Talk:Hurricane Rafael/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 21:47, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Hello TAWX14, I will be reviewing Rafael, under the condition that you do not yell.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 21:47, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Toolbox Checks

 * No issues reported. Good job! Though Peer Reviewer indicates you have only two images. Maybe you should try adding more.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Lead

 * You should link tropical wave. Is it an oceanic wave? Link.
 * . TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "...it skipped tropical depression status..." I'm fine with skipped, but it sort of sounds funny. If there's any alternative, then you can change it.
 * I think it's fine as is. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "...a subsequent decrease..." Decrease of what. And you should probably use 'a subsequent weakening...'
 * I already state what in the first part of the sentence. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "...to develop in earnest..." Not sure if that is a correct usage, is it?
 * Why wouldn't it be? TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Link East Coast of the United States.
 * . TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Link sea surface temperature.
 * . TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "As much as a foot of rain fell..." Needs metric conversion.
 * Does it? I did not use an exact total, so I don't think so. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Link Bermuda.
 * . TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Link Nova Scotia.
 * . TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "...but overall, damage to both locations was minimal." Which two? I see four locations in the second paragraph.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Was speaking mainly about Newfoundland.... TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Meteorological history

 * "National Hurricane Center (NHC)" I would exclude the abbreviation from the link
 * No. It's always a part of. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "As Rafael moved northward, it continued to intensify rapidly in spite of weak wind shear." Is the occurrence weak wind shear prohibitive to the intensification of tropical cyclones? A publication indicates low wind shear is necessary for rapid intensification anyways.
 * Should've been moderate. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "a Category 1..." Category 1 what.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)
 * . TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Caribbean islands

 * Link watch and warning terms
 * K. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "By the morning hours of October 9, the warnings were discontinued for Saint Lucia and Martinique..." October 9 is before Rafael developed into a tropical storm. Did you mean that?
 * No. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Link Federal Emergency Management Agency, and since you've been adding abbreviations to organizations, add FEMA.
 * K. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Link Météo-France.
 * K. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "...most businesses closed..." → "...most businesses were closed...*
 * Yes. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "A few people attempted to drive through flooded roads and required rescue; however, there were no reports of injuries or fatalities." I thought the one fatality associated with Rafael was the result of an attempted drive-thru of a flooded road.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Err...right. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Bermuda

 * "the main two airports on Bermuda—WestJet and United Airlines—cancelled hundreds of flights on October 16." Are those airports or airlines?  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Airlines. Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Newfoundland

 * Canadian Dollars are officially abbreviated as C$, not CA$.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Gotcha. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Since these were the only problems I identified, I will pass this GAN once you have fixed the aforementioned qualms.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)