Talk:If I Don't Have You/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:17, 12 December 2017 (UTC)

Soon, Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:17, 12 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 06:32, 12 December 2017 (UTC)

Lead

 * and Streamline Records. It replaced → and Streamline Records, replacing (it sounds better, is not very long and avoids the repetition of "it")
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * song was written by Tamar Braxton → unlink "Tamar Braxton" and only use her last name
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * and Tiyon "TC" Mack. → and Tiyon "TC" Mack, while production was solely handled by Da Internz
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * for the 58th Annual Grammy Awards → at the...
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * on the R&B/Hip-Hop Airplay Billboard chart. → remove "Billboard" here
 * The Billboard part is necessary to clarify that it is a Billboard chart. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * In the accompanying music video, Braxton → In an accompanying music video released on June 9, 2015, Braxton
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * The visuals feature American → The visual features American
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * The video received positive → replace "the video" with "the clip" to avoid repetition
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Infobox

 * Everything seems on point here ;)
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:27, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Background and release

 * Nothing I can really complain about! Well-written!
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:28, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Composition and lyrics

 * The instrumental includes a piano.[8] The song focuses → Its instrumentation includes a piano,[8] while the song focuses (to avoid short, clipped sentences)
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * Music sample > Include the fact that it's an R&B song in its description
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Reception

 * for the 58th Annual → at the...
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:46, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * that would appeal listeners → that would appeal to listeners
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:46, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * wrote that the song → replace "the song" with "the track" to avoid repetition
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:46, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * was appropriate for those "the mood for a good cry (or perhaps an all-out profound wail)" → I think a word's missing here or something because it doesn't make any sense
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:46, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * R&B/Hip-Hop Airplay Billboard chart on → Remove "Billboard" here
 * See above comment about this. Aoba47 (talk) 16:46, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Music video

 * The accompanying music video → An accompanying music video
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:50, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * Prior to its release → replace "release" with "premiere" to avoid repetition
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:50, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * A majority of the video → replace "video" with "clip" or "visual" to a. r.
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:50, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * It ends with Braxton → replace "Braxton" with "the singer" to a. r.
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:50, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * Please connect the third with the fourth paragraph; they deal with similar content and having so many (thin) paras for a section is not appropriate
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:50, 17 December 2017 (UTC)


 * received a positive response → you don't need the "a" here, but can leave it as it is if you want to
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 16:50, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Track listing

 * Flawless ;)
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

 * Flawless ;)
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Charts

 * Flawless ;)
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Release history

 * Flawless ;)
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Copy-violation

 * 27.5% is acceptable!
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Media

 * Sample seems stable
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 16:31, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Outcome

 * for 7 days! Good job! I also like the song, and I took the time to watch its video entirely on YouTube . Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:01, 17 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your review. I believe that I have addressed everything. I hope you enjoyed the video. Aoba47 (talk) 16:52, 17 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Gladly passing! Congrats; Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:26, 17 December 2017 (UTC)