Talk:Hurricane Michael/Archives/2020/July

Revision of MH
Exactly what is wrong with the current version of the meteorological history that requires us to much more closely paraphrase the TCR? There are numerous other issues too: You have yet to specify what exactly is "wrong" with the current description, and in any case you should not merely paraphrase the TCR.--Jasper Deng (talk) 16:45, 9 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Using unnecessarily jargony wording like "vorticity center" (WP:AUDIENCE)
 * Numerous grammar errors, such as excessive conjunctions in "The pause was temporary, and rapid intensification resumed by 12:00 UTC on October 9, and the hurricane turned north-northwestward that day under the influence of the aforementioned mid-level ridge.", and "the maximum winds dropped below the category 3 equivalent on the SSHWS scale before the eye moved into southwestern Georgia at around 21:30 on October 10"
 * Numerous styling errors, such as "and a hurricane a day later by 12:00 UTC on 8 October" (purely redundant) and "85 knots (98 mph; 157 km/h)" (use of knots and not following NHC rounding conventions)
 * Clustering all of the first few references out of context, in violation of citation guidelines

Nothing is wrong with those sentences that you have provided, except the knots value, which I should've made MPH and KM/H with the correct rounding conventions. The paragraph isn't a paraphrase, but a rewrite based on the TCR and discussions (clearly you haven't made the effort to look at that and I'm not surprised looking at your ignorance). ModulatedRotation  - Talk here 18:44, 9 July 2020 (GMT)
 * No, there is something clearly wrong with the quoted sentences (and others – this is only a selection). And this is a close paraphrase, with lots of phrases left unmodified, such as "Michael rapidly weakened after its landfall" (use and it will be evident). Another poorly-written sentence: "Dry air northward of the system caused initial decay in the eyewall, and subsequent pausing of intensification occurred as it reached the southeastern Gulf of Mexico late on 8 October." Also, stop trying to harass me off-wiki with personal attacks; you will be blocked if you continue.--Jasper Deng (talk) 17:53, 9 July 2020 (UTC)

Protecting admin comments
This page has been protected for 48 hours due to this edit war. Please note that protecting the current version of the page is not an endorsement of its content (see WP:PREFER), and I am not taking a position in this content discussion. However, in regard to the discussion above, I will note that there doesn't have to be anything "wrong" with the current version of the page for an edit to be an improvement. I encourage you both to work congenially above to reach a consensus. –Darkwind (talk) 21:31, 9 July 2020 (UTC)
 * First, let me say that my choice of "wrong" was not the right word choice, but it's still clear that (s)he needs to justify why their version is better than the status quo especially with the problems I pointed out above. Also, they are on a wikibreak and it is unlikely the protection will have much effect.--Jasper Deng (talk) 02:48, 10 July 2020 (UTC)