Talk:Hurricane Linda (2015)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 16:41, 6 December 2015 (UTC)

I figured I'll review something else, given how many GAN's I have.


 * In the opening sentence, I'm not sure "brought heavy rains" is appropriate. Normally it is a fine use, but the rain was tangential, so I'm not sure "brought" is the right term. "resulted in heavy rains" would be fine. It's more semantics, but it bugged me for some reason.
 * "mudslides resulted in the closure of multiple highways and damaged over a dozen homes" - grammatically, this could use more agreement. The "resulted in" should refer to the rest of the sentence, so "resulted in the closure of multiple highways and damage to over a dozen homes."
 * "Several small communities were temporarily isolated as flood waters covered bridges." - the "as" is ambiguous. Does it mean "after", "because of", "while", "due to", etc.?
 * Link pesos in the lead?
 * "Monsoonal moisture pulled north from Linda brought thunderstorms" - see garden path sentence. "pulled" is ambiguous whether it's an active verb or a passive participle, so it could be clearer.
 * "On that day Los Angeles received 2.39 in (61 mm) of rain making it the second-wettest September since records began in 1877." - was this the only rainfall LA received that month, on that day? If not, then say "contributing to the second-wettest..." Also, I'd add a comma or two.
 * You say "a seasonally strong upper-level trough" in consecutive paragraphs. How come you like that wording so much :P
 * Whoops...that was a lazy copy/paste job on my part when merging the Utah flood article into this. Reworded the second usage to jive better with the overall article. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 02:40, 7 December 2015 (UTC)
 * "and some homes were damaged due to flooding." - where is that in the article? Maybe I'm missing it.
 * Blame :P Removed the last sentence altogether since there wasn't much substance. Kept Hildale in the lede by indicating where the 21 fatalities took place. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 02:40, 7 December 2015 (UTC)

All in all a great read. Should pass GA very easily. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 16:41, 6 December 2015 (UTC)
 * Everything should be handled now. Thanks for the review, Hink! ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 02:40, 7 December 2015 (UTC)