Talk:Hurricane Manuel/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 02:19, 1 July 2014 (UTC)

Hello User:Yellow Evan, I am going to be reviewing this article tonight. You expressed urgency for it to be reviewed, as this effects a GT. So anyway, the following are issues I have with passing this article and listing it as a Good Article.--12george1 (talk) 02:19, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Wow, just this! Thanks for the review. YE Pacific Hurricane  02:44, 1 July 2014 (UTC)


 * "Within favorable conditions aloft, the storm intensified into a tropical storm" - I think it should be just "With favorable conditions", because it wasn't inside the favorable conditions. Not like "a tropical wave within the ITCZ".
 * Yea, it was actually. YE Pacific Hurricane  02:44, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
 * "The following day, Manuel curved westward and strengthened to a point just shy of hurricane intensity before making its first landfall at that intensity." - Might want to throw a date in here somewhere, because (1. we are talking about two days here and (2. you are also assuming the reading knows what date "The following day" is referring to.
 * Noted. YE Pacific Hurricane  02:44, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
 * "additional impacts from Atlantic Hurricane Ingrid. After its" - I think you should wikilink Atlantic hurricane here, unless you want to practice basinism :P
 * I practice EPACism. YE Pacific Hurricane  02:44, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
 * "There, 20,000 persons were evacuated to shelter." - I think you need to add an "a" between "to" and "shelter".
 * Wow, I am completely satisfied with the MH, Preps, Impact, and Aftermath!
 * D :D :DD No kidding. 02:44, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
 * On reference #1, change "Pasch, Richard J; Zelinsky, David A" to "Richard J. Pasch; David A. Zelinsky. Also, why isn't the National Hurricane Center on there?
 * Did both. YE Pacific Hurricane  02:44, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Looking down further at reference #9 and #10, it looks like Richard Pasch and David Zelinsky lost their middle initial.
 * You can blame Hink, he wrote the MH when he was active. Think of this positively, it set him up to do other TC articles. YE Pacific Hurricane  02:44, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
 * On reference #11, John Cangialosi's middle initial is "P."
 * Noted. YE Pacific Hurricane  02:44, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
 * On references #35, #38, #46, #51, #52, #54, #65, #96, #98, and #106, you have the publisher as "Relief Web". It should be "ReliefWeb" - one word.
 * Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane  02:44, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Reference #92 is a deadlink. Replace the url with this one and archive it.
 * ✅. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  02:44, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
 * On reference #101, the title should start with a capital letter
 * ✅. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  02:44, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Good job, YE! I am now going to pass this article and list it as a GA. Btw, good luck in round 4 of the WikiCup. Congratulations,--12george1 (talk) 02:50, 1 July 2014 (UTC)