * The origins of Hurricane Josephine were from - "origins were from" is really unusual wording.
 * I completely rewrote the origins. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * The frontal trough with spawned the area of disturbed weather moved off the southeastern United States on September 30 - Borked sentence structure, and frontal trough is non-standard wording... you could probably just say frontal system (or trough).
 * See above. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * By October 4, the front became nearly stationary while extending north-northeast of Hispaniola. - "extending north-northeast of Hispaniola"? This doesn't give any specific location (or whether it extends from that point or to that point).
 * See above. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * When did the surface low form?
 * Not sure, the NHC didn't say. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * "diffuse"? Weird wording.
 * Ehh, it's redundant. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * while well offshore of the Bahamas.  - I don't think it can really be offshore an island chain...
 * True. Changed to a direction. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * high tides along the East Coast of the United States. - Again
 * Sorry. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Yea, I got your recommendations. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Looks good, I'll be passing it! Juliancolton (talk) 15:18, 20 August 2011 (UTC)