Talk:Hype Boy/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Nkon21 (talk · contribs) 04:36, 26 February 2024 (UTC)

Will review this within the next couple of days ɴᴋᴏɴ21  ❯❯❯  talk  04:36, 26 February 2024 (UTC)

Comments

 * and the latter wrote the lyrics → while the latter wrote the lyrics
 * Music critics praised the retro-styled production of "Hype Boy" and commented that it had a dreamy atmosphere. → Perhaps rephrase it to something like: "Hype Boy" received praise from music critics for its nostalgic production style, who felt that it evoked a dreamy atmosphere.
 * NME, NPR, and Rolling Stone included it in their lists of the best songs of 2022. "Hype Boy" also featured on K-pop-specific year-end lists, ranking atop the list by NME. → NME, NPR, and Rolling Stone included it in their lists of the best songs of 2022, and was ranked the best K-pop release of the year by NME.
 * streams in respective countries → streams in their respective countries
 * division of Hybe Corporation where Min is the CEO. → division of Hybe Corporation, where Min holds the position of the CEO.
 * Th group's → The group's
 * without prior information regarding the group's lineup → without any prior information regarding the group's lineup
 * Min explained that by releasing "Attention" without confirming the members' names and "Hype Boy" featuring individual members, she expected that "people would come back to the first video to look them up". → Perhaps rephrase it to something like: Min explained that by unveiling "Attention" without confirming the members' names and by subsequently releasing "Hype Boy", which featured the members individually, she anticipated that viewers would revisit the first video to seek further information about them.
 * EP's three singles. On August 4 Sounds choppy, perhaps rephrase it to something like: EP's three singles; on August 4
 * Gigi, Ylva Dimberg, and the member Hanni wrote the lyrics to "Hype Boy", a song about young love akin to a daydream. → Gigi, Ylva Dimberg, and the member Hanni penned the lyrics for "Hype Boy", a song that captures the essence of young love akin to a daydream.
 * The song has lyrics in both Korean and English, and it is two minutes and 56 seconds long. → It contains lyrics in both Korean and English, and runs for two minutes and 56 seconds long.
 * Replace nowiki with in NME's
 * and its rhythms evoke → while its rhythms evoke
 * Chin added that the track's arrangement using "tropical touches and future bass" made for "a dreamy, almost hazy atmosphere". → Chin noted that the track's arrangement, infused with "tropical touches and future bass", created a "dreamy" and "almost hazy atmosphere".
 * It featured on unranked → It was also featured on unranked
 * "Hype Boy" debuted → Commercially, "Hype Boy" debuted
 * denoting 100 million streams accumulated → for accumulating over 100 million streams
 * released 8 months prior → released eight months prior
 * Billboard Global Excl. U.S. – Year-End 2022 → Billboard Global Excl. U.S. – 2022 on ref 56
 * Digital Chart 2022 → Digital Chart – 2022 on ref 57
 * Same thing for refs 58 and 60
 * Billboard Japan Hot 100 – 2023 Year-End → "Billboard Japan Hot 100 – 2023 on ref 59
 * Switch Weibo to publisher on ref 47
 * I suggest adding some information about promotion and live performances, as there are quite a few of them on List of NewJeans live performances
 * I already ran the archive bot on the article

Sorry for the delay, but here are my comments! ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯  talk  02:21, 5 March 2024 (UTC)


 * I'll get to this as soon as I could. Please bare with me some time. Ippantekina (talk) 10:21, 12 March 2024 (UTC)
 * sorry for the delay but I'm gonna take a long Wikibreak due to an increasingly busy schedule irl. I however see that User:Dcdiehardfan has acted on some suggestions, so could Dcdiehardfan kindly take over this GAN to complete it? Thanks much for your consideration :) Ippantekina (talk) 02:15, 14 March 2024 (UTC)
 * @Ippantekina I'd gladly be willing to help you with regards to completing the GAR as best as I can, thank you for asking. I hope you have a great Wikibreak and look forward to seeing you back again on the platform soon! :) -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 02:18, 14 March 2024 (UTC)
 * No problem, you should definitely prioritize your offline schedules. @Dcdiehardfan, you can take all the time you need. ɴᴋᴏɴ21  ❯❯❯  talk  16:51, 14 March 2024 (UTC)
 * @Nkon21 Thank you. I think all the other comments should be resolved, as marked above. However, regarding the comment ab promotion and live performances, I'm not sure how I'd incorporate that into the article tbqh as I'm not as familiar with song articles. Would I make another section titled Live Performances or and also, which content should I collate from the live performance list do you think? Dcdiehardfan (talk) 20:34, 14 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Yeah, you can just add a few sentences to the Background and release section like Ippantekina did on OMG, or like you said, summarize the group's performances of the song in its own section like on this article, for example. It's up to you. ɴᴋᴏɴ21  ❯❯❯  talk  03:00, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
 * @Nkon21 Sounds good, I'll get around to incorporating the content in a few days or so, I'm also a bit busy but should be able to get the edits done by Wednesday I think or so. Dcdiehardfan (talk) 02:43, 18 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Take your time! No need to rush if you're busy. ɴᴋᴏɴ21  ❯❯❯  talk  04:43, 18 March 2024 (UTC)
 * @Nkon21 Thanks for the leniency! However, I'm glad to say that I've managed to insert content regarding the live performances just now. The prose is a bit raw as I went straight into inserting the content, so definitely feel free to make any recommendations or suggestions if need be. :) Dcdiehardfan (talk) 02:46, 20 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Passing now as all my comments have been addressed. Good work! ɴᴋᴏɴ21  ❯❯❯  talk  01:46, 21 March 2024 (UTC)