Talk:I Love Bees/GA1

GA Review
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Excellent article, love the photo of players waiting by the phone. There would be virtually nothing stopping me from passing this straight away except:


 * The plot section is completely unsourced, can't pass it until this is fixed. The external link to ilovebees is surplus, please replace with plain text. The section has a lot of very short paragraphs, could you condense them please?
 * There's a general reference which is just a bare external link, could you fill it out as a reference?

That's it, nicely done. Someoneanother 00:52, 14 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I've removed the bare link (it was left over from the expansion.) About the paragraphs: looking through the non-plot sections, it seems all are 3+ sentences, and all are under distinct ideas, so I think it's best to leave them be. As for the plot, I'll get to sourcing and condensing it a bit; I'll leave you a note when I'm done. Thanks for the review, Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ( talk  ) 22:05, 15 August 2008 (UTC)