Talk:Ignorance (song)/GA2

GA Reassessment
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Re-assessor: Till I Go Home

Lead
 * "Ignorance" is a song by the American rock band Paramore -> remove 'the'.
 * "Ignorance" was released by Fueled by Ramen in July 2009, as the lead single from the bands 2009 studio album entitled, Brand New Eyes. ->
 * Change 'Ignorance' to 'it' because of repetition.
 * Date? 'July 2009' isn't enough.
 * remove '2009' and put it after Brand New Eyes, so Brand New Eyes (2009).
 * 'bands' -> band's.
 * remove 'entitled''


 * The single was written by Paramore band members Hayley Williams and Josh Farro; Paramore is also credited as being co-producers to the song. -> The song was written by the band's members Hayley Williams and Josh Farro, although Paramore is credited as being co-writers of the song.
 * ...recorded in Spring 2009 -> when exactly?
 * Musically, "Ignorance" is credited as being an alternative rock song. You can't be "credited" as being a particular genre.
 * Williams' -> Williams's
 * The song was commercially successful, charting within the top thirty in multiple territories, although the song performed better internationally. That doesn't even make sense!

Background
 * You have to state who the writer's were in this section.

Composition
 * Needs a composition section.

Critical reception
 * Leonie Cooper, a writer for NME -> Leonie Cooper of NME
 * Marc Hirsh, a writer from The Boston Globe -> Marc Hirsh of The Boston Globe
 * Emily Steves, a writer for Buffalo News -> Emily Steves of Buffalo News
 * Jon Canamanica, a writer for The New York Times -> Jon Canamanica of The New York Times
 * Ryan Wood, a writer for The Nebraska City News Press -> Ryan Wood of The Nebraska City News Press
 * Scott Heisel, a writer for Alternative Press -> Scott Heisel of Alternative Press

Chart performance

Specific
 * "Ignorance" had a good chart performance. Remove this!
 * generally charting within the top thirty -> you can't "generally" chart within the top thirty. Also, top thirty of where?
 * In the United States, the song performed worse than previous singles, peaking at number sixty seven on the Billboard Hot 100. -> what was its debut? When did it debut? How long was it on the charts etc. Also, 'worse' sounds POV, change it.
 * The song's current peak position on the Hot Digital Songs Chart is number fifty eight; the song charted on the chart solely due to digital download sales -> this is outdated, remove "current". Also, fix repetition, "charted on the chart".
 * "Ignorance" had a better chart performance internationally. -> remove this
 * The single was successful in the United Kingdom, entering the chart within the top twenty at number fourteen, where it peaked. -> The song peaked at number fourteen in the United Kingdom.
 * The song charted within the top twenty, peaking at number seventeen; the song remained on the chart for eight weeks. Which country are you talking about here?
 * The single peaked at number thirty five in Australia; the song remained the on the countries chart for two weeks. -> Use 'song' instead of 'single', countries is grammatically incorrect, it's 'country's'
 * The song had a similar chart performance in New Zealand, peaking at number thirty two and remained on the chart for five weeks. -> Too much repetition of 'the song', and the sentence goes from past tense to present tense.
 * The track was less successful in Dutch, having entered the chart on October 18, 2009, at number eighty two, where it peaked, the following week the song fell out of the countries top 100. Dutch isn't a country, and too much use of commas. This shouldn't be squashed up into one sentence.
 * Ignorance" was successful in Japan, charting within the top ten, peaking at number ten. Remove 'charting within the top ten'
 * The song also echoed similar chart success on Belgium's Singles Chart. Remove 'echoed' and replace with more appropriate word
 * It also charted at number forty two in Germany, as well as peaking at number ninety six on the Canadian Singles Top 100 chart. Don't mix two completely different countries together in one sentence.

Overall
 * All numbers need to be just that, numbers. eg. 'forty two' -> '42'.
 * Sort the sentences by countries, eg. first U.S, then Canada, then in a new paragraph talk about European countries.

Music video
 * The music video was released on August 13, 2009. Source?
 * When and where was it filmed? Who directed it?

Charts
 * Remove "chart procession and succession", we don't use that anymore.

References
 * #1 - fix it
 * #2 - fix date and needs access date
 * #5 - needs access date
 * #7 - dead link
 * #10 - this looks messy

Overall
 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


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 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
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I'm sorry but I am delisting this GA, seven days was ample time to address the issues. Till I Go Home (talk) 00:06, 5 February 2012 (UTC)