Talk:Illusory correlation/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Delldot (talk · contribs) 01:21, 17 January 2013 (UTC)

Hi, good work so far. Unfortunately I'm going to fail this for now because of lack of depth. One of the GA criteria states that the article needs to cover the topic comprehensively. I'll go into further detail below. If you'd like to keep working and improving the article I think that'd be great and I'm glad to help, whether or not you're interested in nominating it for GA again. Here's more detail on my current concerns with the article.


 * The article does not cover the topic in enough depth. It needs to be substantially expanded.  The section that is linked to in the history section, Rorschach test, is fascinating and goes into much more detail than we have here.  There's also more depth at Stereotype.  This shows me that we could have a much more in-depth article here than we have now.


 * The lead section does not effectively summarize the article. All topics addressed in the article need to be summarized in the lead (e.g. the history).  But what we have so far is good!


 * The article is not written very clearly. The language needs to be simplified so any layperson can understand it, that's who's going to be reading an encyclopedia article on the topic.  So we need to get rid of technical jargon and language.  e.g. explain what  working-memory is rather than just linking to it.


 * Lacks images. We could make one like figure 1.5 in this book with a different example (e.g. pain and bad weather or whatever).  We can also use images to illustrate examples, e.g.

Like I said, if you're interested in improving the article, let me know (by leaving me a message on my talk page) and I'll be happy to help however I can. There's the possibility of expanding it enough that it will one day merit GA status. This will take a great deal of writing, but if you're up for the task I'm glad to help however you need. But please don't renominate this at GAN if you just make minor changes without adding substantial content. Thank you for contributing and imporving the 'pedia! delldot  &nabla;.  01:21, 17 January 2013 (UTC)