Talk:Imperial Bedroom/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 01:17, 1 September 2022 (UTC)


 * Copyvio check - I reviewed the top few matches from Earwing's Copyvio Detector. No concerns.


 * Images: FUR provided for the album cover. Other images are CC. Captions and positioning are fine. The album cover doesn't have alt text. I didn't see any directly-relevant images of Costello on Commons, but you could consider adding one of him.
 * Added the alt text. The only question is...which one? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:18, 2 September 2022 (UTC)
 * The new images seem fine. Adding a pic of Costello is optional. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:26, 3 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Sounds good – zmbro (talk) (cont) 22:29, 3 September 2022 (UTC)


 * Sources
 * No unresolved issues.

Background
 * "had only reached the top 30" - maybe add something about the performance of his earlier albums. A collection of out-takes reahing the top 30 doesn't sound too bad, without the context.
 * Valid point. Fixed; this also makes "another massive success akin to Armed Forces" later on make more sense


 * I'd omit "Additionally," but it's OK to retain it.
 * Add year for Almost Blue
 * " himself the artist," - " himself as an artist,"?
 * Could wikilink Devon - I'm not sure how well known it is internationally.
 * "an eight-track album" made me think of 8-track tape but it's fine to retain.
 * All above done

Recording and production
 * "came from Trust" - mention it was an out-take (or whatever)
 * It was actually only written during that time not recorded, but I clarified that


 * "road-tested" seems a bit informal
 * performed live? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:18, 2 September 2022 (UTC)
 * That would be fine. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:26, 3 September 2022 (UTC)


 * "The vast experimentation utilised unusual instruments" - maybe just something like "The group utilised unusual instruments"?
 * Done


 * "Costello stated that his performance led him to rewrite the number" - specify the "his" if not Costello, or "his own" if it is.
 * Clarified


 * "Nieve's piano exerts itself prominently throughout the songs" - reword; I know what this is getting at, but "piano exerts itself" doesn't seem appropriate
 * Done


 * " the last of which the band" - "the latter...", or "the second..."
 * Done

Music and lyrics
 * [11][9][29][30] - refs out of order. Also consider WP:BUNDLING
 * Done


 * "an old cabaret poster he saw in a hotel dining room" - is the "he" Costello, or the character?
 * Clarified


 * "embellishes 1960s psychedelia" - I haven't read the Perone source, but isn't it more like "recalls..." or "echoes..." or something?
 * Fixed


 * the last line, "love and unhappiness go arm in arm", - I don't think this is actaully the last line, is it?
 * You're right...it's not. That's awkward. Removed 'last'


 * "Gouldstone sparks further discussion in God's Comic," - not sure "sparks further discussion" is the right phrase.
 * provides? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:18, 2 September 2022 (UTC)
 * That's fine. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:26, 3 September 2022 (UTC)

Artwork and packaging
 * Seems fine. (I remember first seeing the LP lyric sheet - amazing!)

Release and promotion
 * "To fill the time," seems redundant.
 * .[10][1][8] ref. ordering
 * Both fixed

Critical reception
 * Is "Most critics were unanimous in their admiration.." based on the content of the sources, or that there were four review that expressed admiration?
 * Changed to 'several'


 * [16][25][54][55] - consider WP:BUNDLING
 * Done


 * "but viewed it both positively and negatively" - tweak wording, unless the point is that particular critics viewed "both positively and negatively"
 * "viewed it in both positive and negative lights"? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:18, 2 September 2022 (UTC)
 * How about something like "this attracted both positive and negative reactions"? BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:26, 3 September 2022 (UTC)


 * "Considine deduced" - I don;t think "deduced" is quite the right word
 * Changed to 'stated'

Tour and aftermath
 * "The singer boasted more friendly on-stage demeanor throughout" - not sure "boasted" is right here; more friendly than what? (Previous tours, I suppose)
 * Clarified


 * Embraced by funk and R&B flavours," - "Embracing funk and R&B flavours,"?
 * Fixed

Retrospective appraisal
 * Seems fine.

Reissues
 * Seems fine.

Track listing
 * No source mentioned.
 * Sourced 2002 liner since that should suffice – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:18, 2 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Yes, suitable for this. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:26, 3 September 2022 (UTC)

Personnel
 * No issues.

Charts
 * No issues.

Notes
 * Page/chapter references for notes d and e would help verification.

References
 * Sources seem to be appropriate. I spot checked a few whilst reading through, no concerns.

Infobox and Lead
 * No issues.

Fine work again,. I made a couple of minor edits. Revert any that aren't appealing. Feel free to challenge any of my comments above. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:05, 1 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for picking this up so quickly. I really didn't expect that (considering no one's taken Trust and Blue yet) so I went in and added some links and images, etc, before I started on your comments. Thanks again for reviewing. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:19, 2 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm enjoying the articles and learning more about the albums from them. I jumped on Imperial Bedroom as I count it amongst Costello and the Attractions' masterpieces. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:26, 3 September 2022 (UTC)
 * All changes made so we should be all set. Thanks again for reviewing so quickly! – zmbro (talk) (cont) 22:29, 3 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm satisfied that the article meets the GA criteria so am passing it. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:50, 3 September 2022 (UTC)