Talk:Hurricane Lorenzo (2007)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tito xd (?!? - cool stuff) 05:57, 29 May 2011 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * … it formed in the Bay of Campeche off the east coast of Mexico from a tropical wave. — "east coast" here is imprecise, since it could mean the Caribbean. If anything, mention that the BoC is in the Gulf of Mexico.
 * … Lorenzo intensified from a 35 mph (55 km/h) tropical depression to an 80 mph (130 km/h) hurricane. — Both of these numbers should be hyphenated.
 *  Overall there were six deaths in the country, five in Puebla and of which three were a family that perished in a landslide. — confusing sentence structure, please rephrase. Also, mention where the other death was located for completeness.
 * … it traversed much of the Caribbean Sea before developing an area thunderstorms on September 21. — fix
 * … Initially a Hurricane Hunters flight was scheduled to investigate the system — add comma after "initially"
 * … In its formative stages, the depression executed a small cyclonic loop.[1] — "cyclonic" is excessive jargon in this case.
 * Primarily affected along the coast were small fishing villages, — awkward passive voice
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * The impact section is too small. See es:Huracán Lorenzo (2007) for more detail that could easily be added to the article.
 * Is an aftermath section needed in this case?
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * See the points above. Tito xd (?!? - cool stuff) 05:57, 29 May 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * See the points above. Tito xd (?!? - cool stuff) 05:57, 29 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Pass/Fail:
 * See the points above. Tito xd (?!? - cool stuff) 05:57, 29 May 2011 (UTC)
 * See the points above. Tito xd (?!? - cool stuff) 05:57, 29 May 2011 (UTC)

Alright, I got the grammary stuff. Some of it I just changed around the wording (so it wasn't exactly your suggestion). As for the Spanish article, I think I got the majority of the good stuff out of it. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 20:37, 29 May 2011 (UTC)
 * The modifications are satisfactory. Passed. Tito xd (?!? - cool stuff) 06:50, 30 May 2011 (UTC)