Talk:I Am a God/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Yashthepunisher (talk · contribs) 12:17, 22 July 2019 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this soon. Yashthepunisher (talk) 12:17, 22 July 2019 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * I think you can merge the 3rd and 4th sentence in the lead.
 * Clifton Bailey III and Capleton are same person, right?
 * Wikilink Manna Dey, Rahul Burman and Asha Bhosle.
 * Rahul Burman --> R.D. Burman
 * Add a bit about what West explained in those interviews.
 * "The song received strongly positive reviews from music critics." Remove 'strongly'. It sounds like a POV.
 * "with West's arrogance being praised by a number of them." His arrogance was praised?
 * Yeah, WP:NPV
 * ?? Yashthepunisher (talk) 14:21, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
 * Critics did actually praise West's arrogance in the reviews


 * Break the second para into two.


 * Background
 * Link Paris Fashion Week.
 * he'd --> he would
 * "Thomas Bangalter of French duo Daft Punk revealed in an April 2013 interview centered around their album Random Access Memories that during the recording sessions". Add a comma after Thomas Bangalter and Daft Punk. Also, the bit about Random Access Memories seems redundant to me. Since its not directly related to this song.
 * ❌ I don't see why the comma should be used and it gives information on how the duo became involved with West, plus the origin of their work as if I didn't mention it was an interview for that album I would mention the album anyway in this sentence


 * "the duo used part of their time to work with West on music for his next album." I'm sorry, whose next album?
 * "Kanye doesn't give a fuck." How does this quote helps the reader?
 * The song represents that quote and the others in the sentence.


 * Link Yeezus
 * ❌ it shouldn't have been linked in the body at all and I don't know why it'd been linked in the other section initially
 * Why shouldn't it be linked? How will a reader know about it? Yashthepunisher (talk) 14:21, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
 * It's part of the main topic, which is why Kanye West is not WikiLinked in the body; look throughout his articles and you will see this is how it is commonly done. See Other stuff exists for proof of this being valid.


 * Recording
 * Who is Noah Goldstein? Mention please.


 * Composition
 * "West screams within it." This sounds kinda idiomatic.
 * Again, WP:NPV
 * Again, what is this? You should explain what significance this quote adds to the article. Yashthepunisher (talk) 14:21, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
 * There are screams at multiple moments within the song, so this info is definitely notable about comp.


 * See comment no. 3 and 4 of the lead section.


 * Release and reception
 * Delink Yeezus.
 * Replace 'West' with a 'He' in the third sentence.
 * "Jon Dolan of Rolling Stone, in a review for Yeezus." The last bit seems redundant to me.
 * The Ryan Dombal quote is way too long. Either trim it down or put it as a block quote.


 * Live performances
 * ""I Am a God" was first performed live by West at the Metropolitan Museum of Art's Costume Institute Gala on May 6, 2013." This bit has been mentioned twice in the article.
 * Only once in the body, where a more detailed description is given of the performance. In cases like this, two mentions are acceptable.


 * In the media
 * can't --> cannot
 * The trailer of 2013 film House of Versace was set to the song, which included Gina Gershon saying lines such as "I was a girl in power since the day I was born" and "I am Versace!". So Gina Gershon shouts these lines in the trailer. But how is this relevant to this article?
 * ❌ it's set to the song as in those lines are reminiscent on purpose, listen to the song and you will see this.


 * Again in Assassin's Creed trailer. Remove the redundant bits.


 * Source
 * Fix this green link.

That's it from me. Yashthepunisher (talk) 11:18, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
 * ✅ for all except where noted. Pass? --Kyle Peake (talk) 13:58, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
 * Not yet. Yashthepunisher (talk) 14:21, 23 July 2019 (UTC)