Talk:If It's Over/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 06:20, 8 April 2011 (UTC)

A nice short article for me to review quickly. :P

Dablinks/ELs are clean Adabow (talk · contribs) 06:20, 8 April 2011 (UTC)

Lead

 * Infobox: no mention of cassette single later in article. Indicate the two recordings in brackets. Also 'soul' should have a lower case 's'
 * I don't quite understand the cassette thing. Elaborate? :)-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   21:15, 11 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Well you include "cassette single" in the infobox, but there is no mention of a cassette release later in the article. Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:49, 12 April 2011 (UTC)
 * "with former and Walter Afanasieff" - missing words
 * Give either the release date of Emotions or its year in brackets - not both
 * "Lyrically, the tells" - missing word
 * "only being featured as an airplay only single in certain territories" - overuse of "only" and is not mentioned/sourced later in article
 * "Its highest peak was in the Netherlands, where it peaked at number eighty" - highest peak → only chart appearance
 * The "Additionally" is not needed
 * 34th annual Grammy Awards → 34th Grammy Awards
 * Don't you think its makes more sense to link the year of the event and the event as a whole?-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   21:15, 11 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Well the specific ceremony will contain link/s to the main article, but it's no biggie so leave if you like. Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:49, 12 April 2011 (UTC)
 * and on Saturday Night Live

Background and recording

 * Link ballad
 * "said the following regarding Carey" - either change the comma to a colon or omit "the following"

Composition

 * "slow tempo" → down-tempo
 * Link ballad above ^^^ so unlink here
 * The chord progression will not be A♭-D♭-9, as 9 is not a chord. Check the book and fix
 * Removed some stuff. Some was accidentally copied and pasted from another article. I was unable to find info on its key, chord progression etc.-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   21:15, 11 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Also see if the sheet music gives any info about the key signature or tempo
 * The ref given for this information is not cited properly. It links to a sheet music book, not a download
 * Does the sheet music actually verify the instrumentation and vocal techniques?
 * Sorry, the book does.-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   21:15, 11 April 2011 (UTC)
 * "According to Nickson" - who?

Critical and commercial reception

 * Change title to 'Release and reception' and include some info about release info such as dates/formats
 * "Aside from its critical success" - remove
 * "received a very limited airplay-only release" - source?
 * You have the wrong chart here. It is actually the Single Top 100

Live performances

 * Same thing with the Grammy linking here
 * MTV Unplugged is a TV show so should be italicised
 * I wonder whether in this article the live performances section should be placed between composition and reception? That would save on repetition.
 * How so? Not sure I understand.-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   21:15, 11 April 2011 (UTC)
 * You could swap the 'Live performances' and 'Release and reception' around (actually retitle to 'Reception'). Then the order is Background and recording>Composition>Live performances (and Release)>Reception. Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:49, 12 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Adding to the above comment: remove ""If It's Over" received a very limited airplay-only release" in the R&R section and then you can retitle it "Reception". Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:53, 12 April 2011 (UTC)

Charts

 * Not sure if this table is needed, with only one chart. Leave it if you want, but I would scrap it
 * As you probably rememeber from my review on the Anika Moa review, I prefer to keep the charts :P-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   21:15, 11 April 2011 (UTC)

That's all for now; on hold for seven days. Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:07, 8 April 2011 (UTC)
 * I've experimented with the live performances section, which makes for less confusion, IMHO. Everything else is fine, so I'm passing. Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:02, 12 April 2011 (UTC)