Talk:Hvila vid denna källa/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:41, 3 December 2021 (UTC)

This is the oldest unreviewed songs GAN so I'll give it a go! --K. Peake 09:41, 3 December 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:43, 3 December 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * Img looks good!
 * Thanks!


 * The word "or" is redundant in brackets since these make it clear you are using an alternate title
 * Gone.


 * Not only should best-known and best-loved be in a different sentence from the first one, but the ref shouldn't be in the lead because everything there needs to be cited in the body
 * Fixed.


 * Subtitle should come before the narrator's part
 * Fixed.


 * What the narrator offers should not be in quotes, unless you use a source and if so, this needs to be the same phrasing
 * Cited.
 * That's better but it should only be invoked once in the sentence. --K. Peake 21:29, 3 December 2021 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Snipe to itself
 * Done.


 * Again, the usage of "or" is useless for the subtitle brackets part per earlier
 * It's the translation of "eller". The word is particular to this Epistle.
 * Oh I did not know that, thanks for explaining. --K. Peake 21:29, 3 December 2021 (UTC)


 * "has been performed in" → "has been used in" unless your source says performed, then reword in the body
 * Done.


 * There should be a second para of sufficient length, which can be created if you add something about reception alongside the final parts in the new order
 * Done.

Context

 * The first sentence's ref should solely be at the end of it
 * Moved.


 * "at the royal court." → at places including the royal court."
 * Done.


 * "the eighteenth century." → "the 18th century." per MOS:NUM
 * Done.

Melody and verse form

 * Add relevant info for the audio sample text to meet WP:NFCCP
 * Done. The melody is of course free, however.


 * Pipe 2/4 time to Duple and quadruple metre
 * I think we should leave this one; the target article clearly needs work and may one day have a 2/4 section or at least a link anchor.


 * Pipe key to Key (music)
 * Done.


 * "each of 14 lines," → "each consisting of 14 lines,"
 * Done.


 * "making it one of" → "standing as one of"
 * That breaks the connection with the previous phrase.


 * Remove comma after Epistle 25
 * No, "Epistle 25" is in apposition to the song's name, which is comma-delimited.


 * "something Bellman is known" → "which Bellman is known"
 * Done.


 * "that it must" → "disputed that it must"
 * Edited.


 * "the source is" → "the official source is" to make it clear this is not one of their opinions
 * Edited.


 * Imgs look good!
 * Thanks.

Lyrics

 * Wikilink snipe to itself
 * Done.


 * Pipe game to Galliformes
 * Done.

Reception

 * Merge with the below section, retitling to Reception and legacy
 * Done.


 * Img looks good!
 * Thanks.


 * The film and schoolbook parts should be at the end of the merged section
 * Moved.


 * "has featured in" → "has been featured in"
 * Edited.


 * "in this, the last" → "in the composition, the last"
 * No, it's clear as it is: the next word is "Epistle".


 * "as does the final stanza:" → "like the final stanza does:"
 * It's already in plain English.


 * If dying words refers to all of those in the Burman para, then first note it after "is Bellman's" instead
 * Moved.


 * "and Bellman knew that" → "while Bellman knew that"
 * Edited.


 * "in Bellman's longest poem," → "in Bellman's longest poem" plus merge this with the above para
 * The commas delimit the poem's name, in apposition. Merged paras.


 * Pipe parmesan to Parmigiano Reggiano
 * Done.


 * Merge the Svenska Dagbladet para with the one below it
 * Done.


 * "then than it is now." → "then than at the lecture's time."
 * Edited.


 * "dismisses the possibility that it" → "dismissed the possibility that the pimpinella"
 * I think we're better without that repetition, it's twice above and twice in this sentence already.


 * Wikilink as aniseed instead
 * Done.

Recording and adaptations

 * Make this the last para of reception and legacy, merging with the films and songbook info
 * Merged.


 * "where it forms the title track of" → "forming the title track of"
 * Edited.


 * Either add more info for the Sven-Bertil Taube cover or remove it per WP:SONGCOVER
 * Done.


 * "It has been" → "The composition has been"
 * Edited.

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed after this speedy review! --K. Peake 21:29, 3 December 2021 (UTC)
 * All done now. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:05, 4 December 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ time! --K. Peake 11:02, 5 December 2021 (UTC)