Talk:IBM ThinkPad 701

Not quite ready for GAC
Hello!

This is an interesting article on a worthy subject! I have a few suggestions before undertaking a GAC. First, there is a lot of clunky language in here. My suggestion is to read the piece aloud, beginning to end, as that's an excellent way to catch grammatical errors and inelegant phrasings.

The table of specifications is a bit hard to read and unattractive. Is this a standard format or something you developed individually?

The placement of the video is currently awkward. It might serve better close to the keyboard section it is meant to illustrate. Also, a description of the video would be helpful.

I'd like to see more on the genesis of the 701. Was it build around the keyboard concept, or was there always going to be a 486-based IBM laptop in this era, and the butterfly came later?

You mention the 760, but is it actually a version of the 701 or just the next model that came out?

In the infobox, is there a series parameter where you can indicate which model series came before and after the 701?

That's what I have for now. Let's shoot for B class and then go for GAC. :) --Neopeius (talk) 13:42, 17 June 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your comments.


 * I will try to fix the clunky language in the next days in this article.
 * Regarding the specifications table, I loosely based it on the IBM Reference Guide that is used as a reference and changed the order of the items. The last three rows could be changed into prose as there is only one column with info. For the other rows, I don't think there is a clearer way of expressing this information in a different way. If you have suggestions let me know, but I don't know how to make it any better than this.


 * I agree about the video, I already moved it.


 * About the genesis, I will look for more sources. From what I currently understand, there were quite a few 486 laptops already, they mainly wanted to solve the issue of not being able to fit a full sized keyboard into a laptop with a smaller footprint, like the IBM ThinkPad 500, which sold badly due to its small keyboard. So John Karidis invented the keyboard concept. I'll look into adding this with reliable sources.


 * About the 760, it was basically the next notebook that came out, its not a version of the 701. But I thought it was useful to mention in the further development paragraph.


 * The previous and next model is a bit difficult. You could argue that from a model name perspective, the IBM ThinkPad 700 came before. But because it is a subnotebook, the IBM ThinkPad 510 would have been the predecessor. IBM did not wanted to attach the bad reputation of the 500/510 to the 701, so they used the "wrong" series. So I'm not sure what to add to the infobox, maybe only describe this nuance in prose only. Let me know what you think.


 * Can you *not* fail the nomination, so I can fix this up to the B-level and continue the GA review this way? Because it can take a long time before it will be reviewed otherwise. Thanks. PhotographyEdits (talk) 14:54, 19 June 2021 (UTC)


 * I'll be happy to keep this nomination going. :) I look forward to reviewing the updated article! --Neopeius (talk) 15:12, 19 June 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you! I was thinking about the table, what do you think about having the spec information both in prose and in a table? Like IBM_ThinkPad_700. A lot of ThinkPad articles have at least the table, so for consistency I would prefer keeping it. PhotographyEdits (talk) 13:26, 20 June 2021 (UTC)
 * I wasn't suggesting to eliminate the table. I just wanted to make sure it was a standardized thing. :)

Page move
I've opened a technical request to move this page to IBM ThinkPad 701C. 701C is the model name used by IBM and the general public, so I think it is more fitting. TheForgottenKing (talk) 04:27, 3 May 2022 (UTC)