Talk:Hurricane Marco (2020)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Etriusus (talk · contribs) 05:26, 5 August 2023 (UTC)

Grabbing this review

Images

 * All the rights are in order.
 * Captions look good
 * Minor MOS:SANDWICH issue

Copy-vios

 * Nothing exciting
 * Earwig only flags simple phrases and proper nouns

Sourcing

 * FN 1 and FN 3 are duplicates
 * References 1 and 3? They're different outlooks. Tails   Wx  17:49, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Ah, you're right, I wasn't checking the archived source, my bad. 🏵️ Etrius ( Us) 21:46, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * No concerns about reliability.
 * All links are either live or archived

Misc

 * Minor vandalism in May, but page is currently stable.
 * Nominator is primary author

Prose

 * was the first of two tropical cyclones to threaten the Gulf Coast of the United States within a three-day period, with the other being Hurricane Laura.
 * - MOS:FIRST The first sentence is meant to give a brief summary, this is a bit too vague
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  15:57, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * The thirteenth named storm and third hurricane of the record-breaking 2020 Atlantic hurricane season...
 * - Weirdly formatted sentence
 * Most leads in hurricanes describe it like that. Tails   Wx  16:15, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Due to strong wind shear... Split sentence
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  15:57, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Why is the formed date listed as "August 20, 2020", there is nothing in the body to support this
 * Body now supports the formation of the tropical cyclone on August 20. Tails   Wx  16:21, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Shortly after being named, Marco continued to contradict the forecasts and followed a more northerly course
 * -It's never explained what the forecasts were. This is also contradicted since you later say the storm went east, this may be a product that the fact that there is no chronology established here.
 * Removed! Tails   Wx  16:17, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * As it was a small system... reorder sentence, hard to follow
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  15:57, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * 'Relentless ' WP:PUFFERY
 * Fixed! Tails   Wx  15:57, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * but that was changed in post-storm analysis. What was it changed to?
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  15:57, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * "Tropical Depression Fourteen" why is it designated at 13th somewhere else, more clarification is needed
 * ✅ Tails   Wx  16:15, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * "600 additional resources"
 * -Don't start a sentence with numbers, say "Six hundred" (There's a MOS policy somewhere but I'm writing this at 1:30 AM)
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  15:57, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * this was more than twice the average August rainfall of 9.1 in (231 mm) awkward wording
 * Fixed! Tails   Wx  15:57, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Despite this, the NHC did not attribute Marco to any deaths in their post-storm report why?
 * Unfortunately, there's no reason why. The tropical cyclone report the National Hurricane Center released for Marco did not mention the indirect death, therefore the reason is unknown. Numerous sources did state that there was a death connected to the tropical cyclone, however. Tails   Wx  16:26, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * there was flooding due to the growth of rivers that come from mountains nearby awkward wording
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  16:15, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * However, heavy rainfall Cut however, repetitive wording
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  15:57, 5 August 2023 (UTC)

Comment: The prose is a little awkward, but otherwise the page is close to GA status. Kicking it back to you. 🏵️ Etrius ( Us) 05:26, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * @Tails Wx That appears to be everything, I made a second pass of the article and made some minor prose modifications, please review them when you can. While ALT text is highly recommended, it is not an explicit GA criteria. At this time the article passes, congrats on another GA!!! 🏵️ Etrius ( Us) 21:47, 5 August 2023 (UTC)