Talk:Hurricane Kathleen/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 14:54, 9 February 2012 (UTC)


 * I'll start this review shortly. MathewTownsend (talk) 14:54, 9 February 2012 (UTC)


 * comments:


 * lede


 * Should it be: "a tropical depression formed, named Kathleen"? - point at which storm was named.
 * When it became a tropical storm, it was named Kathleen, but the naming itself is not important enough for the lead. It flows better without mentioning this. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:49, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * background


 * "recurve" - could this be briefly explained without the reader having to read and understand the linked article?
 * Yea, but I might have made it worse. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:49, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * "These troughs" - starts two sentences in a row
 * Fixed. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:49, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Meteorological history
 * "weakened only slowly" - clumpsy wording
 * Removed "only". YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:51, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * "eye" - a hurricane doesn't have to develop an eye?
 * No. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:51, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * "Kathleen weakened only slowly over California. Tropical Storm Kathleen weakened " - repeated wording
 * How so? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * "Kathleen made its second landfall" - I'm not clear where the first one was
 * Clarified. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * "Finally, the center became difficult to locate" - so a hurricane can have a center, but not an eye?
 * Yea. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * other
 * common words like "cotton", "lettuce" and "hay" shouldn't be linked.
 * why is "one and 160 year event." linked to 100-year flood?
 * The article gives the basic principle of how the 1 in 100 year flood thing works. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * "Total damage was $160 million, making Kathleen one of the costliest tropical storms in state history" - is this still true in 2012?
 * yea. Have no source to back up, but according to my records, Kathleen is 2nd. YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * "flash flood watches were issued throughout Southern California, including the desert and mountains.[17] Flash flood warnings were also issued for parts of the state," - needs rewording as "parts of the state" is vague after previously specifying "Southern California".
 * Reworded slightly. Any better? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * why are some states linked and not others?
 * Good call. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * I made some copy edits so please revert any errors.

MathewTownsend (talk) 20:29, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:02, 9 February 2012 (UTC)

GA review-see WP:WIAGA for criteria (and here for what they are not)


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose: clear and concise, correct spelling and grammar:
 * B. Complies with MoS for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Provides references to all sources:
 * B. Provides in-line citations from reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Main aspects are addressed:
 * B. Remains focused:
 * 1) Does it follow the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Passed! Fine job. Congratulations! MathewTownsend (talk) 23:46, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Passed! Fine job. Congratulations! MathewTownsend (talk) 23:46, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Passed! Fine job. Congratulations! MathewTownsend (talk) 23:46, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Passed! Fine job. Congratulations! MathewTownsend (talk) 23:46, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Passed! Fine job. Congratulations! MathewTownsend (talk) 23:46, 9 February 2012 (UTC)