Talk:Hurricane Juan (1985)/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 21:35, 9 March 2014 (UTC)

Hello User:Hurricanehink! Secret decided to delete this page so that way I could review Juan instead. Anyway, here is some issues I have with this article. I am going out for dinner tonight, so I will finish later. --12george1 (talk) 21:35, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
 * " that looped twice near the Louisiana coast, causing torrential flooding for several days." - I know there can be torrential rainfall, but can there be torrential flooding?
 * Sure! But I'll change it. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 01:35, 10 March 2014 (UTC)


 * "The energy from Juan helped spawn an occluded low in the Tennessee Valley, which produced " - Wikilink Tennessee Valley
 * Sure! ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 01:35, 10 March 2014 (UTC)


 * I know there is an article for the 1985 Election day floods, but could you add more information to the Inland and Mid-Atlantic section? Judging by the current size of the section, it doesn't look like the flood was very severe, other than the damage and death toll.
 * Well, Juan didn't cause that flooding. It just preceded it, like Hurricane Connie before Hurricane Diane. So I don't want to include too much info, as the focus of Juan should be more on the gulf coast. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 01:35, 10 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Alright then. I am going to let you keep the Inland and Mid-Atlantic section as it is.--12george1 (talk) 03:01, 10 March 2014 (UTC)


 * "On October 29, Louisiana Governor Edwin Edwards requested that the state's congressional delegation ask President Ronald Reagan for a disaster declaration." - I noticed toward the end that you wikilinked Ronald Reagan. So I think maybe you should wikilink Edwin Edwards, too. Wouldn't you like others to know about what an interesting person Edwards is? :P
 * I linked him in preps, should I link him again? ;) ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 01:35, 10 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Never mind. I wasn't paying attention. Just scratch that.--12george1 (talk) 02:59, 10 March 2014 (UTC)

More
 * "Juan moved erratically at first, eventually tracking more steadily to the north-northeast on October 27.[2]" - Maybe you should add a "but" in there, so that there is more of a contrast between Juan's initial erratic movement and then steady path.
 * It was never that steady though, given its later looping near Louisiana. It just became less erratic. I think the usage of "more steadily" confirms the steadier path. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)


 * "On October 31, the storm moved across the Mississippi Delta near Burrwood and accelerated to the northeast,[4][3] influenced by an approaching upper-level trough." - Since this is a new paragraph, you should mention what state Burrwood is in.
 * Agreed. Originally it wasn't the start of a paragraph, so I changed it. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)


 * "just west of Pensacola, Florida with winds of 65 km/h (100 km/h) late on October 31." - Hmm, that's an interesting conversion :P
 * Uhh, you see, it was before mph was... err, yea, I'll just change it instead of coming up with a snappy response :P ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)


 * "ceased tracking the circulation at 1800 UTC that day" - Wikilink to atmospheric circulation
 * Why? The article doesn't seem that relevant, since it's mostly talking about large-scale circulations like the polar vortex. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)


 * Any preparations for Mississippi?
 * It was never really much of a threat, given it's tucked in the corner. I didn't find any in my research, other than it being affected by the gale warnings. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)


 * "it dropped over 10 in (250 mm) across much of the southern portion of the state." - 10 inches of what? Sulfuric acid? :P
 * Gumbo, actually. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)


 * Ok, that's it for now. I will be happy to pass this article when these issues are fixed.--12george1 (talk) 02:59, 10 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Yay! Better? ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)


 * Nice job Hurricanehink. I am now going to pass this article. Regards, --12george1 (talk) 21:39, 11 March 2014 (UTC)