Talk:Hygrophorus olivaceoalbus/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mark Arsten (talk · contribs) 19:46, 1 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Will review, hopefully comments will be posted this weekend. Mark Arsten (talk) 19:46, 1 June 2012 (UTC)


 * There's a pretty messed up confusion regarding synonymy. A. adustus cannot possibly be "illegitimate" for " not having a proper description." If it has not proper description, it is not validly published, ergo is cannot be illegiimate. I've warned you when reviewing Myriostoma about the necessity of actually looking at the sources: Batsch's name is clearly validly published, and what MycoBank actually says is that it's an illegitimate renaming of Schäffer's A. brunneus (the "Sch. XXXII" bit is a plate number reference). What goes on is that both these names are illegitimate because Fries sanctioned his own name in Systema Mycologicum 1:35 (for some unfathomable reason, it seems either this information was deleted from MycoBank, or MycoBank no longer displays place of sanctioning). On an unrelated matter, you might want to look at Lübken published papers (e.g. with teh discovery of thehygrophorones) rather than the German dissertation, if only for the fact they're in English. Circéus (talk) 20:37, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Well, all I can say it's good you're around to keep me in line! I trimmed my OR for now, but will keep working on this section. Sasata (talk) 00:13, 3 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Since It's only a GA I won't do a full review, but obviously if you'd like me to I will gladly do so (and probably will end up rewriting the nomenclature/taxonomy section from scratches XD) Circéus (talk) 02:02, 3 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Hi Circéus, feel free to weigh in here as much as you like. I don't know a whole lot about the subject, so it's good to have an extra set of eyes. I'll probably get around to posting comments tomorrow. Mark Arsten (talk) 02:40, 3 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Yes please, do comment. The article is freshly translated, and I haven't had time yet to do a FAC-level lit search, but any outside improvements would be welcome ... even if it means you have to rewrite the taxonomy! Sasata (talk) 05:20, 3 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Comments by Mark Arsten: Looks good thus far, I am starting to like mushroom articles.
 * Lead
 * "The fruit bodies (mushrooms) appears from August..." Is this correct? I would have written "The fruit bodies appear from August..." (But I may be mistaken here.
 * You are not mistaken; fixed. Sasata (talk) 16:20, 4 June 2012 (UTC)


 * "and its longish stalk." Is there a better word than "longish"? Or is that generally used in these articles?
 * Changed to "long and slimy". Sasata (talk) 16:20, 4 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Some WP:OVERLINKING issues here, North America don't need to be linked.
 * De-linked major geographical areas. Sasata (talk) 16:20, 4 June 2012 (UTC)


 * "several mycologists have been skeptical regarding its taste." I'm not sure that I understand what it means to be skeptical of a taste. Is there a better word?
 * Changed to "opinions are divided regarding its taste." Sasata (talk) 16:20, 4 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Taxonomy and classification
 * This sentence feels a bit long to me: "The infrageneric classification of H. olivaceoalbus is complex: while some species are very similar to each other in appearance of the fruit body and their microscopic characteristics of the nominate taxon, the fungus H. olivaceoalbus var. gracilis shows a much smaller and partially differently shaped fruit body, but it is counted because of the surface character of its fruit body as a variety."
 * "The fungi of this section have greasy to slimy caps and stems. Their caps are darkish brown grey, olive or orange, and their stems are nattered or more or less distinctly ringed." Maybe move this below the table, it might flow better there.


 * Fruit body
 * The first two paragraphs of this section aren't sourced, should probably add some cites in.
 * Please give me a few days to work on this. The article is translated from German, and they lumped all citations at the end of the paragraph. I'll need a bit of time to figure out what facts belong to what source (or replace with my own sources at hand) and place the cites more specifically. Sasata (talk) 16:57, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Not a problem, take your time. Mark Arsten (talk) 21:47, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Sorry to hear that; I did not know that is a requirement here on enwiki. In future I will choose articles more carefully. There is one reference in that section that is on German; if you think that book is important I will ask the main contributor on dewiki.-- GoP T C N 09:03, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Generally you want to shoot for one citation per paragraph (outside of the lead) at minimum. Multiple cites at the end of a paragraph are sometimes Ok, but are less than ideal. Dewiki is less strict about inline citations, right? Mark Arsten (talk) 14:20, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Yes, the dewiki is less strict. I will wait for Sasata's suggestion regarding this.-- GoP T C N 18:05, 5 June 2012 (UTC)


 * "often olive brownish nattered" should this be hyphenated?
 * Well, I think hyphens for compound modifier are not a requirement. Sasata made prior the GAN some comments regarding the use of the term "nattered". Now, do you understand it, Mark Arsten and co? Otherwise we need to reword it.-- GoP T C N 09:03, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Actually, now that I think about it, I am unsure of the meaning. Mark Arsten (talk) 14:20, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
 * I linked the words to wiktionary; the word is not common in English language but I saw it on some fungi books.-- GoP T C N 18:05, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Huh, well, you've taught me a new word then. Mark Arsten (talk) 17:47, 11 June 2012 (UTC)


 * "The taste and odor are mild and with no distinct smell, but turns reddish when treated with sodium hydroxide and sulfuric acid." I don't follow here, the taste and odor turn reddish? Mark Arsten (talk) 01:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Added "but the flesh..."-- GoP T C N 09:03, 5 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Microscopic characteristics
 * Need a cite in the first paragraph.
 * "which if horizontally arranged shape a ixocutis and possess clamp connections" typo here.
 * Done-- GoP T <sup style="color:#8EE5EE;">C <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">N 09:03, 5 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Similar species
 * "H. olivaceoalbus is only definable especially through the double velum" I'm not sure "especially" is needed here.
 * Removed-- GoP <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">T <sup style="color:#8EE5EE;">C <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">N 09:03, 5 June 2012 (UTC)


 * " It is remarkable that H. persoonii and H. olivaceoalbus produce different mycosterine (sterole) and their flesh react with the addition of NaOH differently (red on H. olivaceoalbus versus olive green on H. persoonii)." Is remarkable the right word here?
 * I removed the phrase.-- GoP <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">T <sup style="color:#8EE5EE;">C <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">N 18:05, 5 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Ecology and habitat
 * Might want to note in the first paragraph that you're referring to North America.
 * Done.-- GoP <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">T <sup style="color:#8EE5EE;">C <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">N 09:03, 5 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Prose is a bit messy here, I tried to clean some up.
 * Thanks for the copyedits.-- GoP <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">T <sup style="color:#8EE5EE;">C <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">N 09:03, 5 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Edible mushroom
 * Some copyediting needed here too: "Hygrophorus olivaceoalbus finds a use especially in the kitchen, but the fungus' indistinctive taste received overall mixed reception.[19] Several mycologists criticized the elaborate removal of the slimy skin; David Arora meant the flesh's taste is insipid.[17]"


 * Ok a little work on sourcing and prose to do, but otherwise seems ok. Placing on hold. Mark Arsten (talk) 21:47, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your comments. -- GoP <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">T <sup style="color:#8EE5EE;">C <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">N 09:03, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Mark, I've placed the citations more precisely (and replaced a few), and copyedited the article. Please have another look. Sasata (talk) 05:07, 11 June 2012 (UTC)


 * I removed the German book as it does not have any significant content, and it is furthermore too German-centric. Regards.-- GoP <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">T <sup style="color:#8EE5EE;">C <sub style="color:#8EE5EE;">N 18:07, 11 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Ok, I've gone over it again, and I'm confident it meets GA standards at this point. ("finds a use especially in the kitchen" should probably still be rephrased though.) Images, links etc. are Ok too. Good work guy, I'll pass this now. Mark Arsten (talk) 19:54, 11 June 2012 (UTC)