Talk:I Look to You/GA1

GA Review
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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
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{{hidden/FC|headerstyle=background:#F0F8FF;|contentstyle=border:1px #ccf solid; padding:10px;|header=Resolved comments from Tb hotch {{sup| Ta lk }} C.  02:08, 11 June 2010 (UTC)|content=*1st review

Dead links
10 dead links (including false positive).
 * [[Image:Pictogram voting delete.svg|10px]] Still 3 dead links (2 from Mahasz, 1 from HMV). Tb hotch Ta lk C.  18:45, 10 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Below. Tb hotch Ta lk C.

Infobox

 * Is really neccessary the (see release history) and (see locations and studios)?
 * [[Image:Yes check.svg|10px]] removed. Tb hotch Ta lk C.  18:46, 10 June 2010 (UTC)

Lead
It was re-worded, but still the same problem. Maybe could be re-weorded to "A promotional single, "Nothing But Love", was only released...
 * was first released on August 28, 2009 through Sony Music in Europe, August 31, 2009 through Arista Records in the U.S. -> A synonym is needed.
 * ''including top-twenty U.S. R&B chart hit -> Top ten is a hit, top 20 not at all.
 * hit, title song "I Look to You" -> hit, the title song and "title song" should be wikilinked.
 * It has spawned 'two official singles ... which is named after the album's third international single. -> How many singles has the album, two or three?
 * [[Image:Yes check.svg|10px]]

Really, does not need to be italicized
 * inspired the Nothing But Love World Tour which... -> does not need to be italized.
 * the U.S. In the UK, -> the United States In the United Kingdom

Background

 * I Look to You had first been conceived in 2006 and production began fully in 2007 as stated by Houston herself at her Los Angeles album listening party in 2009 -> I don't know you, but this sounds awkward maybe I Look to You had first been conceived in 2006 and the production began in 2007, as said Houston in Los Angeles in 2009.
 * Antonio Banderas and Sylvester Stallone -> full stop missing.
 * Additionally she told press -> Additionally, she told to the press

Music
A typo (fekt)
 * critics said it is more -> critics said that it sounds like an
 * Right from the start, it displays Houston's voice over a club-friendly beat that blends a rough-riding thump with R&B -> Since the words "Right from the start" I knew that this was original research, this need to be reworded.
 * In the Summer 2009 edition of Rap-Up magazine R&B singer-come-producer, Akon -> singer-come-producer? / ...of Rap-Up magazine, R&B singer Akon spoke...
 * The entire section has original research.

Release and promotion

 * creative executive Clive Davis -> overlinked
 * (produced and demo by Johntá Austin) ->, produced by Johntá Austin,
 * listening party with Clive Davis -> listening party with Davis
 * were Alicia Keys, Kaseem "Swizz Beatz" Dean -> Keys, Swizz Beatz... they were aleady mentioned.
 * written by Keys and produced by Swizz Beatz -> Déjà vu?
 * Again the album was played almost in its entirely receiving a standing ovation -> original research?
 * Like "Music section" I see a lot of original research

Singles

 * and debuted at #12 in the UK -> and debuted at number 12 in the UK
 * The single peaked at #5 -> The single peaked at number five
 * The single peaked at #5 giving Houston her first Top 5 single since "My Love Is Your Love" in 1999. -> source?
 * Other notable songs -> which make them "notable"
 * World tour -> Wrong section. this should be in the "Promotion section"

Commercial success
Removed Removed
 * U.S. Billboard 200 -> U.S. Billboard 200 (without wikilink)
 * The album is Houston's fourth number 1 album overall -> The album is Houston's fourth number one album overall.
 * to Nielsen SoundScan -> wikilink
 * Oprah Winfrey Show -> need itallics
 * As a result the Houston -> ? maybe "As a result, Whitney Houston
 * behind The Beatles and Elvis Presley -> wikilink and source?
 * Her last album, 2002's "Just Whitney," -> Her last album, Just Whitney,
 * debuted at No. 85 -> number 85
 * debuted at #3 with -> number three
 * debuted at #3 in -> number three, again
 * the album reached #1 on the -> you know

Final comments
Several problems that I notice, need a hard work, so I put the article on hold on until June 28, 2010. (UTC) Tb hotch Ta lk C.  18:30, 7 June 2010 (UTC)

Response
Thank you for this very informative review. I've gone through (and i think i've addressed the issues). Lil-unique1 (talk) 18:30, 10 June 2010 (UTC)
 * I'll tick ([[Image:Yes check.svg|10px]]) what was done, I'll cross ([[Image:Pictogram voting delete.svg|10px]]) what still wrong. Tb hotch Ta lk C.  18:41, 10 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Many things were done, several more were ignored also new changes generated some typos throughout. I extended the revision time until June 27. Tb hotch Ta lk C.  19:29, 10 June 2010 (UTC)


 * Sorry i wasnt aware of the latter issues, just been through and copyeditted the article. Regards, Lil-unique1 (talk) 20:45, 10 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, all(most) comments were resolved, I'll check it again in case I forgot something. Tb hotch Ta lk C.  22:16, 10 June 2010 (UTC)

Further comments

 * Lead
 * WP:ALT -> Personally, "Whitney Houston" written in the alternative caption text, is too specific, maybe "an afro-american woman" or "a woman with wavy hair" or something like that, of course I won't fail the article for this comment. Tb hotch Ta lk C.  02:09, 11 June 2010 (UTC)
 * then August 31, 2009 -> typo
 * ...based on an aggregate score of 70/100 from... I noticed that this is not on the "Critical Reception" section.
 * beating her previous career best first-week sale of 205,000 units with Just Whitney (2002). -> beating her previous career best first-week sale of 205,000 units with Just Whitney (2002) in the chart.


 * Background
 * In February 2009, Houston made her official public comeback at Davis's "Pre-Grammy Gala", her first major live appearance since 2004 -> Source does not says that
 * Ref 2 has a typo: (E!Online)
 * rousing -> WP:Peacock?
 * Ref 1 and 6 need consistency.


 * Music
 * R. Kelly contributed two songs -> Did you mean R. Kelly contributed writing two songs
 * In the song Houston -> In the song, Houston
 * Reference 10 has a typo (Latest activity 2 days ago).
 * Also released in UK and US -> Consistency needed
 * Houston hosted a listening party with Clive Davis in New York -> Davis was already mentioned.
 * and Vivica A. Fox[12] as well as many representatives from the American press -> Source?
 * September 14 and 15 and featured -> September 14 and 15, and featured
 * On October 18, Houston performed "Million Dollar Bill" live on -> Since "Million Dollar Bill" was used in the last line, perhaps -> On October 18, Houston performed the same song live on
 * Ireland, Sweden, Denmark, Finland, Germany,[23] Switzerland,[24] Austria,[25] Belgium,[26] Italy[24] and Australia.[27] -> Germany,[23] Italy, Switzerland,[24] Austria,[25] Belgium,[26] and Australia.[27] and do not need Wikilinks and remove unsorced countries.


 * Singles
 * "Million Dollar Bill" which was written and produced by Alicia Keys and Swizz Beatz was -> "Million Dollar Bill", which was written and produced by Alicia Keys and Swizz Beatz, was
 * giving Houston her 13th number-one dance single -> Source
 * was originally lined up to be the lead single, but was succeeded by the album's title song. -> I'm confused, didn't was "Million Dollar Bill" which was released as the first official lead single, morover, where is the source?
 * Furthermore, following its performance on The Oprah Winfrey Show, the song charted at number 66 on the U.S. Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs chart. -> source?
 * on the UK X Factor which resulted in the song charting at number 38 and 44 on Irish Singles Chart and UK Singles Chart respectively.[32] It also charted on the Japan Hot 100 at number 16.[33] -> why it is italicized?
 * "Nothin' But Love" was set to be released as the album's third single to coincide with the tour but was only released to UK radio stations. -->


 * Commercial Success
 * week sales of 51,632 -> full stop missed


 * Chart procession and succession
 * the template must dissapear.


 * References
 * 36, 46 (dead link), 97, 98, 99, 103, 108 need fixes.
 * one dab link

I've re-reviewed the article, those are new problems. Tb hotch Ta lk C. 02:09, 11 June 2010 (UTC)


 * I have done half of these. Aim to do the rest tomorrow and day after. Regards, Lil-unique1 (talk) 15:49, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

I am failing the article, I'd gave it a final date (28 June), and it is today. If you feel this is in error, you may request a Good article reassessment or a re-nomination. Tb hotch Ta lk C. 19:06, 28 June 2010 (UTC)


 * Why is there a time limit on this process? If Lil-unique1 finishes this up 4 hours from now, why can't it be a GA? Does the "G" spoil if it's not put back in the refrigerator right away?
 * And anyway, it's still the 28th as I write this, an hour after you rang the terminal buzzer, so the deadline you picked (from where?) hasn't even passed yet. &mdash; JohnFromPinckney (talk) 21:07, 28 June 2010 (UTC)


 * As I said before If you feel this is in error, you may request a Good article reassessment or a re-nomination. I'd been waiting 3 weeks and Lil is busy with another article. Tb hotch Ta lk C.  22:08, 28 June 2010 (UTC)


 * Sheesh! Sorry if i cant be on wikipedia as much as I'd like to. I didn't realise GA's were specifically time-restrained. It takes time to search for appropriate sources and to fix deadlinks. But nevermind... i'll work on it in my leisure and nominate when I feel that I've done all I can that way I don't have to feel pressured to work towards a deadline. Lil-unique1 (talk) 21:45, 28 June 2010 (UTC)