Talk:ISSF 10 meter air pistol/GA1

GA Review
This review is transcluded from Talk:10 m Air Pistol/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
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 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
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 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
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 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * A lot of problems stick out in this article, I will give it time for the concerns to be addressed before pass/fail.  S R X -- Latino Heat  15:07, 16 June 2008 (UTC)|A lot of problems stick out in this article, I will give it time for the concerns to be addressed before pass/fail.  S R X -- Latino  Heat  15:07, 16 June 2008 (UTC)|}}
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * A lot of problems stick out in this article, I will give it time for the concerns to be addressed before pass/fail.  S R X -- Latino Heat  15:07, 16 June 2008 (UTC)|A lot of problems stick out in this article, I will give it time for the concerns to be addressed before pass/fail.  S R X -- Latino  Heat  15:07, 16 June 2008 (UTC)|}}
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * A lot of problems stick out in this article, I will give it time for the concerns to be addressed before pass/fail.  S R X -- Latino Heat  15:07, 16 June 2008 (UTC)|A lot of problems stick out in this article, I will give it time for the concerns to be addressed before pass/fail.  S R X -- Latino  Heat  15:07, 16 June 2008 (UTC)|}}

First comments
(This is my first GA attempt, I hope I am replying in the correct place.) Thanks for your constructive remarks, SRX! I think most if not all of your concerns are fairly easily addressed, and I will get around to it (I don't know how quickly as I'm a bit busy at the moment, but in due time). I'll keep you posted on the improvements I make. Just a question on the NPOV issues, it's the use of the words "somewhat" and "massive" you're objecting to? If I change these sentences to include actual numbers instead (with references), would that make them alright? -- Jao (talk) 17:12, 16 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Yes that will make them correct, as it remains factual and maintains a NPOV. You have a maximum of 2 weeks before the GAN closes.--  S R X -- Latino Heat  17:17, 16 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Shouldn't be a problem. So far I've tried to address the questions raised under point 1. -- Jao (talk) 18:04, 16 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Much better. But you should spell out the name of the ISSF, and put the acronym in parenthesis. Aside from that, you should elaborate who the Chief Officer is, the one who gives the start command.--  S R X -- Latino Heat  18:19, 16 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Fixed the acronym, and expanded the sentence introducing the CRO. Also added a little paragraph on equipment control, as I realized it was missing. -- Jao (talk) 19:04, 16 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Looks good so far. I want to point something out though, is it officially called the "10 m" or is it called the "10 meter" Air Pistol? or what does the m stand for?  S R X -- Latino Heat  19:15, 16 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Yes, it stands for meter/metre. It's never spelled out in official documents/websites, but it's a little inconsistently rendered: the official rules use "10 m Air Pistol", but lists of results (such as this) tend to use "10m Air Pistol", as do the Olympic/World championship histories at the ISSF website, including the medalist PDFs. I've avoided the latter, despite its greater frequency, because the space is mandated by WP:MOSNUM. (This same discussion applies to all ISSF shooting events prefixed with shooting distance, of course.)-- Jao (talk) 21:44, 18 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Ok, but I feel it can be bolded in the lead. Also, please inform me when you have addressed all the concerns above.  S R X -- Latino Heat  21:47, 18 June 2008 (UTC)
 * I think I have now. Filling out the citation templates while still including rule numbers is a little tricky, I don't know if another format would be better. As for a logo, there's no such general thing. Would another image, such as a photo from a competition, be good for the infobox? -- Jao (talk) 22:22, 19 June 2008 (UTC)
 * No, the format is ok like that, though, in the reference section you may want to use the reflist2 template, to list them in two columns. Also, an image of the competition would be good in the infobox, overall it looks very good with the improvements, just the two more things I mentioned earlier, and it should pass.  S R X -- Latino Heat  23:01, 19 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Finally got around to it: I simply moved up the photo of Kostevych competing into the infobox. I think I've done it all now, and I think that the prominent mention of the shooting distance that I now put in the first paragraph will tell the reader what the "10 m" is all about. I also added some metric-to-imperial conversions, which some might find useful, especially now that Lightmouse removed the unit linkage. -- Jao (talk) 22:35, 28 June 2008 (UTC)
 * It took a while, but it look's great, Pass.--  S R X -- Latino  Heat  02:07, 29 June 2008 (UTC)