Talk:Hymn to the Nile

Honestly, this sounds like it was written by a sixth grader. Can't anyone do better?

I've done my best to clean up the writing on this page(including citations that didn't seem to point to the relevant source). This unfortunately involved removing a lot of stuff, but I believe this was the best course of action.

There were a few sentences that I couldn't verify using the listed sources, and quite a few that sounded like a student trying to write an essay(which the anon person before me was clearly annoyed by). Many of the latter were lifted almost wholesale from their sources(or, more accurately, source - all of the ones I noticed involved the Mike Dowling source). I found my way to https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Close_paraphrasing, which suggests that a limited amount of this might be fine, but this case didn't seem very limited to me & was tied up in writing that seemed to have very little to do with the actual Hymn to the Nile.

As short as the article is now, I think it's better to have a short article than the mess it was before.

HFisch89 (talk) 01:27, 29 December 2021 (UTC)