Talk:Iceland in the Eurovision Song Contest 2021/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:56, 5 June 2022 (UTC)

After my review of the previous year's contest participation for Iceland, the 2021 article is only appropriate! --K. Peake 07:56, 5 June 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * The artist selection date is not sourced anywhere in the body
 * Wikilink Daði og Gagnamagnið per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Daði Freyr is not sourced as being the songwriter anywhere in the body
 * "being selected internally, and as" → "being selected internally and as"
 * "A music video for the song and" → "A music video for "10 Years" and" with the wikilink
 * "the members of Gagnamagnið" → "the members of Daði og Gagnamagnið"
 * The body does not mention the rehearsal as being in the arena
 * "placed 4th with 278 points." → "placed 4th with 378 points." per the body

Background

 * "thirty-six times since its" → "32 times following its" per the source and MOS:NUM
 * "to enable live transmission of the contest." → "to enable live transmission of it."
 * "of the 2020 event," → "of the 2021 event," per that year's contest being the one this article is about
 * "In Iceland marked" → "In, Iceland marked"
 * "marking Iceland's worst result at" → "standing as the region's worst result at" to be less repetitive
 * "made its returned to" → "made its return to"
 * Where is it sourced that the competition started in 2006?
 * Wikilink Daði og Gagnamagnið per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "(COVID-19), and a subsequent announcement by the" → "(COVID-19); shortly afterwards the"
 * "and subsequently announced in" → "subsequently announcing in"

Internal selection

 * Remove wikilink on Daði og Gagnamagnið
 * "Ríkisútvarpið (RÚV) announced that their entry for the contest would also be chosen internally," → "RÚV announced that they were chosen internally as their entry for the contest,"
 * Remove wikilink on Söngvakeppnin
 * Wikilink Daði Freyr
 * Pipe demos to Demo (music)
 * "This followed changes to" → "This followed changes to the"
 * "and among those who submitted was" → "including one from"
 * "and would be officially released on" → "slated for release on"
 * "of Daði, Gagnamagnið and" → "of the singer, Daði og Gagnamagnið and" because the group are not a person and this avoids repeating Daði

Promotion

 * "featured Icelandic actor Ólafur Darri Ólafsson and portrayed Daði and the members of Gagnamagnið" → "features Icelandic actor Ólafur Darri Ólafsson and portrays Daði og Gagnamagnið"
 * "Daði also confirmed that" → "Daði Freyr also confirmed that" per MOS:SURNAME
 * "Gagnamagnið's last song together, as the group was" → "the group's last song together, as they were"
 * The 16-bit era inspiration is not sourced
 * "the members of Gagnamagnið" → "the members of the group"

At Eurovision

 * "the top ten countries" → "the top 10 countries" per MOS:NUM
 * "The European Broadcasting Union (EBU) split up" → "The EBU split up"
 * "on 20 May 2021, and scheduled to perform in" → "on 20 May, scheduled to perform in"
 * The songs having been released once the order was decided is not sourced
 * "to perform in position 8," → "to perform eighth,"
 * Pipe streamed online to Livestreaming
 * What is the purpose of [55] at the end of the last sentence?

Performances

 * "on 10 and 13 May." → "on 10 and 13 May 2021."
 * "featured the group in" → "featured Daði og Gagnamagnið in"
 * "emblazoned with pixellated versions" → "emblazoned with pixellated versions of" with the pipe
 * "On 19 May," → "On 19 May 2021,"
 * "that one of the members of Gagnamagnið, Jóhann Sigurður Jóhannsson," → "that Daði og Gagnamagnið member Jóhann Sigurður Jóhannsson"
 * "as the group wished to" → "as they wished to"
 * "13 May being utilised during the semi-final, with the group watching" → "13 May 2021 being utilised during the semi-final as Daði og Gagnamagnið watched"
 * "The second semi-final was held on 20 May" → "The contest's second semi-final was held on 20 May 2021"
 * "held on 22 May, and at" → "held on 22 May 2021; at"

Voting

 * The 2008 contest representation is not sourced anywhere
 * "of the professional jury, and" → "of the professional jury and"
 * "Regína Ósk, and" → "Regína Ósk and"
 * "Greece placed 2nd with" → "Iceland placed 2nd with"
 * Where is the fourth position sourced?
 * Add the release year of the film

Points awarded to Iceland

 * Good

Points awarded by Iceland

 * Good

Detailed voting results

 * For the detailed voting results tables, the numbers don't match the Jurors listed by the sources

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; nice work on this one though! --K. Peake 08:50, 6 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks again for picking this one up! I've covered almost all the points above, through changes and additional refs, however I do have a few clarifications.
 * On the contest arena in body point, it is covered here in the first paragraph of "Performances" ("The Icelandic delegation took park in technical rehearsals at Rotterdam Ahoy").
 * The jury order in the voting tables was correct per the version of the website when the article was created (see archived pages here and here) but has clearly been altered since; as the jury scores have been randomised and do not correspond with the order on the article it doesn't particularly matter either way, but for consistency I have gone ahead and changed these to the current order.
 * Your request as well on the refs with middle names is incorrect, as these are not middle names but parts of the surname (in the case of "ten Veen") or are surnames followed by a patronymic per Icelandic naming tradition.
 * Let me know if there's anything else or if you need further clarification on any of these points. Sims2aholic8 (talk) 10:23, 6 June 2022 (UTC)
 * You missed mentioning the actual date of the artist selection in the body, changing the prose to "32 times following its" and fixing the prose about RÚV's announcement, as it needs to be specified that the artist was already chosen by them at the time. --K. Peake 20:52, 6 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for pointing those additional bits out. I had already changed the prose in the "Background" section to "32 times...", and I've now added the specific date of the artist announcement to that section as well. On the first sentence in the "Internal selection" section, as I had included the artist announcement in the "Background" section, this sentence is meant to convey that the decision to select the song internally was made at the same time as the decision to select the group, so that no national selection was to be held. I can do some re-writing if necessary to bring the artist announcement news into this section as well if you think this is needed. Sims2aholic8 (talk) 08:56, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
 * This is all fine, apart from needing to change "since" to "following" after 32 times to avoid overusing the word. --K. Peake 09:05, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for pointing that out, now done. Sims2aholic8 (talk) 09:31, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ time, now that all of the issues have been dealt with! --K. Peake 11:10, 7 June 2022 (UTC)