Talk:I Always Wanna Die (Sometimes)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 12:32, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

I will take this on soon; hopefully you will have resolved the queries brought up in the other review first! --K. Peake 12:32, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Awesome!! Just concluded the other review, so I'm good to go.  Gia co bbe  talk 13:32, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good!
 * Everything in the lead needs to be written out in the body, so mention Campbell being the conductor there
 * Wikilink power ballad per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "with a heavy electronic sound." → "with an electronic sound." for appropriate lead language
 * Pipe adult contemporary rock to Adult contemporary music instead since the form of rock is part of that sub-genre
 * "Reviewers praised the song's production, lyrics and placement" → "Reviewers praised the production, lyrics and its placement"
 * "drawing numerous comparisons to" → "drawing numerous comparisons between the song and"
 * Remove the mention of no single release, as plenty of modern non-singles reach charts
 * Swap the New Zealand and Ireland positions because geographical order is not needed for the lead apart from for native countries

Background

 * Retitle to Background and development
 * Quotebox and first para look good!
 * "While it originally had" → "While the song originally had"
 * "from that era, he" → "from the two eras, Healy" to avoid confusion
 * Maybe you should mention in the first sentence about Campbell how he was the conductor?
 * "between the darkness of" → "between the darkness of both" with the pipe
 * "it inspired him to create" → "he was inspired to create" since there is nothing that specifically inspired him

Music and lyrics

 * Wikilink strums on the audio sample text
 * Wikilink power ballad per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Pipe Sony/ATV Music Publishing to Sony Music Publishing
 * I've mistakingly adding it as Sony/ATV, it is actually Hal Leonard Music Publishing.  Gia co bbe  talk 16:06, 23 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove wikilink on violin, as it's too obvious
 * Wikilink strums
 * I cannot see ref 20's content due to it being behind a paywall, but I know [21] backs up the first statement about strums so the ref(s) should be ordered in accordance with the prose (this can be done when it doesn't disrupt numerical order of refs, i.e on their first usage)
 * "meant to represent someone who's" → "meaning to represent someone whose"
 * "details Healy's struggle with" → "details Healy's struggles with" per the source
 * [26] should come before [25] per the order of the prose
 * Even though I can't view [20], a search for the word gentle seems to render no results
 * Source says: "... is as such a fitting note to end on, Healy’s gently devastating vocals rising on a wave of strings and through one humdinger of a key change before falling blissfully away to let a restless dream of...".  Gia co bbe  talk 16:10, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * That is totally fine in the manner that you paraphrase here; I can now check the OR criteria off! --K. Peake 16:19, 23 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "in the chorus'–which incorporate" → "in the chorus–which incorporates"
 * Pipe adult contemporary rock to Adult contemporary music
 * [23][25][19] should be put in numerical order
 * "drew similarities to" → "also drew similarities to"
 * "comparing the latter to" → "comparing the latter instrument to"
 * "said it is evocative" → "said the song is evocative"
 * "unlike the band's" → "unlike the 1975's"
 * "and Sigur Rós." → "and Sigur Rós' music."
 * "and Consequence of Sound writer" → "while Consequence of Sound writer"

Reception

 * Img looks good!
 * "received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
 * Wikilink Neil McCormick
 * "called it a" → "called the former a"
 * "saying it "might" → "saying they "might"
 * "was perhaps the most" → "is perhaps the most" per the song still existing and the article being specifically about the band's lyrics
 * "career, and said" → "career and said"
 * "and deemed it a" → "and deemed the song a"
 * Wikilink encore
 * "calling it soft," → "calling the song soft,"
 * "its use of Britpop was unexpected." → "the song's use of Britpop feels unexpected."
 * "that most of the album" → "that the majority of I Like It When You Sleep, for You Are So Beautiful yet So Unaware of It"
 * "was non-specific" → "is non-specific"
 * Remove pipe on Billboard

Credits and personnel

 * Shouldn't you pipe keyboards to Keyboard instrument for consistency?

Charts

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; that was a quick review! --K. Peake 15:30, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I think I've addressed all of your comments. If I've missed anything, please let me know. Thank you for another quick and thorough review! I appreciate it.  Gia co bbe  talk 16:48, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, looks good and your response was similarly quick to the review! --K. Peake 17:25, 23 March 2021 (UTC)