Talk:I Heard It Through the Grapevine/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 09:08, 21 September 2012 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Ok, overall very nice. Here are a few nitpicks:
 * Not so tragic, but perhaps "and made famous in a Marvin Gaye version released as a single in October 1968 on Motown's Tamla label." Kürbis
 * Done.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  11:35, 5 October 2012 (UTC)


 * You use the word "version" a lot in the lead alone. Kürbis
 * Lordy there were a lot of versions, weren't there! And a good number of recordings as well. Adjusted. See what you think.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  11:46, 5 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Sometimes you use semicolons incorrectly. For example, "; with a slightly different take," is not an independent clause, nor is there a conjunction in between. I replaced some I found unnecessary with a comma.Kürbis
 * Thanks for doing that. I've checked through, and the existing semicolons seem fine.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  11:51, 5 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Isn't "though" placed at the end of a sentence? I replaced "; though," with "however Kürbis
 * Thanks. I've looked through and the existing "though"s seem ok.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  12:19, 5 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Why is "psychedelic soul" in quotation marks? Kürbis
 * I have no particular preference for doing it that way - I'm just following what I saw - as in the article on the album in question: Cloud Nine (The Temptations album), and in sources which discuss it:, , .  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  12:27, 5 October 2012 (UTC)


 * "with the comment that Whitfield had recorded the song with a number of artists with different arrangements, and that with Marvin Gaye he had a "golden idea" when he set the song "in a slower, more mysterious tempo".[22]" - too many "with" Kürbis
 * Amended.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  12:33, 5 October 2012 (UTC)


 * "about the death of their college friend, and then travels to his funeral; the song serving in an extradiegetic fashion to both unite the main characters' friendship and to locate it nostalgically for the viewer.[31][32][33]" - I changed this to "about the death of their college friend, and then travels to his funeral; the song serves in an extradiegetic fashion to both unite the main characters' friendship and to locate it nostalgically for the viewer.[31][32][33]" because "the song serving..." is not an independent clause. --Kürbis (✔) 10:25, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks.  SilkTork   ✔Tea time  12:35, 5 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Pass Meets the criteria. Regards.--Kürbis (✔) 17:07, 5 October 2012 (UTC)