Talk:Igor Zotikov/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: SpaceEconomist192 (talk · contribs) 12:19, 17 August 2023 (UTC)

Discussion
Hello. Just to let you know that I've finished my initial review and I'm placing the article on hold. SpaceEconomist192 ✐  18:17, 17 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I will be working on getting the article up to par within the next 6 days.
 * Hello. Since more than 6 days have passed and no edits have been made, I will do the courtesy of extending this review until the end of the month. Please try to address the suggestions until then, otherwise I'll have to fail the article. Many thanks. SpaceEconomist192  ✐ 10:56, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank you, I appreciate it Jake Jakubowski talk 15:17, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Unfortunatly I need more time, go ahead and fail it and I will resubmit when I have more time. Thanks for all your input.
 * Alright, it was good working with you. If you want, when you resubmit it, you can ping me and we can continue where we left. SpaceEconomist   192  23:04, 29 August 2023 (UTC)

Infobox

 * List all notable Zotikov occupations (writer, academic, polar explorar) in its respective parameter.
 * Zotikov isn't known for a glacier namesake. I suggest putting something like «predicting the existence of fresh water lakes under the Antarctic ice sheet».
 * Zotikov isn't known for a glacier namesake. I suggest putting something like «predicting the existence of fresh water lakes under the Antarctic ice sheet».

Lead section

 * Per MOS:INTRO, the lead section should be made longer, it doesn't stand as a concise version of the article as of now.
 * Per MOS:DOC, the academic title «DSc» should be removed.
 * Per MOS:OPENPARABIO, the first sentence should not be overloaded with information. I suggest the following excerpt to be shortened, writer of scientific papers and books about Antarctica → writer and academic.
 * Zotikov was a Doctor of Science best known... Is it that relevant that he was a Doctor of Science? Doesn't seem so, I suggest the removal of the academic title.
 * best known for predicting fresh water lakes → best known for predicting the existence of fresh water lakes
 * Zotikov was a Doctor of Science best known... Is it that relevant that he was a Doctor of Science? Doesn't seem so, I suggest the removal of the academic title.
 * best known for predicting fresh water lakes → best known for predicting the existence of fresh water lakes
 * best known for predicting fresh water lakes → best known for predicting the existence of fresh water lakes
 * best known for predicting fresh water lakes → best known for predicting the existence of fresh water lakes

Early life and education

 * Per MOS:PARA, one-sentence paragraphs should be minimized. I suggest the junction of the first and second paragraphs.
 * ...myopia (near-sightedness). If you are worried that the reader won't know what myopia is, you can just wikilink near-sightedness instead, otherwise seems futile to have the two names for the same disease.
 * Decapitalize the first letter of «Geology» and wikilink it.
 * Decapitalize the first letter of «Glaciology».
 * Split the second sentence of the second paragraph into two, like this ...International Geophysical Year (IGY) of 1957-1958. He wrote his thesis...
 * ...Bottom melting in the central zone of the ice shield of the Antarctic continent and its influence upon the present balance of the ice mass. The title of thesis is too long and irrelevant, also the third paragraph should be conjoined with the second. I suggest the following rewrite:
 * «Zotikov wrote his thesis based on the findings from the expedition. The thesis was published in 1963 by the International Association of Hydrological Sciences. Zotikov's thesis discussed the interaction between the ocean and glaciation. Obtaining results from the IGY, regarding thermal physics of large ice sheets, it theoretically showed that in the central part of the ice sheet, there could be continuous melting and freshwater subglacial lakes underneath the Antarctic ice.»
 * Split the second sentence of the second paragraph into two, like this ...International Geophysical Year (IGY) of 1957-1958. He wrote his thesis...
 * ...Bottom melting in the central zone of the ice shield of the Antarctic continent and its influence upon the present balance of the ice mass. The title of thesis is too long and irrelevant, also the third paragraph should be conjoined with the second. I suggest the following rewrite:
 * «Zotikov wrote his thesis based on the findings from the expedition. The thesis was published in 1963 by the International Association of Hydrological Sciences. Zotikov's thesis discussed the interaction between the ocean and glaciation. Obtaining results from the IGY, regarding thermal physics of large ice sheets, it theoretically showed that in the central part of the ice sheet, there could be continuous melting and freshwater subglacial lakes underneath the Antarctic ice.»
 * ...Bottom melting in the central zone of the ice shield of the Antarctic continent and its influence upon the present balance of the ice mass. The title of thesis is too long and irrelevant, also the third paragraph should be conjoined with the second. I suggest the following rewrite:
 * «Zotikov wrote his thesis based on the findings from the expedition. The thesis was published in 1963 by the International Association of Hydrological Sciences. Zotikov's thesis discussed the interaction between the ocean and glaciation. Obtaining results from the IGY, regarding thermal physics of large ice sheets, it theoretically showed that in the central part of the ice sheet, there could be continuous melting and freshwater subglacial lakes underneath the Antarctic ice.»


 * ✅ for the rewrite suggestion.

Career

 * Decapitalize the first letter of «Glaciologist» and removed the wikilink (it's duplicated).
 * After receiving his Doctor of Sciences... In which year was this? A year is needed.
 * The third paragraph is still about the Ross Ice Shelf, so either combine it with the second or take the last sentence of the second paragraph and merge with the third, I suggest the latter.
 * A citation is needed for this sentence The National Science Foundation invited Zotikov to join the Ross Ice Shelf Project investigating whether freezing or melting occurs at the bottom of the Ross Ice Shelf.
 * A citation is needed for this sentence Both papers were published by the Cold Regions Research and Engineering Laboratory.
 * Decapitalize the first letter of «Director».
 * The project was conducted under the direction of Dr. Roger Barry... No need to name institute or the university, the center is enough.
 * Instead of listing the scholarly articles that Zotikov wrote, write a small description of its contents.
 * A citation is needed for this sentence Both papers were published by the Cold Regions Research and Engineering Laboratory.
 * Decapitalize the first letter of «Director».
 * The project was conducted under the direction of Dr. Roger Barry... No need to name institute or the university, the center is enough.
 * Instead of listing the scholarly articles that Zotikov wrote, write a small description of its contents.
 * The project was conducted under the direction of Dr. Roger Barry... No need to name institute or the university, the center is enough.
 * Instead of listing the scholarly articles that Zotikov wrote, write a small description of its contents.
 * Instead of listing the scholarly articles that Zotikov wrote, write a small description of its contents.

Books

 * I suggest the same as above, write a small description about the books instead of just listing their names. With so many books that Zotikov wrote surely this subsection can be greatly expanded.

Legacy and death

 * Per MOS:SECTIONCAPS, capitalize the first letter of the section title.
 * Besides the last two paragraphs, the others aren't really about his legacy nor death. They need to go to another (existing) section.
 * ✅ Two paragraphs went to Early life and education and one paragraph went to Career.
 * Remove the wikilink from «DSc» (it's repeated).
 * Per MOS:QUOTE, it is generally preferable to paraphrase the content instead of using quotations. There're two semi-long quotations near each other at end of the first paragraph and the start of the second, I suggest them to be paraphrased.
 * It occurred to him... This phrasing makes it seem like it was by chance that Zotikov thought about that, which clearly wasn't the case. This should be rewritten.
 * ...and that microorganisms could exist there. Why does Zotikov think that? This could potentially be expanded.
 * ...using the European Remote-Sensing Satellite's laser altimetry. What did the satellite do in order to find the lake/how does it work? A clarification is needed.
 * A subsequent paper was published in the journal Nature in 1996 co-authored by Zotikov. What is the paper about? A clarification is needed.
 * Decapitalize the first letter in «Prostate».
 * ...and that microorganisms could exist there. Why does Zotikov think that? This could potentially be expanded.
 * ...using the European Remote-Sensing Satellite's laser altimetry. What did the satellite do in order to find the lake/how does it work? A clarification is needed.
 * A subsequent paper was published in the journal Nature in 1996 co-authored by Zotikov. What is the paper about? A clarification is needed.
 * Decapitalize the first letter in «Prostate».
 * A subsequent paper was published in the journal Nature in 1996 co-authored by Zotikov. What is the paper about? A clarification is needed.
 * Decapitalize the first letter in «Prostate».
 * Decapitalize the first letter in «Prostate».

Recognition and awards

 * Per MOS:PROSE, this section should be written in prose. Maybe develop a little why he was given those medal/badges/gratitude.

References check

 * All references numbers are of this version.
 * Checked reference #2, #3, #6, #10, #15, #16 and #19.
 * Reference #2 is a blog, not reliable.
 * Reference #3 doesn't cover the material its citing.
 * Is it possible to have a news article about Zotikov's death to complement source #15?
 * Reference #16 is a self-published source, not reliable.

Copyvio check

 * Earwig's Copyvio Detector points to 24,2% (due to publications titles) (some sources are in Russian)

Image check

 * Checked images, they have an appropriate copyright statutes and they are relevant. The first image has no caption, which per MOS:CAPTION is appropriate for portraits, which is the case, though the year the photo was taken would be a good addition.