Talk:Hyde Park, London/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 12:38, 10 August 2017 (UTC)

I'll review this on the weekend, I didn't realize it had been in the queue this long!♦ Dr. Blofeld  12:38, 10 August 2017 (UTC)

Apologies for the delay, reading now :-)♦ Dr. Blofeld  10:05, 15 August 2017 (UTC)

"It opened to the public in the early 17th century" -can we be more precise?
 * Lede
 * Fixed Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  16:20, 15 August 2017 (UTC)


 * History
 * "Military executions were common in Hyde Park at this time; John Rocque's Map of London, 1746 marks a point inside the park as "the stone where soldiers are shot."[19]" -is there anything else worth mentioning? A footnote with some details might be good here.
 * I've dropped something in a footnote. As the map is obviously PD, it's online, and you can see for yourself the spot that is proudly marked "where soldiers are shot"! Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  14:58, 16 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "The first coherent landscaping in Hyde Park was undertaken by Charles Bridgeman for Queen Caroline (wife of King George II),[16] under the supervision of Charles Withers, the Surveyor-General of Woods and Forests." -when?
 * 1726. I've expanded this a bit Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  15:47, 16 August 2017 (UTC)


 * "The Hyde Park Lido first opened in 1930. It was designed by the Commissioner of Works, George Lansbury, and still sees regular use in the summer.[24]" -a bit "notey", is there a way to elaborate or flesh out the parts on 20th century history a bit so it flows better?
 * Take another look :-) Ritchie333 (talk) (cont)  15:47, 16 August 2017 (UTC)


 * Features
 * "During the late 20th century, over 9,000 elm trees in Hyde Park were killed by Dutch elm disease." -can you elaborate, seems quite notable to me.
 * I've added a bit more, but the sources I have just say pretty much what's in the article now and leave it at that :-/ <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  15:47, 16 August 2017 (UTC)


 * " 7-tonne" worth converting?
 * I don't see why not. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  15:47, 16 August 2017 (UTC)


 * Concerts
 * "while John Peel later said it was "the nicest concert I’ve ever been to"." -seem a little out of place here
 * Well John Peel is known for have attended quite a few gigs, so to pick one out like that is a kind of significant. <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  15:47, 16 August 2017 (UTC)

Overall seem to cover what is required for GA level but in places it does still seem a bit "notey" and could do with some polishing still.♦ Dr. Blofeld  10:27, 15 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Okay, I've beefed up the article so it's got another 2K of prose, mostly in the 20th - 21st century area as requested. Any other comments? <b style="color:#7F007F">Ritchie333</b> <sup style="color:#7F007F">(talk) <sup style="color:#7F007F">(cont)  15:47, 16 August 2017 (UTC)

Looks good Ritchie for GA, thankyou for being one of the few people to bother with core articles like this and the pier.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: ♦  Dr. Blofeld  18:04, 16 August 2017 (UTC)