Talk:Iced Out Audemars/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 10:52, 19 March 2021 (UTC)

I will review this soon, per your request... a bit ironic since I originally nominated it for deletion. --K. Peake 10:52, 19 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good!
 * The remix release sentence should be swapped with the drill and lyrics sentence for the correct order; you can have the final para dedicated to the remix
 * "A remix that" → "A remix of the song that"
 * "Musically a drill track, the lyrics" → "A drill track, the lyrics"
 * "finer things in life and expressing their love for Dior and" → "finer things and expressing their love for Dior, among"
 * Remove the chorus and outro parts, as this is too specific for the lead

Background and release

 * "known their real names" → "known under their respective real names of"
 * "Khadafi Julio. It was written alongside" → "Khadafi Julio, alongside"
 * Remove repetition of Khadafi Julio under writing credits
 * Why is the additional producer not mentioned here and in the lead? Bare in mind, it's not like the infobox where you can't add them.
 * "debut deluxe studio album," → "debut studio album"
 * Remove release year in brackets, as it is specified later on in the sentence
 * Introduce Lil Wayne as being a rapper

Music and lyrics

 * "during the chorus" → "during both the chorus" with the pipe
 * "He pays homage to" → "Lil Wayne pays homage to" but this should start a new para in the section, as it and the following sentences total up to four
 * "we gone tomorrow"." → "we gone tomorrow."" per MOS:QUOTE on full quotes
 * Pipe Wu-Tang to Wu-Tang Clan
 * Pipe pitched to Pitch (music)

Critical reception

 * "[Pop Smoke]] would" → "[Pop Smoke] would"
 * "Complex's Jessica McKinney opined that" → "McKinney opined that"
 * "while The Fader's Jordan Darville wrote that Lil Wayne added" → "while Darville wrote the rapper contributes" to avoid overusing his stage name
 * "Jon Powell for Revolt commented that Lil Wayne" → "Jon Powell, for Revolt, commented that he"
 * "and said "New York's" → "and said that "New York's"

Credits and personnel

 * Pipe Bashar Jackson to Pop Smoke
 * Swap featured artist and songwriter
 * Swap songwriting and programming

Final comments and verdict
Kyle Peake thanks a lot for the review. Only a few more articles to go! The Ultimate Boss (talk) 20:44, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
 * until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 14:16, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ now and there were some mistakes but they were not the changes themselves being missed so I copyedited the fixes in, plus good luck with the GT! --K. Peake 21:57, 19 March 2021 (UTC)