Talk:IRIS Kharg/GA1

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Reviewer: Willbb234 (talk · contribs) 13:35, 3 March 2021 (UTC)

Happy to review this article. kind regards, Willbb234Talk (please &#123;&#123;ping&#125;&#125; me in replies) 13:35, 3 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Per MOS:LEADLENGTH, the lead section is too short. I recommend including some details about the service history and locations of the ship and some details about the ship and its function.
 * You need to say what 'IRIS' means. you don't mention it in the article.
 * of Iran in terms of tonnage can be changed to ...by tonnage

Design

 * would have a beam of... why do you say 'would have' why not just 'has'.
 * The image captioned 'vertical view of Kharg' is actually an 'aerial view'.
 * Her original navigation radar was manufactured by Decca Radar, a Decca 1229 model working on I-band needs copyediting. Saying Decca twice like this sounds a bit clunky.
 * Wikilink to Helicopter deck.
 * Her crew totals 248 officers and men. I don't know too much about ships, but surely the number of crew is subject to change? Is this considered the maximum capacity?
 * You later mention a helipad, but you previously mentioned a helo deck. This might need reordering. Also, it would be more accurate to describe it as a helo deck rather than a helipad, right?

Operational capabilities

 * International Institute of Strategic Studies (IISS) needs a 'the' in front of it.
 * You don't explain what AORH means.
 * classifies Kharg as AORH, i.e. fleet replenishment oiler with replenishment at sea (RAS) capability and hangar. I don't understand what is being said here. The end of the sentence especially is grammatically problematic.
 * You need to introduce Cordesman.

hi there. I've realised you're inactive now. Please let me know when you are back so I can continue this review. Kind regards, Willbb234Talk (please &#123;&#123;ping&#125;&#125; me in replies) 15:13, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
 * , they haven't edited since November so it may be time to close the review. (t &#183; c)  buidhe  13:19, 30 March 2021 (UTC)
 * thanks for the reminder. I'll close now. Willbb234Talk (please &#123;&#123;ping&#125;&#125; me in replies) 17:13, 30 March 2021 (UTC)