Talk:Ian Begg (architect)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Bruxton (talk · contribs) 17:49, 2 March 2024 (UTC)


 * I will review this one. I remember his name from an article about a castle. Bruxton (talk) 17:49, 2 March 2024 (UTC)
 * thank you for your review! I think I've addressed all your points below so far. -Kj cheetham (talk) 20:20, 3 March 2024 (UTC)

Grammar

 * Lead - needs to be developed, and should be a summary of the article; as of now it is insufficient.
 * Done. Is it better now?
 * Body "Ravens' Craig tower house castle in Plockton, Lochalsh was designed by Begg and built from scratch" Please find another way to say that built the house- from scratch seems colloquial.
 * Is "from the ground up" better?
 * Body "Afterwards, when he was 22," suggest we remove the word "Afterwards"
 * Done.
 * Body "was an adviser for National Trust for Scotland, and vice president" needs a determiner like "the" before National and "was" before vice.
 * Done.
 * Body "complete with winery" suggest you add an "a" before winery
 * Done.
 * Body "to aid bringing logs to main hall" suggest a determiner (the) before main hall
 * Done.
 * Lead should remove citations from the lead per MOS:LEADCITE - FYI it is already cited in the body
 * Done.
 * "The main hall is 5 m by 7.27 m, with the size dictated by a triangular" use conversion templates like 5 m and 7.27 m
 * Done.
 * Body regarding the Ravens' Craig section. We need to say when the Tower House was completed or built.
 * Done.
 * We should also see if we combine these single sentences into the paragraph.
 * Done by you I think?
 * £750,000 an inflation calculator might be helpful here note-the year is incorrect in the conversion I randomly put 2006
 * The figure is from 2022, and the inflation template only works up until 2021 it seems. I have though fixed it to say £725,000 rather than £750,000, to align with the source.
 * since the architect's website is dead, we should probably remove it from the infobox
 * Done.
 * Awards section "He retired in December 2009" was already stated above in career section.
 * Removed.

Reviewer edits

 * ✔️ Hope you do not mind - I edited the Bio section and created two sections, and also copyedited parts.
 * ✔️ also edited the Castles and other buildings section
 * ✔️ combined a few lonely sentences in sections
 * All looks good to me, thank you!

Images

 * they appear to be correctly licensed and relevant.
 * Image Please consider adding a non-free image of the person to the infobox.
 * Done. It's my first time ever adding a non-free image, so I hope I've done it correctly!
 * I will fix it up a bit! He is a handsome fella and the image is great! Bruxton (talk) 20:51, 3 March 2024 (UTC)