Talk:INS Saryu (P54)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:18, 21 August 2013 (UTC)

I'll get started on this one shortly. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 10:18, 21 August 2013 (UTC) Comments
 * in the infobox, melara should be Melara✅
 * in the infobox, FCS seems unnecessary. What ships armament system doesn't include a FCS these days, and the FCS isn't just for the 76 mm gun?
 * That isn't unreasonable to say, but a prospective reader might not be aware of this. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 18:19, 26 August 2013 (UTC)


 * needs convert templates throughout✅
 * the article begs the question what proportion of the ship is Indian-made, and it should probably be noted in the text that the weapons systems are Italian and Russian manufactured.✅
 * what model of the AK630 is the CIWS? CIWS should be spelt out initially then the initialisation used after that if needed.✅
 * AM Roy should probably be redlinked given he is a three star.✅
 * what attempts have been made to locate a free image of the vessel?
 * Many by the original author. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 18:19, 26 August 2013 (UTC)

more to follow. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 04:06, 25 August 2013 (UTC)
 * SEMT Pielstick should be linked, but are they SEMT or Kirloskar-Pielstick engines?✅
 * I believe they are SEMT, but I am unsure. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 18:19, 26 August 2013 (UTC)


 * is 2,300 her displacement?✅
 * No. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 18:19, 26 August 2013 (UTC)


 * 76.2 or 76 mm gun?✅
 * can the ship support a helo, or is a helo part of its complement? It isn't clear.✅
 * Andaman and Nicobar Command is overlinked, and the initialisation should be introduced at its first mention in the body and then used from then on.✅
 * what is the link between the 2008 Mumbai attacks and the ordering of the vessel?✅
 * I consider all her dimensions should be explicitly detailed in the body, not just the infobox, along with conversion templates for the numbers.✅
 * suggest "delivered within 18 months (of what? the commissioning of Saryu?), at six month intervals"✅
 * link Indian Navy in lead✅
 * suggest "INS Saryu is the most advanced vessel to be constructed by GSL in terms of design, performance and quality."✅
 * suggest to have the capability . They've done it.✅
 * have any more ships of the class been delivered yet? If not, are they overdue?✅
 * Yes, but that is to be mentioned on the class' page, not this article. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 18:19, 26 August 2013 (UTC)


 * MOS mandates spelling out numbers under 10.✅
 * delete "modern", it is unnecessary. The IN wouldn't be installing obsolete✅
 * Commander Singh is the first commanding officer, not "will be". If this is his second command, perhaps add what ship his first command was.✅
 * retrieval dates (in references) should be a consistent format.✅
 * There are several weblinks that change domain or path which need fixing.✅
 * Reference 4 and 12 (the ones denoted as faulty by the link you provided) both link to the intended source. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 18:24, 26 August 2013 (UTC)


 * the ELs include two links that go nowhere (1st and 5th), and others that show a vessel which appears to be marked P54, not P57. A couple at least are probably copyvio links. I recommend you delete them all. If no free image is available, we are not permitted to try to get around that by using external links to non-free images.✅
 * I have done so. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 18:19, 26 August 2013 (UTC)


 * no close paraphrasing or copyvios detected by earwig (except a WP mirror site).
 * So nothing needs to be done in this regard? QatarStarsLeague (talk) 18:19, 26 August 2013 (UTC)


 * not sure why or is italicised in the infobox✅
 * My assumption is that it was input to add emphasis, but I will alter it. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 18:19, 26 August 2013 (UTC)


 * consistency in infobox between metres and m✅
 * Class and type and type in infobox are repetitive✅
 * They are pre-programmed into the infobox template

Placing on hold for seven days for the above comments to be addressed. Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 05:42, 25 August 2013 (UTC)
 * there is some confusion between past, current and future tense. ie "the ship will", "will be commanding", "she will be" etc✅
 * Above comments have been addressed and I consider this article now meets the GA criteria. Well done. Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 10:13, 27 August 2013 (UTC)