Talk:I Rise (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 21:08, 13 June 2020 (UTC)

Will get round to this tomorrow --Kyle Peake (talk) 21:08, 13 June 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Replace hlist with bullet points and no flatlist either
 * Target 12" to Twelve-inch single
 * Recorded date is unsourced
 * Link to the music video in the infobox
 * I don't know how to link it as it's not available on YouTube, only on Time website


 * "is a song recorded by American singer-songwriter" → "is a song by American singer-songwriter"
 * "for her fourteenth studio album" → "from her fourteenth studio album,"
 * "Written by the singer herself" → "The song was written by the singer herself"
 * "by Madonna and Evigan," → "by Madonna and Evigan." since the sentence is too long currently
 * "it was released on May 3, 2019," → "It was released on May 3, 2019,"
 * Target promotional single to Promotional recording
 * Mention that the release was through Interscope and for the following one, identify as "the aforementioned label"
 * "as the album's third single" → "as the third single" since we know it's from the album and add the target
 * ""I Rise" is a mid tempo pop song track" → "The song is a mid tempo pop track" with the appropriate wikilink
 * "and contains a sample" → "while it contains a sample" with the target
 * "Madonna's 48th number-one single" → "Madonna's 48th chart-topping single"
 * "the top ten on the digital charts" → "the top 10 of the digital charts"
 * "An accompanying music video for the song was" → "An accompanying music video was" with the wikilink
 * "being directed by Peter Matkiwsky" → "which was directed by Peter Matkiwsky"
 * "It features footage of" → "The video features footage of"
 * Target LGBTQ supporters to LGBT social movements
 * ""I Rise" was performed during Madonna's set on" → "The song was performed during Madonna's set at"

Background and composition

 * Remove wikilink on Lisbon, Portugal and solely wikilink Lisbon to itself
 * "seeking a top football academy" → "when seeking a top football academy"
 * Mention David's surname
 * "artists, painters and musicians, who" → "artists; painters and musicians, who"
 * "In these sessions, they" → "In the sessions, they"
 * "bring food, sit around the table and" → "bring food and sit around the table, and"
 * "is the soul of the universe"." → "is the soul of the universe."" since punctuation should be inside quotes for full sentence(s)
 * "had previously worked on her albums" → "had previously contributed to her albums"
 * "and to love themselves"." → "and to love themselves.""
 * "while production was in charge of the singer" → "while production was handled by the singer"
 * Wikilink tempo to itself
 * "which lyrically deals about" → "that lyrically deals about"
 * "highs and lows of her career"," → "highs and lows" of Madonna's career,"
 * Target sample to Sampling (music)
 * "from a Stoneman Douglas High School shooting survivor" → "from Stoneman Douglas High School shooting survivor" for grammar fixing
 * "speech in which she" → "speech, in which she"
 * "Later on the track, the word" → "Later within the track, the words"
 * "later echoes at the end" → "are echoed at the end"
 * "what's been done to you"." → "what's been done to you.""
 * "on May 3, 2019 as the" → "on May 3, 2019, as the"
 * Target promotional single to Promotional recording
 * Mention the label for both releases, respectively
 * Target single to Single (music)
 * The release info should not be at the end of this section directly after composition info, especially with the title; move it to the start of the following section and retitle to Release and reception

Critical reception

 * "received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
 * "but selected it as one of the" → "but selected the track as one of the"
 * Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
 * Target LGBTQ+ community to LGBT community
 * "For Nick Smith from MusicOMH" → "Writing for musicOMH, Nick Smith"
 * "and complimented González's sample" → "and complimented the González sample"
 * "classified it as a" → "classified the track as a"
 * "whose "heartfelt lyrics" sounded" → "with "heartfelt lyrics" that sounded"
 * "and also noted its" → "and also noted the"
 * "had "elegant, sinewy melodies" → "has "elegant, sinewy melodies"
 * "from MTV, called it" → "from MTV called it"
 * "He further wrote that it was" → "He further wrote that the song was"
 * "once more why she's pop's" → "once more" as to why Madoona is "pop's"
 * "and praised its lyrical message" → "and praised the lyrical message"
 * "the Jean-Paul Sartre quote on the song" → "the song's Sartre quote"
 * The Slant Magazine review can be in an Accolades sub-section of this section
 * In the above case, "with reviewer Sal Cinquemani writing," → "For the magazine, Sal Cinquemani wrote,"
 * "rhetoric nearly robotic"." → "rhetoric nearly robotic.""
 * "who complimented its production" → "who complimented the production"
 * "wasn't impressed with its chorus and creativity" → "wasn't impressed with the song's chorus and level of creativity"
 * "category at the" → "award at the"
 * This award will go under Accolades too
 * "became the first woman to win a Grammy in this category" → "became the first woman to win the award" since we know which award it is

Chart performance

 * Retitle to Commercial performance
 * "The song later reached number one" → "The song ultimately reached the summit of the chart"
 * "number-one single on the aforementioned chart in its August 31, 2019 issue" → "chart-topping single on it for the issue date of August 31, 2019"
 * "At the year-end Hot Dance Club Songs recap" → "On the year-end US Dance Club Songs chart"
 * "was at number 31 position" → "ranked at number 31"
 * "It also debuted on" → "The song debuted at"
 * "number 37 on the" → "number 37 on the US"
 * "on the issue dated July 13, 2019" → "for the issue dated July 13, 2019"
 * "It became her 15th entry on the chart and her first" → "This gave Madonna her 15th entry on the chart and her 1st" per MOS:NUM
 * "on the week dated May 20, 2019" → "on the week of May 20, 2019"
 * "The song also peaked at" → "The song further peaked at"
 * "on its national chart" → "on the national chart"
 * "while in Scotland the song peaked at number 45 on the issue dated May 10, 2019" → "while the song peaked at number 45 on the Scottish Singles Chart for the week ending May 10, 2019"
 * ""I Rise" also reached number 40" → ""I Rise" reached number 40"

Music video and live performances

 * Img needs alt text
 * Main text needs a full-stop at the end
 * "to create a video inspired by "I Rise"," → "to create a music video for "I Rise"," since that is what you are touting it as; include the wikilink
 * "footage of Stoneman Douglas High School shooting" → "footage of the Stoneman Douglas High School shooting"
 * Target LGBTQ supporters to LGBT social movements
 * "and other social justice movements" → "among other social justice movements"
 * "Mike Wass from Idolator commented that the video" → "Wass commented that the clip"
 * "The first performance of" → "The first live performance of"
 * Wikilink imagery to itself
 * "wore an eye-patch with an X, which was designed..." not backed up properly by the source?
 * "background dancers were decked as police officers wielding" → "background dancers were dressed as police officers that wielded"
 * "After the performance fireworks" → "After the performance, fireworks"
 * "as the encore of the singer's" → "as the encore during Madonna's" with the wikilink
 * "began with the screen showing González's speech" → "began with González's speech being presented on the screen"
 * [47][48] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
 * "and Madonna and her dancers exited" → "followed by Madonna and her dancers exiting"
 * WP:RSP writes against Forbes so remove or replace this
 * "her stop at London's London Palladium on" → "her stop at the London Palladium in the city of the same name on"
 * "while Madonna was performing the song" → "when Madonna performed the song"
 * "as she went past the deadline" → "as she went past her deadline"
 * Wikilink a capella to itself
 * "It angered the singer" → "This angered the singer"
 * Wikilink Instagram to itself
 * "to accuse the venue of trying" → "for accusing the venue of trying"

Track listing

 * Retitle to Track listings
 * Remove (Album Version) from the title of the first release
 * (Remixes Pt. 2) → (Remixes) since there is nobody but Tracy Young for the first remixes release

Personnel

 * Use so there is the right space between personnel

Weekly charts

 * Target HRT to Hrvatska radiotelevizija

Year-end charts

 * Good

Release history

 * Format → Format(s)
 * Refs should have their own col and be centered
 * Change Various to having a rowspan of 3 since it is three consecutive rows
 * Italy should cite Universal as the label instead

Final comments and verdict
for a week so you have enough time to fix the issues. --Kyle Peake (talk) 14:44, 14 June 2020 (UTC)
 * all ✅ except for one, see above Alex reach me! 22:31, 14 June 2020 (UTC)
 * I have two comments you above. --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:19, 15 June 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅, take a look. Alex reach me! 23:09, 16 June 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ time, Apple Music issue has been fixed by now! --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:42, 18 June 2020 (UTC)